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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Good, I’m glad Leon’s back story felt natural.
Yes, it is going to be a little harder. Julian may want to curb his eagerness…..
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
So, Ardentans are very tall. (Averaging on the higher end of six feet for men, and the lower end of six feet for women)
The people of the Empire are more average, perhaps a little on the shorter side. Leon and Julian are considered tall in their country, but they are only about the height of average Ardentan women.
Lol. I just always…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION! 2
It was after sunset, and Julian and Leon were walking alone in the dim light. “So, how should we go about this?” Julian asked.
“I say the same as we did when on the run in Ardenta. We’ll try to get a place to sleep with a family, shar…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!
(In case anyone hasn’t noticed, I’m starting out small because this is the beginning after all. I think the sections will get bigger soon, and I’ll also maybe post some more today.)
Julian sat down on a rock by the path and drew in several dee…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
Rory
A sound stabbed into the peaceful blackness, dragging Rory back to the world. A the next moment he had spun to his feet, tripping slightly over whatever was tangled about him. He threw out a hand to steady himself and almost fell. “Yes sir, here sir,” He said hurriedly, before grouping for his gun.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 8 months ago
Oooo!!!! I really like this!!! This is getting good! I was really laughing during the doll scene!
Hmm, I would give him Romans 3:23
for all have sinned and fall short of the glory of God, and all are justified freely by his grace through the redemption that came by Christ Jesus.
At least, that’s the verse that came to mind while I was…[Read more]
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic The Quote Archive in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
The same priest would do push-up competitions whenever he came to an event XD
Last time I think he did like thirty push-ups? I dunno
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic The Quote Archive in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
That’s hilarious. At one retreat a priest tried to convince us that anyone who was baptised had “rizz.”
Basically: Rizz is short for charisma. In Greek, the original language of the New Testament, one of the words used for the gifts of the Holy Spirit was “charism” (I think I’m remembering this right) and that basically means…[Read more]
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 year, 8 months ago
XD XD I didn’t end up getting my throat blessed because the line was really long and I was like “huh, you know what, that isn’t necessary so whatever.”
I have a sore throat
*cries*
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 year, 8 months ago
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 8 months ago
Thanks! Our locks are being replaced for cheaper than we thought, so that’s good.
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 8 months ago
I did bid ChatGPT to rephrase, “Just add ketchup to mac n’ cheese,” and lo! This is the result it hath bestowed upon me! XD
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 8 months ago
Thank you!
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 8 months ago
@people,Idon’tknowwhototag
Today, after church, we were getting ready to go and my dad put his “murse” (man purse) on the table in the entrance of the church. He was gone for maybe a minute before we were ready to leave and gathering up the stuff, and it was gone.
Mom went outside.
The van was gone too.
So yeah–the van was stolen, as well as…[Read more]
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic First Draft Blues in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
My question is, how do you tough through some of the sections which aren’t as fun to write? And how do you motivate yourself to keep going when your finished sections look pretty bad?
I hear you.
And I have no solutions. *shrugs* If anyone comes up with any…lemme know XD
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Ellette Giselle posted an update 1 year, 8 months ago
So……
I FINISHED!!!!
I had a crazy week,l but I was finally able to sit down yesterday and I read the whole thing!
It was well done. I like the story so much, and I’m really looking forward to the next book!!! I’m really excited for it! I definitely love Riker the best still, and I’m very happy that he and Leon have…[Read more] -
Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 8 months ago
yeah I threw in the chosen thing just to give a mini heart attack to everyone reading 😂😂
I sure had one.
Terrible person.
😂😂 lololol. jkjk
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 1 year, 8 months ago
Oooo! I love her!!! You have such a good touch when it comes to aesthetics!
Haha, the book I just tagged you two on is certainly a glorifying God in dark topics………….
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Esther posted an update 1 year, 8 months ago
Ok, I’m tagging a lot of people for this, but don’t feel obligated to reply.
So, I’ve gotten stuck in my current WIP, but as I work through that slowly, I want to return to an older WIP that I worked on over the summer and really want to refine. It’s only in a first draft, but I’d like to have a critique partner for it.
The type of critique…[Read more]-
Actually, I’mma remake the moodboards, hehehe. So they shall be revealed later this week. :PP
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I replied but didn’t tag you. Not sure if you got it.
