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TheShadow posted a new activity comment 1 year, 2 months ago
As of today… okay. It’s like one thing keeps coming after another though, for a few weeks now I’ve felt pretty purposeless and essentially have been waiting for death. Randomly I’ll get bursts of motivation to make each moment count, but then I revert back to knowing everything is going to end and that everyone I know will die. So…[Read more]
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TheShadow replied to the topic Scenes in the forum Plotting 1 year, 2 months ago
Yeah, as long as you put a TW, I don’t think it matters.
Okay, perfect. First, have to clear out all of the uh… wonderful writing before posting it.
What?? XD
Lol, I was rewatching an episode from Martha Speaks (I don’t care if it’s for kids it’s one of the greatest shows ever), and this line really spoke to me.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Good, I’m glad Leon’s back story felt natural.
Yes, it is going to be a little harder. Julian may want to curb his eagerness…..
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION! 2
It was after sunset, and Julian and Leon were walking alone in the dim light. “So, how should we go about this?” Julian asked.
“I say the same as we did when on the run in Ardenta. We’ll try to get a place to sleep with a family, shar…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!
(In case anyone hasn’t noticed, I’m starting out small because this is the beginning after all. I think the sections will get bigger soon, and I’ll also maybe post some more today.)
Julian sat down on a rock by the path and drew in several dee…
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RAE replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle @kielah-h @whalekeeper @hybridlore
Also, I have a question, if you could give Baron a passage/verse of scripture, what would it be?
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RAE replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @whalekeeper @hybridlore
Eighth story! I hope you enjoy 🙂
Little Joy
Baron watched a little girl run across a meadow, flowers woven into her long silver hair. She was laughing in childish joy as three other children chased after her through the meadow grass. The youngest of the three, a boy who was probably only three…[Read more] -
TheShadow replied to the topic Scenes in the forum Plotting 1 year, 2 months ago
Okay, thanks. The content isn’t too violent (not yet at least), the most aggressive thing a character has done is slap someone in the face, but that’s it lol.
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Trailblazer replied to the topic Character Arcs in the forum Characters 1 year, 2 months ago
Oops I read your response and totally forgot to reply! Thanks for the suggestions!
In another example, let’s say your character Ellie has the character arc of… looking at her summary, I’m going to go with this: She feels compassion for those who are suffering, specifically trafficking victims, but struggles to actually step out and a…
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TheShadow replied to the topic Scenes in the forum Plotting 1 year, 2 months ago
Okay, thank you. My dad (who is also a writer) has very similar advice, and says that no matter how bad the writing may be, it’s best to get your thoughts and ideas down and then edit.
Each scene has one important decision. This is a complete set up for an inciting incident, caused by Joe’s fatal flaw. He is flo…
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
Thank you!
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Esther posted an update 1 year, 2 months ago
Ok, I’m tagging a lot of people for this, but don’t feel obligated to reply.
So, I’ve gotten stuck in my current WIP, but as I work through that slowly, I want to return to an older WIP that I worked on over the summer and really want to refine. It’s only in a first draft, but I’d like to have a critique partner for it.
The type of critique…[Read more]-
Actually, I’mma remake the moodboards, hehehe. So they shall be revealed later this week. :PP
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I replied but didn’t tag you. Not sure if you got it.
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I would be willing to try and help with this. You know my views on Romance are rather different than norm, and I believe highschool romantic relationships aren’t healthy. But I’m willing to give it a shot.
I also do edit. I’m not a line-by-line editor, but I have worked as a plot/character/story editor before.
We do have different beliefs on…[Read more]-
I appreciate the offer!! Truly!
But like you said, we might not work super well together because of our different viewpoints. So yeah, right now I’d say no, but I will keep you in mind! :))-
No problem! I can be your last resort if no one else offers. 😉
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Sounds good. 😉 Let me know if you want to be tagged when I post the chapters on here some time! :))
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Mm. Sounds interesting, but I’m totally unqualified. I don’t think I’d be able to help much… Sorry… 😅😑
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Hey no worries! 🤗
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I’m sorry, I don’t think I can help you 🙁
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That’s totally fine, girl! ☺️
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I’m definitely interested in reading your novel, but I’ve read almost no YA, so I wouldn’t be much help.
