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The Most Esteemed Feathered One replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 days, 8 hours ago
Within the next hour, everyone rushed around the house, trying to get ready for church and still be able to leave on time. This included a couple pairs of shoes being thrown down the stairs, someone looking for their shoes, people telling whoever was getting ready in the bathroom to hurry up, and a sister frantically searching her…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 9 hours ago
Rory
“Bolts and screws, bolts and screws.” Rory muttered slowly. For the amount of things they taught in Academy, there was very little about normal life. Mostly about killing and the most effective ways to do it. Rory racked his brain. The two words were familiar, but he couldn’t remember having encountered the things they repre…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 9 hours ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 days, 11 hours ago
I would say it was fulfilled rather than changed. The Bible says not a dot not an iota will go away and nothing will change. (Murdering the wording, but that’s the raw meaning)
Otherwise yeah! Looking forward to the next part.
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Ruee Hamster Huey replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 11 hours ago
@loopylin np
Alpha
Alpha blinked. “No, not exactly. I’m a warrior, so I fight wherever in the stars they want me this time. Only time I ever thought of assassination was with some of those annoying lords in the Council, but if I did that, they’d probably lock me up again. And that’s no fun. I think they like sticking me with needles.” A shudder…[Read more]
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Ruee Hamster Huey replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 days, 12 hours ago
I will need to clear this up in the story i guess. I didn’t mean all the laws, I meant more the changes in that we no longer have to sacrifice animals because Jesus came as the ultimate sacrifice. The laws changed in little ways because Hope had finally come, we didn’t have to wait for it.
I will make this clearer in the text,…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 days, 14 hours ago
this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.
When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.
I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic TNPT: The Sword – Outlining in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 2 days, 14 hours ago
Who is James? (I think I want him to be someone who is laid back and jokes around a lot, but occasionally has a moment where he shows surprising wisdom.
oh. That’s not at all how I pictured him.
idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and l…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 days, 15 hours ago
It looks a lot better! One thing I noticed is that Antonio does say “fabuloso” twice.
“Then the topic conveniently comes up in a conversation with Easton.”
Also, I feel like this might be better if you just change it to “Then I can ask Easton” or something like that. Otherwise, it looks great! I like the way you made Hallie more rea…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 days, 16 hours ago
Turns out, my brother’s cord was broken in three places. This may have happened because of how much he’s grown. Because of the scar tissue around the cord, the fluid is still able to pass through his body safely, and he doesn’t need surgery!
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whaley replied to the topic Sprint Channel in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 16 hours ago
Done, and officially less stressed about the assignment now.
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 16 hours ago
What do you think? Pretty sure your email is visible on there as well as mine.
I’m good with it. *thumbs up* It might be a good idea to post it on your profile, rather than directly on the forum.
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 16 hours ago
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 16 hours ago
Hehe, it definitely is. XD
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 days, 16 hours ago
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freedom replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 16 hours ago
*pops head in*
I’m so happy to see this forum still active and well🥹🥲
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Ruee Hamster Huey replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 days, 16 hours ago
@kielah-h @ellette-giselle @raxforge @whalekeeper @hybridlore
This is the final part of Story 9.
In my writing document, I named this story temporarily as ‘Delirium’ but I would like some better title ideas if you can give me some. Thx in advance.
Five days had passed since Baron had been taken to the Handel mansion and his symptoms…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 days, 17 hours ago
Awwww!!!
But in six months he’s moving to Florida for college…..😭😭
At least I have a little brother <333 I love him to DEATH…I literally love him so muchhhh
That is so funny that your MC is named Hallie because (I know I’ve told you this before but Imma say it again hahaha) my little sister’s name is Hallie!!! so it’s just…
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whaley replied to the topic Sprint Channel in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 18 hours ago
Hey guys! I’m going to work from 2:15 to some undetermined time. I have to jot down the full outline for my senior thesis, and go down some hopefully valuable rabbit trails. You know how research is. I’d love to have company!
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic TNPT: The Sword – Outlining in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 2 days, 19 hours ago
@ellette-giselle @theducktator
Okay, good. Thanks!
so, does this mean you’re gonna start posting chapters?! 😃
Not quite. Now that the core is taking shape, I’m getting ready to move into a more structured outline, and need to decide which of all the middle events I have planned will suit the story best. I also still need to figure out some of t…[Read more]
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