Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@kyronthearcanin Ok! I really love the idea.

@kyronthearcanin Yea true. Oo I like the shapeshifter idea. But idk how that sounds or how it would tie in with the story.. unless someone else wants to lend the creative juices bc I’m fresh out XD

@kyronthearcanin I think the stakes were fine there! I would suggest you build it up a bit more in the next chapter (although you already said you were going to do that). And it is a first draft, so you don’t have to get it perfect the first time.

I’m liking this so far!! Rina’s healing magic is cool.

@godlyfantasy12 wait a sec, Ridley has one eye? Did he lose it somehow, or was it like a mutation or something? @loopylin @esther-c @kyronthearcanin

Rampart

Ridley thrashed for a bit before stopping.

His little human nails apparently weren’t useless after all. He’d drawn blood with them while clutching the sides of his head.

His eye glowed…[Read more]

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Derek

Derek watched as Ridley ran down the hall. He had a fleeting thought to chase after him, but he decided it was best to let him be.

Derek ran a hand through his hair and looked down at his dark combat boots. That kid… something was, not wrong, but different about him… and that som…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Yep, what they (@kyronthearcanin and @euodia-vision) said! XD

@kyronthearcanin

I’m behind on the reading, just finished chapter 5

So…Dune looks like a cat??? XD I went the entire first four chapters thinking he was a bird. *facepalm*

AAaand now I’ve finished chapter six.

Okay, I love this group. They’re hilarious, this is going to be fun.

I’m tired and so don’t have any suggestions for you, I’m sorry.

@freedomwriter76 @loopylin @esther-c @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @whalekeeper @keilah-h @gwyndalf-the-wise @princesachronicle22 @mineralizedwritings

HEYOO!!

so…..I wrote some today…

And…as I was writing…something took a bit of a turn and I was like HEH!!! Ok angst time XD

so, I couldn’t figure out totally what I wanted to do for th…[Read more]

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Oooooh! This story is getting really good! I dont know how to add on though…. Does anyone else? Here it is so far!

One bright sunny day, I watched a girl leap over a rotten log and land with a splash in a muddy puddle. She was beautiful,daring and braver tha…[Read more]

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Derek

“How long have you been here?” Ridley finally asked after a slight awkward pause.

Derek tilted his head to the side and shrugged. “Just a little bit. An hour at the most.”

Ridley nodded.

The two were silent once again. For some reason, Derek was having a hard time being his friendl…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin I like the chapters so far!

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Yeah, that makes sense. Again, I like it because it does drive the plot, but it would be good for the characters to recognize their mistakes. It would make sense for Dune, because of his anger and frustration with Korwin, and Rina makes sense, I just wasn’t sure if you were meaning for her to actually be correct in her…[Read more]

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Rampart

“So, you’re an admiral? Don’t you need to be getting back to your fleet or something?” The wolflike creature walked up to him.

“I should be.” Rampart hissed, his tail lashing. “Although there are other dragons who’ll take care of my job for now.”

More like take over my job for me..…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Sorry I took so long to finally take the time to read this.

Chapter 4 Looks good, but a few things:

The way your referring to time on Lacertillia is very confusing, as it doesn’t seem to regard it as a planet orbiting a sun. There would be no peak point for the sun to rise, that’s only meaningful on a local scale on the planet,…[Read more]

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Ridley

The older man was stepping over to him. Ridley’s chest thumped.

He averted his gaze from the large wound that stuck from the man’s chest, the one only he could see.

He could only pray the ability would subside in a few moments…

“You said your name’s Ridley?”

Ridley nodded obediently.…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin He can’t breathe fire. Some of his scales light up though, and he can breathe underwater (think SeaWing from Wings of Fire, that’s what his kind is based off of)

@godlyfantasy12 @loopylin @esther-c

Rampart

The little girl–Madeline?–hopped away from Ridley…

…and toward him.

“Hello!” she chirped. “I don’t mean to be rud…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Hey! I’m on if we want to try the link again XD

@godlyfantasy12 Ridley’s powers are so cool! That was really fun to read, and it fit Maddie and Sam perfectly. (poor Sam)

@kyronthearcanin @keilah-h @esther-c

Madeline

Madeline skipped cheerfully away from Ridley. The boy was interesting – he had pretty eyes – but she was currently much more interested in the giant winged man who stood abo…[Read more]

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Rampart

Rampart introduced himself and Ridley. “Well, nice to meet you,” said the wolflike creature. “Do you live here? Or were you just randomly here like us? I must say, if you live here, I like the style.”

Did he seriously think that? “No, we don’t live here.” Rampart growled…[Read more]