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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
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3rd SECTION FROM TODAY
I am on a roll!
Poor Linus. You’ll have so much catching up to do. Sorry.
Another long day passed in prayer and fear. Noah and Darrien had to leave for work as normal, but this time it was much harder for Joseph to see them go, and it seemed to be the same f…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
ah yes, my struggles with the male sex and relationships. *sighs* Guys just don’t make sense sometimes. (and girls totally do because who would ever be confused by girl relationships and emotions. no one. Right?)
That new section looks good. The end feels like a perfect transition to a scene with Adrian… is that what happens n…
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
even if we’re glad the character didn’t die, it often feels a little artificial.
While I agree with you that maybe killing off Adrian is the best course of action, especially considering this is supposed to be a realistic missionary story, I’ve also seen a story where it’s the opposite: They killed off a character because it…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
Yes! I do, but only about 10 of them are salvageable. The others were my learning arc and I steal ideas and characters from them.
How did you know?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h
2nd SECTION FROM TODAY
Sorry it’s really short. I have to leave. I’ll post more this afternoon or tomorrow, depending on when I get home.
Joseph lay on his bed, sobbing.
Noah had finally decided they could come out of hiding and carried him home. Now Joseph lay and cried. First…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
lovely.
This is just where an author wants her reader.
And, because I am a nice author, I will give you a little gift and go edit up the next section and post it, all for you yourself.
🙂
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
(I’m fighting so hard for Adrian. 😂)
I know, and the sad/funny thing is that it doesn’t matter what you say, this is the 4th draft, so whether he dies or not is already decided and isn’t changing.
Maybe God’s not done with Adrian yet.
Your right.
But maybe He’s ready to call this young soldier home.
I don’t know what his d…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
(You already killed off Aaron. Isn’t that enough for you?? 😭)
*gasp* how dare you! I never killed Aaron. The Empire did.
So there.
But honestly there are times when you can’t get around it. I’m not killing characters just to be depressing or violent. I’m doing it for good reasons. Plus, I have to follow the rules of my world. It w…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
Ah, well, we don’t always get our way.
Don’t do this to your readers. Your book will get thrown across the room. He needs to be rescued. Maybe Julian should help him escape.
lololol,
I wouldn’t throw my books across the room. I love stories where good characters die. It’s so refreshing after all this impossible happily ever a…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
And I am not satisfied with the confrontation. They need another scene. *plops down stubbornly* I really love brother dynamics … 😅
ME TOO! I love brother dynamics.
So what your saying is, Julian didn’t yell at him enough and should do some more?
lolololol.
Poor Julian, he must be so hurt and confused.
Anyway. You CANNOT kill A…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
That’s it.
That’s all you have to say? Nothing about my skilled word choice and flowing verbs!
(lololololol 100% joking!)
Are you getting attached to Adrian?
Btw, there was your Julian/Adrian confrontation. Did it go how you expected?
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Kefa replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 month, 4 weeks ago
Thanks, it’s not that I feel ashamed, it’s that I feel like I am being self absorbed and selfish just asking for prayer for myself.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 4 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!
The days passed one by one. Adrian remained in hiding, and Joseph spent more and more time with him, listening as he told stories of his early childhood with his brother– the days before the army.
Adrain spent hours in study, and Joseph was often at his side, re…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 4 weeks ago
@jonas @highscribeofaetherium @rae @esther-c @theducktator @the_lost-journal @raxforge @liberty @theshadow @calyhuge @koshka @power @keilah-h @linus-smallprint @hybridlore @mineralizedwritings @elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper
Please tag anyone who was involved in this that I forgot to tag!!! And sorry if I’m spamm…[Read more]
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Kefa replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 month, 4 weeks ago
Thank you ever so much! Just to know that someone is out there praying makes me feel so so so SO much better! If there is anything I can pray for in return just let me know!
(Man I feel like such a baby!) 😭😭
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 months ago
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Marcel — Elderstrand (w/Group 1)
Without waiting for the group to disappear over the rooftops, Marcel ran at the ironwalker he had previously maimed.