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No worries! I’ll be sure to tag you tho when I start sharing it on here!!
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Awesome! 🙂
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@esther-c I would love to help! This went into my spam for some reason, so I’m sorry I didn’t get back to you. Are you still looking for someone?
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Actually…I think you might be perfect. You gave some great feedback on my short story, so I’m sure you could do the same for my novel! :))
I’ll PM you later this week with more details and the link to the doc. Thank you so much!!! 🤗-
Awesome! I love family and sibling dynamics, and I also read a good amount of YA, so this seems right up my alley! (Although I won’t be able to help much with the 90s references, haha.)
Do you still have my email from the short story critique?-
Yay yay!! (Oh I know, right?? I’ve asked my parents and some other older writers I’ve met through KDWC, and even though they gave me a lot to use [plus Google, lol], there’s still something difficult about getting it right since I didn’t live then 🤪)
Yes I believe so!-
@esther-c Yeah, that totally makes sense! I was gonna say, ask your parents xD. But I’m sure it’s still difficult.
Great!! 😄
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I may have to get some YA recs from you sometime, because I struggle to find clean fiction that I would actually enjoy 😭
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Oh definitely! I’m sure I can come up with a list. Middle grade stuff can be great if it’s well done, because content is so much better. 😉
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Please tag me if you post recommendations! I want to read YA, but it’s usually filthy and cringe. -
For sure!! Until you come across that one middle school relationship that somehow works out perfectly. 😂
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Ok for some reason even though I still see your comments on the short story doc, it won’t let me view your email. 😅 Could you share that again with me so I can share the other doc?? I’ll tell you as soon as I see it if you don’t want to leave your email up.
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Awesome! Tysm!! I’ll probably send you the doc tomorrow since I need to make a few notes on it first. :))
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Ok I added you to the document! You should get an email about it I believe. (:
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Hoo boy. I’d love to, but uhhhh…I wouldn’t be any help. I’m a terrible critiquer and my romance experience is practically nil. You would probably help me more than I help you….sorry!
Funny enough though, my own romance work (a fanfic) took place in 1970 in New Mexico. What are the odds?
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Ahh, no problem! :))
No way! That’s so cool! XD-
Yeah it was just a consequence of how the original story was set up, but it’s funny to think about.
I doubt your characters will experience anything even close to mine though lol-
Oh dear, was it a Star Wars fanfic?? In that case, I hope my charries aren’t handling the types of weapons they use. 🤣
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No, it was something else, but yeah there were a lot of weapons involved XD
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My Star Wars fanfics don’t really cross over into our world. Yet.
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Though I suppose in a fanfic, you could do whatever 🤷🏻♀️
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Oh duhhhh 🤦🏻♀️ I’ve watched like all the Star Wars movies, I should know they don’t take place on earth 🤣
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lolllll no biggie.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I thought is was the same color as your pfp with the girl and the bookshelf. So a lighter medium brown.
Yes, a new culture.
Gak! Everyone is driving me nuts with all this pfp and name changing. I don’t know who anyone is anymore! *sob*
lololololol.
(did you draw that?)
Oh, sounds like something my dad…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Participants/potential participants:
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h
The others:@power @calyhuge @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity @hybridlore
Okay. I’ll give you that.
Yes, I thought of you as a quieter girl. Lover of books. Long light/medium brown hair. Writer, friendly, softer spoke.
*shrug*
Not sure if any of that is true. (except I know the hair isn’t.)
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
You also gave me the feeling of a girl who loves old books and antiques…sort of like an 18’s librarian.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I always imagined you with a violin and kind of looking like Lindsey Stirling since that was the first profile image I saw of you…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
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That’s tough. It’s harder to battle emotions than thoughts, I feel like, since thoughts are solid and can be argued away, while emotions are kind of slippery and cling to you. Keep hanging in there. You were fearfully and wonderfully made in God’s image, and you were made to bring glory and pleasure to Him as well as be a light to others. And d…[Read more]
@hybridlore
That was very encouraging, thank you so much. Glad to hear you’re doing better too, I’ll keep you in my prayers too.
@theshadow
So glad I could help a little! Thank you!