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@valtmy I can’t promise I’ll have the time to read the entire manuscript but I’d love to beta what I can! I sent a request to get into the doc. I’m excited to dive in. 😀

@valtmy I just happened to pop back into the forums and saw this. I remember when you requested prayer for a job interview. That’s so great you’ve found a job! God answers prayers in His perfect timing. Just wanted to bless you as you go on this new adventure. 🙂

General impressions: I really liked it, and find the premise/laws of fate to be very intriguing.
Some things I would expect or be interested in seeing moving forward:
– Juqing and Wanyu meeting
– The relationship between Wanyu and her father or Wanyu and her teacher/his family and the other students (how do they react to finding out she’s…[Read more]

General impressions: I really liked it, and find the premise/laws of fate to be very intriguing.
Some things I would expect or be interested in seeing moving forward:
– Juqing and Wanyu meeting
– The relationship between Wanyu and her father or Wanyu and her teacher/his family and the other students (how do they react to finding out she’s…[Read more]

@valtmy I’m available to read through this now, though it wouldn’t let me access it.

@valtmy I’d love to read and give my feedback. I may not have the time for a couple weeks, though. I’ll put it on my to do list. 🙂

@valtmy God is so good! I will continue to pray for His guidance and provision in your life! 🙂

@dekreel I have very fair skin and medium brown hair. (Is that what you were looking for?)

@daeus As did I! 🙂

My WIP is told in five parts, each from a different member of the cast. It’s contemporary fantasy because I just really wanted giant lizards and cell phones, magical armor and pizza in the same story.
There are three main protagonists, all apprentices to a Knight (to two different Knights, that is). They get their powers from special stones that…[Read more]

@inkling-for-christ If you want to write a story that takes place after Return of the Jedi, you could explore how Luke goes about finding other force sensitive people to train them.

@daughteroftheking I totally agree with the others. I think we tend to forget how mature 9-13 year olds can be as we get older ourselves (at least, I know I do). Since you have a young MC, I think it’s great for you to have older important cast members. I think someone already mentioned Pixar? You can see they do an excellent job of telling…[Read more]

*coughs* I really hope I’m not reposting, but I tried to edit my post and it disappeared. . . So . . . Anyways.

@ethryndal I know from personal experience that my writing often grows with me. Your problem may be a result of growing as a person. This is frustrating to deal with, as we can’t really stop ourselves from changing. But once I…[Read more]

@valtmy Yes, those are all very helpful! I especially like “make those sentences as snappy and quotable as dialogue”. I’d never quite thought of it that way before. Thanks! 🙂

@valtmy You and your family are in my prayers! I was reading Psalm 139 this morning, and part of it speaks about how there is nowhere we can go, where the presence of God is not. Height or depth, day or night, one side of the sea or the other “even there your hand shall lead me, and your right hand shall hold me” (verse 10). So I want to encourage…[Read more]

@jenwriter17 *raises hand* I’ve never been a fan of Han. I also dislike Han and Leia’s relationship *audience gasps*. But I know this is an unpopular opinion.
I’m not ashamed to say I walked out of the theater after seeing TFA for the first time shipping Rey and Kylo. XD And yes, I adore the Last Jedi (most of it 😉 )

@valtmy I find reading description simply tedious, and I know this reflects in my own writing. I definitely know what you mean!! (Visual mediums just spoil us, don’t they?)
Often rough drafts for me look a lot like lines of dialogue and action beats, and then later I have to go in and add the setting’s details. But it’s really helped me to remind…[Read more]

@everyone “No temptation has overtaken you that is not common to man. God is faithful, and he will not let you be tempted beyond your ability, but with the temptation he will also provide the way of escape, that you may be able to endure it.” (1 Cor 10:13)
This verse came to mind as I was reading through everyone’s posts. I’m thankful @dekreel…[Read more]

@valtmy The opening grabs my attention. I felt a good sense of the characters until you introduce Lu Mo and Pan Kun. Then it became harder to remember everyone’s names. I think giving Lu Mo a distinct characteristic that the reader can latch onto would help that. You did this well with Muchen, I thought. I got a visual of him almost immediately.…[Read more]

@ashlyvye Thanks for the tips! 🙂