@jonas
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Ah, that’s too bad! ☹️ My family has been taking turns being sick for the last three week, and we’re finally all healthy.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
“Reason?” repeated Riina. “There was no good reason to throw a knife at me! And I’m pretty sure I’m the one who gets to decide if we’re good!” She crossed her arms and glared (harder) at him. “My name is Riina, but you can call me ‘your Hoodedness,’ ‘cause I don’t like you.”
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago
Cause it usu Sounds weird.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
“Well you kind of owe me an apology,” snapped Riina. “For the whole knife throwing thing. But at this point, I don’t think I’m going to get one out of your ugly mouth!”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
This was not going how it was supposed to at all! Riina changed tactics.
“Hmm…” she said. “So your looks must be a reflection of your soul. That explains a lot.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 years, 3 months ago
Me too.
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago
Just…don’t do present tense.
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Cause it usu Sounds weird.
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Cause it sounds weird? Was that what you were saying? After a bit, your brain shifts, and you dont even notice it. I like it with first person, as long as it isn’t just for no reason.
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@jonas I personally LOVE doing first person present tense, but not third person present. Because I switch both tenses and person, I often have no problem with my brain gears.
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Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
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@jonas @rae
I’m just gonna jump in on this conversation lol…
I also LOVE first person present tense…but I HATE…I mean HATE third person present…unless of course I’m writing a certain depressing short story about my life a couple months ago heh…heh….OH! I cannot STAND second person…*retches over the side of the bed* Like WHO in their…[Read more] -
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story. -
@jonas
I know! That’s the sad part…no fun characters ):
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
Ha! That was the worst thing he could have said. Riina pasted a horrified expression on her face and gasped.
“You mean you feel no guilt at all for throwing a knife at an innocent girl? What happened to your conscience? Have you murdered it?”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Okay. Let’s see how this goes 😆
Riina
Riina spotted the guy who had thrown a knife at her, Junior, walking through the crowd. Riina was about to swerve to avoid him, when another idea crossed her mind and she grinned.
She hopped forward through a portal and appeared in front of him. Surprising portal entrances tend to give her a t…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic The Heist (RP) in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
@rae @highscribeofaetherium @both-torres @whalekeeper
(KP ate my post!)
Allow me to get us up and rolling again.
Kazriac
Kazriac stood silently in the dark room for sometime. He heard voices outside, arguing. Hunans and their petty squabbles. Still he waited. He was patient. There was no reason to rush when you were immortal.
Finally, things…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic The Heist (RP) in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
@rae @highscribeofaetherium @beth-torres @whalekeeper
Allow me to get us ip and rolling again.
Kazriac
Kazriac stoid silently in the dark room for sometime. He heard voices outside, arguing. Hunans and their petty squabbles. Still he waited. He was patient. There was no reason to rush when you were immortal.
Finally, things escalated to the…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 3 months ago
Just so you know, it seems that you have that google doc set up as view only. It would probably be more useful if you had it so that we can make comments, but that’s up to you.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Magic Systems!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Yeah, that could definitely have some unique impacts. That being said, I feel like changing the mass kind of defeats the idea of the mass shifting. It definitely could be a related ability, but perhaps those would could use the two powers in tandem would be a more rare bunch.
I guess it would probably make the most sense to have…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Hello, Humans! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 3 months ago
My problem with reading epic fantasy is when I start, I can’t stop, and my sleep schedule becomes thoroughly messed up. Last time I read an epic fantasy book, I read six hundred pages in a span of less than 24 hours and got about 4 hours of sleep…
Lol. I can’t stop either. I got all four books of the Stormlight Archive for my bir…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Hello, Humans! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 3 months ago
(he coined the terms hard and soft btw).
Really? Huh. I didn’t know that. I feel like I’ve been aware of those terms for a super long time, but I didn’t read any of his books until last summer.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
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You and I are the only ones who have RPed recently. Idk what to have happen. If this RP us to get back on its feet, we can’t be the only ones trying. Someone, help!
You haven’t gone in a long time.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Magic Systems!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
That’s fair! I think the system has potential, though I do think it needs more of a mechanic to it. A version of telekinesis is cool, but what really sets it apart from normal telekinetic power? There’s the restriction to only cinders, and there’s some specific rules, but I think there could be more of a unique mechanic overa…
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
It’s possible Riina could do it, but he did throw a knife at her head, so…
It’s possible that that could motivate her to humiliate him, but only if she had reason to think it would work. I’ll try to come up with something. We’ll see…
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Magic Systems!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Ok, so cinderblazing sounds interesting. What I want to know is what makes the voidflame different? Is it inherently evil, or is it simply the anti particle of cinderflame, and if so, in what ways does it have opposite behaviors?
I don’t really have answers to any of those questions XD. I liked the idea of having a weird sort of f…[Read more]
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Cause it sounds weird? Was that what you were saying? After a bit, your brain shifts, and you dont even notice it. I like it with first person, as long as it isn’t just for no reason.
@jonas I personally LOVE doing first person present tense, but not third person present. Because I switch both tenses and person, I often have no problem with my brain gears.
Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
@jonas @rae
I’m just gonna jump in on this conversation lol…
I also LOVE first person present tense…but I HATE…I mean HATE third person present…unless of course I’m writing a certain depressing short story about my life a couple months ago heh…heh….OH! I cannot STAND second person…*retches over the side of the bed* Like WHO in their…[Read more]
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story.
@jonas
I know! That’s the sad part…no fun characters ):