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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 11 months ago
I forgot to mention that most of the things that you’ll find wrong with this thread have already been mentioned by others and have been either fixed or the chapters deleted and replaced.
I deleted the paragraphs about the races, and fixed multiple other problems. Maybe I need to make a new thread for the new and improved WIP, lol.
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 11 months ago
Okay, I’m using mani/mahnith. Thanks!
I know you asked me to tag you, so here’s the “thread” about my current WIP! If you read through all the comments (a daunting task, and don’t do it unless you REALLY WANT TO), you will find exerpts from my novel that I have revised and/or have replaced other chapters.
Sorry this…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Writing abuse in an allegory in the forum Plotting 2 years, 11 months ago
Okay!
I agree that it’s the best to have your parents’ on board about the topics you write about but I just don’t really have that. For example, my mom is very sensitive to reading about sad things, so she puts herself in the character’s place when she reads my stories, and it’s just hard for her to read. Same with…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
YAY YOU’RE BACK WE MISSED YOU!!!!! 🙂
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
Thanks! 🙂
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Allison replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
“Here,” Kari stepped closer to Ottoline and offered her her hand. “Pretend I’m the boy, and you’re the girl. The boy holds out his hand like so and asks, may I have this dance?” They both burst out laughing as Kari mocked Hugo’s deep voice. “
🤣 Thats great.
I will see if I have time to write a piece today!
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Allison replied to the topic Hi everyone! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 11 months ago
Hi! I’m Acancello, also known as Allison! I’m homeschooled and I love guinea pigs, dogs, traveling, acting, trying weird food, writing, reading, talking and a lot more 😁! I write Dystopian and post-apocalyptic books. I’m so glad you could come to Kingdom Pen! OK, now I’ll ask you some hopefully not already asked questions ὠ…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
@trailblazer @keilah-h @mineralizedwritings @esther-c @acancello (i think I got everyone?)
Ottoline
“Hold still!” Kari giggled as Ottoline dramatically dodged the wand of mascara.
“I’m sorry,” Ottoline laughed, “I’m not used to having people touch my face.” Well, that wasn’t entirely true. She had been struck multiple times, but never had her…[Read more]
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Kathleen replied to the topic The Lucid Wraith in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 11 months ago
Dude! This is incredible!
With how immersive the world and writing style is along with how much intrigue and mystery was jam-packed into this excerpt, I’m blown away! Why didn’t you tell me you were this good at writing?!
The first section was actually breathtaking. I could feel each word as if they came alive within my body and…[Read more]
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Kathleen replied to the topic Apologetics in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 years, 11 months ago
Hey! How’s it going?
I was just catching up on the most recent posts on this Apologetics forum as there always seem to be interesting conversations brewing here.
I’m totally down to continue our previous conversation or move to a new one (the questions you asked in your most recent posts are quite fascinating) do you have any…[Read more]
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Allison replied to the topic Preptober in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
I have not heard of Nanowrimo, so I cant give you any advice 🙂 But thanks for inviting me!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic The Lucid Wraith in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 11 months ago
I love this! Though it does get confusing, it’s the “good” kind, lol, and I would totally read the book.
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
@mineralizedwritings @esther-c
Yeah I did say only one character, but if you really, really want to add another one, I suppose you can, just for everyone else please only one charrie, because if everyone adds too this would be super chaotic.
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Ava Murbarger (Solfyre) replied to the topic The Lucid Wraith in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 11 months ago
Wow, I really love this!! The concept is definitely something I could never pull off, so great job there. And the characters were completely relatable. You’re very good at conveying emotions in your writing – something I still struggle with a lot, because I don’t do it well irl either lol. Anyway, awesome job!!
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Allison replied to the topic Paradise Lie recreated in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
Sara!! HI!! I missed you!🤗! How are you doing?
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Esther replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 11 months ago
Welcome to Kingdom Pen, Sarah!!
I’m Esther: a volleyball-playing, violin-squeaking, dog-obsessed, homeschooled, fiction-writing, God-loving, teen girl!
I wouldn’t say I’m a Tolkien geek, but I really enjoy what I’ve read by him. I’ve watched all the movies (which I know can be quite different from the books 😉 ) but I recently finished…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 11 months ago
Welcome to KP, Brianne!!
I’m Esther: a volleyball-playing, violin-squeaking, dog-obsessed, homeschooled, God-loving, teen girl!
I’m thirteen as well! (Well, almost fourteen.) And I’m homeschooled too! I think that there are a lot of homeschoolers on here. 😉
So cool that you’ve visited Denmark!! I would love to visit Europe…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Hi. I'm RAE in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 11 months ago
Welcome to Kingdom Pen!!
I’m Esther: a volleyball-playing, violin-squeaking, dog-obsessed, homeschooled, fiction-writing, God-loving, teen girl!
So cool! I’m a homeschooled freshman as well!
Horses are awesome! I used to love them when I was younger, but not as much anymore. I have a friend who is really into horses and riding, so I hea…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
Actually, just kidding. She’s not 5’2’’. She’s actually 5’ 5’’
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Esther replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 11 months ago
@trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @acancello @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @freedomwriter76
Ok, I’m going to add in a new character, if everyone’s okay with that. This is Amir’s love interest throughout his story.

Shirin (pronounced Shi-reen) Hedieh al Azar
(just like Amir, everyone calls her by her second name)Appearance: thick, curly, dark br…[Read more]
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