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I would be willing to try and help with this. You know my views on Romance are rather different than norm, and I believe highschool romantic relationships aren’t healthy. But I’m willing to give it a shot.
I also do edit. I’m not a line-by-line editor, but I have worked as a plot/character/story editor before.
We do have different beliefs on…[Read more]-
I appreciate the offer!! Truly!
But like you said, we might not work super well together because of our different viewpoints. So yeah, right now I’d say no, but I will keep you in mind! :))-
No problem! I can be your last resort if no one else offers. 😉
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Sounds good. 😉 Let me know if you want to be tagged when I post the chapters on here some time! :))
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Mm. Sounds interesting, but I’m totally unqualified. I don’t think I’d be able to help much… Sorry… 😅😑
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Hey no worries! 🤗
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I’m sorry, I don’t think I can help you 🙁
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That’s totally fine, girl! ☺️
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I’m definitely interested in reading your novel, but I’ve read almost no YA, so I wouldn’t be much help.
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No worries! I’ll be sure to tag you tho when I start sharing it on here!!
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Awesome! 🙂
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@esther-c I would love to help! This went into my spam for some reason, so I’m sorry I didn’t get back to you. Are you still looking for someone?
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Actually…I think you might be perfect. You gave some great feedback on my short story, so I’m sure you could do the same for my novel! :))
I’ll PM you later this week with more details and the link to the doc. Thank you so much!!! 🤗-
Awesome! I love family and sibling dynamics, and I also read a good amount of YA, so this seems right up my alley! (Although I won’t be able to help much with the 90s references, haha.)
Do you still have my email from the short story critique?-
Yay yay!! (Oh I know, right?? I’ve asked my parents and some other older writers I’ve met through KDWC, and even though they gave me a lot to use [plus Google, lol], there’s still something difficult about getting it right since I didn’t live then 🤪)
Yes I believe so!-
@esther-c Yeah, that totally makes sense! I was gonna say, ask your parents xD. But I’m sure it’s still difficult.
Great!! 😄
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I may have to get some YA recs from you sometime, because I struggle to find clean fiction that I would actually enjoy 😭
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Oh definitely! I’m sure I can come up with a list. Middle grade stuff can be great if it’s well done, because content is so much better. 😉
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@hybridlore
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For sure!! Until you come across that one middle school relationship that somehow works out perfectly. 😂
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Ok for some reason even though I still see your comments on the short story doc, it won’t let me view your email. 😅 Could you share that again with me so I can share the other doc?? I’ll tell you as soon as I see it if you don’t want to leave your email up.
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Awesome! Tysm!! I’ll probably send you the doc tomorrow since I need to make a few notes on it first. :))
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Ok I added you to the document! You should get an email about it I believe. (:
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Hoo boy. I’d love to, but uhhhh…I wouldn’t be any help. I’m a terrible critiquer and my romance experience is practically nil. You would probably help me more than I help you….sorry!
Funny enough though, my own romance work (a fanfic) took place in 1970 in New Mexico. What are the odds?
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Ahh, no problem! :))
No way! That’s so cool! XD-
Yeah it was just a consequence of how the original story was set up, but it’s funny to think about.
I doubt your characters will experience anything even close to mine though lol-
Oh dear, was it a Star Wars fanfic?? In that case, I hope my charries aren’t handling the types of weapons they use. 🤣
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No, it was something else, but yeah there were a lot of weapons involved XD
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My Star Wars fanfics don’t really cross over into our world. Yet.
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Though I suppose in a fanfic, you could do whatever 🤷🏻♀️
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Oh duhhhh 🤦🏻♀️ I’ve watched like all the Star Wars movies, I should know they don’t take place on earth 🤣
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lolllll no biggie.
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@ellette-giselle I am so, soooo glad you enjoyed Broken Shackles! 💜💜
Thank you so much for your support.
I’ve noted what you said and I can see where things got repetitive (something I’m still trying to work on😅). As far as Riker thinking his sins are greater, it honestly really depends. I based that part of his struggles based on my own battle…[Read more]
Oh I have enjoyed it! It was excellent!
I’m really, really looking forward to the last book! (I love endings, so I’m thinking it might be my fav!)
Anyhow, I hope that any criticism was helpful. Thank you again so much for writing these! You’re doing an amazing job and these books have been very inspiring!