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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Well, I guess that conversation is over. Riina might just be sulking the rest of this scene, so she might not show up again until we move on. I’m not sure how much longer we’re planning on making this part.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Junior also managed to penetrate Riina’s layer of casual flamboyance. When that happens, she lashes out.
Riina
Riina heard Junior’s knife clatter to the ground, but she didn’t turn around. Huh. So he actually felt that. Well, serves him right.
She strode through the portal and closed it behind her.
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Well, that conversation sure d…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
Riina recoiled as Junior burst into an angry rant. She clenched her fists. She felt like doing something mildly violent, like giving him a good shove, or punching him through a portal, but she didn’t want to be responsible for setting off a rampage.
“You know what?” she snarled at him through gritted teeth. “You’re not just prideful,…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Back Stories, the thing that shapes life in the forum Characters 2 years, 3 months ago
Well…they’re evil for a reason…because they have a TRAGIC BACKSTORY!! bwahaha!
I remember that scene. But I thought that all Pythonos were just evil by nature?
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
“Hmm.. so you don’t have any actual argument against what I just said. If you’re bored, I could always make this more interesting…but you probably wouldn’t like it.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic What is the cringiest thing you've ever written? in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
The magic cabinets are from the series 100 Cupboards by N. D. Wilson. Light’s story is a continuation of a story from the Wingfeather Tales book, which was some sort of crossover with 100 Cupboards.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
HighScribe is correct. That is how you spell ricochet.
Riina
Riina couldn’t help but think that Junior was not entirely stable. She scowled.
“Whatever authority you have back home doesn’t count here, genius,” she informed him. “If it did, then I would outrank them to, but clearly they disagree. And so what if you accidentally hurt yours…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
I think the world was made up for this RP. @Rae has been in charge of it mostly, and owns seven or so characters that are from this world. I don’t think the world itself has a name, but the main country which they are trying to save is called Lillen. (The people are called Lillenings.) Queen Silvae used magic to bring in t…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Okay! Yeah, if you want I can give you an extended background for what is happening right now, since it’s pretty confusing.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
“What does your dad have to do with this?” said Riina. “I don’t think humility is an inherited trait. And if it is, you must have missed out on that one. You want me to prove that you’re prideful? Fine, but you can’t get offended, since you literally asked for this.”
She held up her hand and began to count off on her fingers.
“You w…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago
This is the technical side to present tense. Present tense adde immediacy—it feels like it’s happening *right now.* This is really good in some specific scenarios, but there’s one major problem. It is hard to maintain, it’s exhausting to read something long in present tense. Second person should almost always be present tense, and first person…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
“Me?” exclaimed Riina. “I’m as humble as anyone. You, sir, are the one in need of some humility!”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
“Mmm… not a particularly good one,” said Riina. “You could have thrown it at the nosy old guy. He would have actually deserved it.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic LOTR: Fellowship of the Ring in the forum Book Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Spoilers again
I have read the books, it was probably only about a year ago that I last did, but I didn’t particularly notice anything. I don’t think it’s completely sudden in the movies. There is that scene on the mountain where the ring is on the ground and he picks it up. I think that’s a little too obvious actuall…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story. -
Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic LOTR: Fellowship of the Ring in the forum Book Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
@everyone
My family has been listening to LOTR on audiobook (the Andy Serkis version, which is really good!) and I had a thought/question that I thought I’d share.
Warning: Spoilers for the end The Fellowship of the Ring and the first chapter of The Two Towers.
I kind of felt that Boromir was significantly less sympathetic i…[Read more] -
Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
Riina
Riina cocked her head. “You’re weird,” she said, the corners of her mouth twitching slightly. “You can’t just go throwing knives at people. You need a reason to throw knives, not a reason to not throw knives! I’d say that’s a pretty basic rule of living.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Lost in a haunted mansion AU Roleplay in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 3 months ago
This RP sure hasn’t gotten off well!
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 2 years, 3 months ago
Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
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@freedomwriter76 I’m not saying it’s bad to read, but when it comes to writing…I like the big picture. Besides, I write from the POV of Ru Eis most the time, and since she researches the events, they can’t really work well for Present Tense. It’d be like Laura Hillenbrand doing present tense for Unbroken.