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@whalekeeper

LOL I’m laughing so hard, I’m crying.

@keilah-h

 I spend valentine’s day alone (with my family obviously but other than that).

Lol, same. And I don’t care either, because if I had a boyfriend, I’d have to buy him a present, and I’d rather have the money.

Except for my stuffed caterpillar I married 9 years ago. We’re still together.XD

@keilah-h

There’s actually a reason Silvanis acts this way. Maybe Sniper will figure it out sometime. It’d be funny to see what he would say XD.

@theshadow

I would love to see it!

@theducktator

Lol. Everything looks better with an ellipse.

I’ll watch that. 

@keilah-h @theshadow @theducktator @kyronthearcanin @princesachronicles22

Silvanis and Fairy

Fairy smiled. She loved hearing everyone sing. She turned to Silvanis who was sitting beside her. “Isn’t it wonderful? I love hearing all the different songs!”

“Wonderful, no. Interesting, yes,” He replied.

Fairy elbowed him. “It is wonderful! Everyone…[Read more]

@loopylin

Would you like Dante and Alpha to interact? I can have him go back to their room. If not, that’s ok too :]

Sure. Sorry I haven’t been very active.

I’ll write something short with Alpha quick

Alpha

The scraping sound of blade to stone filled the room. Alpha carefully sharpened one of his knives, before stopping and checking the edge. D…[Read more]

@hybridlore

One thing I’ve noticed is that you tend to use a lot of ellipses.

@theshadow

“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”

Ducks???👀

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! I approved it.

@linus-smallprint

hah!! That’s great! This is going to be so funny if I do!

@liberty

I’m going to be able to submit something!!!!!!!

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@loopylin

Sure! They’re in the entrance right now.

Vyette

Vyette glared up at the school. A boarding school! How could her father do this to her? “It’s an experience,” he’d said. An experience? Maybe for the working class. She shoved another bag at her maid, who was already carrying four. “Come on. Don’t take all day.” She stalked into the…[Read more]

@theshadow

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have yet to meet a truly confidant and courageous bully. That being said, they seem too c…[Read more]

@jonas

Thaliu. I liked the feel together.

@linus-smallprint

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The Saviour? What are your thoughts on that?

I’m not sure. I see how it would help your story, and it’s an interesting perspective to take. My main concern would be people thinking you support slavery. I…[Read more]