Keilah H.

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Thanks for the feedback! I thing I will go with this then.

In regards to your suggestion, Ellette, I think I might go with something that. I noticed in those paragraphs, I had fallen back into the narration style I used in the first draft. (Awkward! Overly Defensive!) This is probably part of why it feels odd to you.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.

@keilah-h

Lol thank you.

@the_lost-journal

🤨

@keilah-h

Cool, lol. I’ll probably have him in the back of my mind now every time I write with my Emmerich XD.

@linus-smallprint   @keilah-h

thank you both for the sympathy and prayers!!

Great timing!

thank you!! I was proud of that one. 😂

oh dear! I hope you end up liking Roland then. 😅

I promise it was completely coincidental.
this time.

@esther-c

Awesome!

@keilah-h

Sure thing.

@calyhuge Yes…I think that applies to me even…I’ve done that before, and it doesn’t go well.

@liberty @keilah-h

Thanks ladies!! I will definitely consider that!

@theducktator

Thank you!! Yes, I love it too!

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h

The others:@power  @calyhuge  @whalekeeper   @theducktator  @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal  @trailblazer  @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley  @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity  @savannah_grace2009  @koshka

Please pard…[Read more]

@esther-c @keilah-h

Would some more time help?

@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @keilah-h @stephie @theducktator

Before I move on to writing the first draft of book II, I want to get a feel for how writing my magic system with the changes I decided to make. I have rewritten Chapter the 30th to get this. What do you think? If you think this works, I will replace what I currently have in my second…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

Okay, little UPDATE y’all.

We had a death in the family. (don’t worry, not someone I even met before. He was on my dad’s side of the family and they’re all messed up.) Anyhow, due to craziness and the fact that my dad is the only sane person on that sid…[Read more]

@keilah-h

yeahhhh lol

@keilah-h

Woah!

surprise surprise mom and dad.

XD

@keilah-h

Nice!!! A little close to leepday! That would have been sad. XD

@keilah-h

AWESOME!!

When’s your birthday?

@keilah-h

also I’m still laughing about “bRiNg a MeLoN” lollll

It’s my favorite thing ever hahaha

@keilah-h

It’s really, really good!

@keilah-h

yessss I get like this too, I decide a scene is cringey, but I like it too much to remove it.

YES YES YES YES YESSSSSS

that’s the most relatable thing I’ve heard XDXD

What are they gonna do to Sef’s little sis?

Well…its kinda a long story and it’s gonna give away a lot (I also need to flesh out the plot wayyy more)

When I have all m…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Okay…. so here is where I hit a slight problem. Leon and Julian use a very different script which is how you tell their writing apart. However, those fonts don’t transfer. So, I’ll italicize anything Julian writes, and have anything Le…[Read more]