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Should I post my words?

 

@esther-c 💨 ⚪️ @theducktator 💨 ⚪️

 

Why do I feel like if someone throws one at Ellette she’s gonna come back and be like, “Well, I wrote a short novel…”

Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.

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This sounds fun!

Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.

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@jonas

Yep 😎

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Until WaT is released.

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@jonas

days.

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6

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@savannah_grace2009

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

The sensation made her want to scream, cry out in agony…

You don’t really need an ellipsis here. A period would work better.

“It’s those cursed Paynes,” Odessa muttered, anger flashing in her violet eyes.

This makes it sound like Kaden and Sevryn have tried to get help before, but when Kratos opens the door, he doesn’t recognize them, so I assume he hadn’t seen them before. If that’s the case, he wouldn’t have known who ‘those’ meant. Maybe try ‘some of those’?

“Where will we go?” Sevyrn asked, looked up at him with the brokenness of a small child.

This line is really good.

“We’ve come to seek your help,” he bowed his head. “Our son is very sick, and we were turned away when we came to Kratos, the doctor.”

Saying Kratos’ name here seems unnecessary. Do the Pythonos really care/need to know who the doctor was? It might flow better without it. I’m not sure, tho, it might be fine.

Other thank those things, I mostly agree with what Jonas pointed out. But overall, it’s very good.

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@ellette-giselle

Yw!

It looks a little ‘messy’ in the way most signatures do, but it’s not ‘sloppy’ and it’s nice and even.

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@whalekeeper

Thanks!

@ellette-giselle

Oh wow, that looks really nice! I love the wreath of branches.

(your signature [on the drawing, not your forum signature] looks very pretty and neat, btw. I wish I could do mine that nice :p)

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@esther-c

That’s awful. I’m praying.

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@ellette-giselle

Thank ye!

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@esther-c @linus-smallprint

Thanks you guys! 🙂

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@liberty

I don’t think I’ll join, thanks for the offer, though (:

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@loopylin

I love that!

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Finally I have something I like enough to post!

Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.

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