His opponent horizontally sliced its broadsword. Marcel leapt onto the hilt and quickly stuck his hand into the elbow joint. As…[Read more]
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freedom posted an update 2 months ago
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Just thought I’d give y’all a writing update💜
I’m around halfway through the final edit for Book #2 in the Broken and Redeemed trilogy, the story…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months ago
Well good. I’m glad.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months ago
thanks!
it doesn’t always have to be something to fix, btw. i’m also interested in your thoughts as a reader. 😉
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @keilah-h
NEXT SECTION
“And then your brother found you?”
Noah, Alicia, and Darrien were sitting at the table, listening to Sabina and Adrian as they told what had happened. Asher, Eric, and Joseph were with them, watching the conversation in silence. Noah and Darrien were staring at Adrian in disbe…
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Awesome!! Thank you for the update! It’s good to hear that things are going well, even if there have been many tears involved (that just means its a good book, right?). Hope your characters aren’t giving you too much pain. XD
@koshka Thank you! :3 And yes, many tears involved XD (but yesss. I personally love books that make me cry😆). Pffffffft they always are: it’s just a given by this point🙄 I’d say Leon more than Riker in Book #2 tho, but then again, they’ve both broken me🫠
Thank you so much for the update!
Oh now I really can’t wait! Reading the impactful stories is so, so good. I’ve written a few of those books that really make me cry, but it’s often those books that end up having the most beautiful message and I am the most excited to let others read. So I really can’t wait! Do you have a tentative release date…[Read more]
@ellette-giselle I’m so glad you’re excited!! :3 And I’m certainly hoping it’s impactful💜
Hmmmm…no exact release date, as everything depends on getting some final steps done, including (but not limited to): finalizing a blurb/cover, getting it up on Amazon and getting a proof copy to look over (which the copy could take up to 2 weeks for me to…[Read more]
I’m so excited!!!!!!
I’m also looking at a spring 2025 release for the first book in my Saga! We’ll have to see who gets their book out first!
@ellette-giselle Ooh exciting!!
Oh my gosh Freedom!!! That’s awesome girl!! I’m so excited for you!!
And tysm for keeping us updated, I’ll be praying that the publishing and editing process goes smoothly. 🤍 I’m planning on getting Freedom’s Fire this month or for Christmas, I’m SO excited to read it🤩
And I’m so excited to read book 2 but also so not prepared, I’ve already…[Read more]
@lightoverdarkness6 TYSM GIRLY!!!! 💜💜💜💜
Ty for the prayers <3 AHHH I'M SO EXCITED FOR YOU TO READ IT!!!!!!
yesssss, it's a roller coaster that's for sure😭
Awesome!! I’m so excited for you!!! I can’t wait!! ✨
I’m not sure if you’ve answered this before, but I was wondering why you chose self-publishing over traditional? I have nothing against it of course, I’m just curious. 😊
@esther-c Tysm, girl! <3
I went with self-publishing for a few reasons.
1. To have complete control over my novels, what I'm writing, etc.
2. To get more of an income from it (publishers take a LOT of the money when you publish your book simply bc of the agreement and the fact that they do most of the work).
3. Often, publishers make you sign a…[Read more]
Ok, interesting! Yeah, that does answer my question! 😊 I’ve considered self-publishing, but I think I’m gonna go with traditional. At least that’s what I’ve been thinking about and drawn to lately. Your reasoning totally makes sense though! <3
OH! And I wanted to let you know, I talked to someone who’s done publishing through Amazon and she says that you an get replacement copies if they mess up the formatting and send out the messed up books to people. I’m not exactly sure all the details and how that works with shipping or refunds, but I can talk to her again and get the info for you…[Read more]
@esther-c Best of luck to you with traditional publishing!💜
and wellllllll Amazon messed up the formatting for the actual document, so a replacement would (first come out of my pocket, Amazon doesn’t pay for replacements) but would be just as messed up anyhow simply bc the document itself was messed up because I didn’t know that Amazon’s paid…[Read more]
Thanks girl!! 🩷
Ughhh, that’s annoying 💀 But I suppose you live and learn. 🤷🏻♀️ At least you know for next time. :))
I’m so excited!!! And somewhat concerned for your poor characters. 😬 What are you doing to them?!
@theducktator Yay!!!! heh heh heh
they’ll be finnneeeeee