Hannah R.

@his-instrument
There is one word to describe this. Amazing.
Okay, two words. Amazing and ingenious.
WOW! This is so good! I agree with those who said they loved Cerdic’s voice. It’s perfectly hilarious. 🙂
I only noticed a few grammar mistakes, but the awesomeness of the story made up for that! 😉
Amazing, awesome, fabulous job! (Now four words.…[Read more]

@his-instrument Don’t publish it online. Not for copyright reasons, but because you’ll get low-quality critiques. KP is not a good platform for long critique passages. Short ones will work, but long ones are simply way too time consuming to critique on this platform.

If you want a critique of your book, create a new thread and ask if anyone is…[Read more]

@his-instrument Don’t publish it online. Not for copyright reasons, but because you’ll get low-quality critiques. KP is not a good platform for long critique passages. Short ones will work, but long ones are simply way too time consuming to critique on this platform.

If you want a critique of your book, create a new thread and ask if anyone is…[Read more]

@his-instrument If this is a first draft, it is well done. There are a few grammatical errors and such, but not many. If I were doing a full blown edit, there are more things I would point out than I can here, but overall this story is fairly mature. One thing that confused me at first was why the narrating voice had such a modern laid back style…[Read more]

This. Is. Hilarious. I honestly can’t think of much I would change— the dry, matter-of-fact, world-wise and patiently weary voice of the narrator is perfect for showcasing what kind of world they live in, the wry humor is fantastic, and as an avid student of English history I can totally appreciate everything you said about royalty! 😀
If this…[Read more]

This. Is. Hilarious. I honestly can’t think of much I would change— the dry, matter-of-fact, world-wise and patiently weary voice of the narrator is perfect for showcasing what kind of world they live in, the wry humor is fantastic, and as an avid student of English history I can totally appreciate everything you said about royalty! 😀
If this…[Read more]

@his-instrument and @jadamae I could go on forever about my favorite episodes and funny quotes. But I’ll refrain, for now.

Thanks @his-instrument! *thumbs up* sound advice all through! 🙂

*Brings in more cookies*

@his-instrument I don’t think there’a max amount of intensity you can have and a lot is better than a little. There are two rules though. While readers shouldn’t actually guess the last minute plot twists, it should be something they could have guessed. If that isn’t the case, the reader will feel cheated. The other rule…[Read more]

@daeus
Wow; just wow. Forget what I said because what you’re saying makes a lot more sense! 😉 I agree that you shouldn’t have to fulfill all of the reader’s expectations, just some. That way you leave room for more creativity and an awesome story! By the way, I would totally read that story about the girl and the evil faerie dragonfly! It sounds…[Read more]

Pray about it, Hannah. Ask the Lord if it’s okay with Him. We can tell you what we think, but what you really want to know is what He thinks. Seek Him, and ask Him to show you if that’s something He wants you to do, or not. And if you’re getting a check/ feeling unsettled about doing it, don’t ignore that.

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Hmm, not sure that made the most sense @his-instrument. the b makes things bold. the i italicizes (just make sure you highlight what you want changed. and b-quote is if you are quoting what someone else says. Maybe that is explained a bit better. If you want to know anything else, I’m sure there is someone else out there more experienced than I am. 🙂

Go Ohioans indeed. (O-H…)

…I-O!!!

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@his-instrument Welcome! I struggle with writing short stories too…meaning I just don’t do it. 😉 I can’t get anything to fit. Most of my stories are novel length, but I’ve discovered recently that I also enjoy writing novellas. At 20,000-30,000 words, they are long enough for me to write a whole story, but I can get them done much quicker than a novel.

@his-instrument Welcome!!! It’s always great to see new people join the bestistest place on the internet! (saying that never gets old for us…if you hadn’t noticed already 😉 )

Welcome to Kingdom Pen, @his-instrument!
Nice picture! I dub you “The shiny one”. 😉

@his-instrument Yes, a dove isn’t very epic. But what about a phoenix?

@kate-flournoy I just completed a theology class with a part about the Trinity this last winter… God is three in one. The different tasks, for lack of a better word (such as salvation and judgment) are attributed to all three persons of the Godhead at different times or…[Read more]

Oooh, good topic @his-instrument! I have one thought that I think sums it up pretty well— ‘By their fruits you shall know them.’
Do your dragons save? They are then portrayed as saviors, not evil pagan gods. Do they devour? They are indeed evil, though not necessarily pagan. It is what they do, not what they are, I think. It’s one of those…[Read more]

@his-instrument
Hello, Hannah! (I don’t know if you remember me but I was at TeenPact, too. We sat together for breakfast on the last day. 🙂 ) Anyway, welcome!
“Words have great power, the power of life or death, and we have the gift and privilege of being able to use them for life.” This blew me away! Preach it, girl! 😉

@his-instrument Hi, Hannah! 😉 So glad you made it on here. 🙂 As @bluejay said, this is the bestiestist place on the internet.