Keilah H.

@theducktator

If you want, I have a character in the school that you can have your characters meet. I haven’t written anything for him yet but I will in a bit.

Dante

“Banned for life! Ya got that? Show your face around here again and I’m calling the cops!”

Dante Tucker found himself being forcefully thrown out of a shop at seven in the morning and into the street. A poorly trimmed bush by the sidewalk broke his fall.

“… One-eyed freak.”

The front door slammed behind him.

Dante picked himself u…[Read more]

@hybridlore

no!!! I can’t access this without my laptop!! 😭😭😭😭

I’ll let you know what I think the minute I get home!!

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy.

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.

@to-whom-it-may-concern

If it’s okay, I’d like to add some characters. They’re all from the same WIP, but they don’t know each other.

Vyette

She’s an earth elemental. She is fairly tall, at 5′ 9”, and has medium brown skin, green eyes, and black braids streaked with green. Her father is the (rich) vice president, and she is an arrogant snob…[Read more]

@koshka @loopylin

Rax and Ben

Rax and Ben followed as well, for their next class was Foreign Literature as well. Rax saw that Syph was beginning to grow discomfort being surrounded by the much larger people. “Would you like to hop on my shoulder again?”

@ellette-giselle

thx.

I did have a scene before this one, but I didn’t deem it ready for posting, since there are a few things I want to smooth out first. Hopefully that scene will make it flow better.

@rae

I like this a lot!! This section is good. I was trying to remember what happened beforehand. So far the stories have flowed, even though they are individual stories. This one seems a little out of place regarding the last one.

otherwise, i like this!!

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry for not posting in eight days. I hit Writer’s Block while trying to edit the next story to go on here and writing the next one 🙁

I’m not sure how long until I can post the full thing, but until then, I’m gonna post a snippet of the next…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

awesome! Glad I could be of help.

I think we’re all a little defensive of our stuff. 😂

I remember when you kept criticizing Aaron I was crushed because he’s a lot like me and I felt like you were criticizing me and saying I was a cardboard cutout. It took a few weeks for me to separate myself from him and see your cri…[Read more]

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@liberty

Feb. 15 sounds good, thx

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?

Yes

What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?

Seems solid.

Now that you’ve seen some more, what are your thoughts on the similarities between Eric and Kalmar?

I think it’s d…[Read more]

I just found out there will be no more pennies.😭😭😭They were my favorite coin. RIP.

@loopylin

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

Lol, okay. I think I will add a couple characters there.