Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@whalekeeper interesting!

@rae @keilah-h

Sounds like a developmental disability. I’m not too familiar the terminology, but my brother has a brain shunt, so I’ve met a lot of people disabled in that area.

Barnes

“My name is Commissioner Barnes. Nice to meet you.” The woman shook Reid’s hand, took off her cape coat and draped it over her arm. She approached a nearby…[Read more]

@theducktator

Crosshair

“My guess is that we will encounter at least three more people. Rarely do adventures have only two. Who are you anyway? Do you want to see if we can find a secret passage or a long lost dying king or a dragon or library or something?” the girl–Ayla–asked.

Seas of Kamino, she talks a lot, Crosshair thought. Although s…[Read more]

@rae ahhh ok!

just wondering!

@rae aww Tenz is kinda sweet, what mental issues exactly does he have?

@rae

Barnes

“I’m Hugo, the Sharkman’s son.” He blinked heavily. “I’m not… heavy…”

The boy went slack, and his thin legs quickly collapsed. Tenz picked him up and handed him to his companion.

“Do you two gentlemen know of a locomotive which stopped nearby?” Barnes asked. When they shook their heads, she tried again. “How else did you come here?…[Read more]

@rae

Aw thx for the help Tenz

(Starting a minute before your charries walked in)

Barnes

Hugo refused her handkerchief for the third and last time. He seemed to be doing alright; Commissioner Barnes wasn’t going to risk losing her only lead besides herself. She refrained from talking about the matter any longer.

The two made a strange pair.…[Read more]

@rae Tenz and Reid are free to meet up with us if you’d like that

@rae

Aw thanks :]

I want to add Hugo, if that’s okay :] Dude cares about people and won’t bother anyone.

Barnes

The hallway went for quite some time, eventually opening into a complex of stairwells. Barnes passed one before quickly retracing her steps.

On the bottom of the stairs lay a person. It was Hugo, the young man who belonged to a horrible criminal org…[Read more]

Okay, anyone can bump into mine. I promise she doesn’t bite that hard.

Commissioner Barnes

A thin line of light fell over Barnes’ face, and she blinked behind her mask.

She leaned forward, and fell out of two swinging wardrobe doors, tripping on her petticoat. Her knees landed on solid stone floor.

The pain didn’t bother her quite as much…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Thanks so much!! I’ll definitely be referring back to your post. 🙂

@rae you can totally join!

@theshadow haha yep! I’ll try to find a video of him playing it or something

@whalekeeper nooooo I don’t want twenty-three characters to disappear into nothing forever

lol it’s your story do whatever you want and ignore my weird rants haha

This is all speculating from reading books that do this; I’m no expert 😅

I know you already got help from Min and I don’t have much to say 🙂 But a couple things.

I keep using the same phrases to describe my character’s struggles, thought processes, or even how they’re interpreting the themes in their own lives.

It might help to not say those phrases at all. Brainstorm all the easiest ways to say your theme in the story…[Read more]

Little late here, but @mineralizedwritings @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint great art from all three of you 🙃 Everyone keeps improving so quickly.