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@ellette-giselle

Yep! I noticed that! 😆 “Teacher.” I like it.

@hybridlore

Awesome!! I’m so glad you liked it!!!

Yeah….. Rolf had a rough time of it, but he got out sooner, whereas Leon was in the bad situation longer… things just didn’t escalate so high.

btw, was it you who asked about him changing his name? Well, if it was, you now have an answer!

@ellette-giselle

I love the way you put us inside Rolf’s story instead of having him just tell it. It worked so much better. Also, the transitions were great.

Good section. The part about Conrad was sad, though. I don’t really have any big critiques. Great job!

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
The Empire<…

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@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

@keilah-h

@hybridlore

Thanks you two.

As for online, I don’t trust it. I’ve heard and seen too many online things get hacked for my liking. 😅

Thanks for the suggestion though!

@keilah-h

That one.

@keilah-h

The one that hit Florida. Milton, I think.

Thanks!

@beth-torres

Ryla

The look on the face of the other boy told Ryla that this was not an isolated incident. Suddenly the boy on the floor grabbed his hat and leapt to his feet. Startled, Ryla fell into the wall.

The boy pointed at her. “Do you eat strawberry leaves?”

Ryla hugged her bag closer. “No?” Was that wrong? What was a strawberry? “Who are you?”

@koshka

Thank you! I tried the Get in Touch page a week or two ago, but I haven’t heard back.

@beth-torres

Thank you. *bows* The concerning thing is that Kathleen’s last appearance lines up with the hurricanes…

@the_lost-journal

That’s an awfully short reply for my epic Veggietales parody.😒😂 But yeah, I have no idea. I’m hoping this post gets their attention.

@ellette-giselle

Ohhhhh nooooooo! Ellette! I’m so sorry! That’s terrible!

I’m glad LOS was okay… but I’m really sorry about your WIP. That’s terrible.

I use Word Online (microsoft365.com, I think…) to write, and it saves online so I can access it through my phone and other devices. That might be worth looking into for the future, since I’m pre…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Great job!!!! I really liked it! I sure was nervous for them!

Poor Riker. I am really excited to see Erich show up!! He was a character I really liked from the last book. I’m really happy to see him again. I hope he gets a lot of “screen time”. 😂

I am wondering why Leon and Riker seem to be struggling with the lessons we…[Read more]

@keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon    @hybridlore     @linus-smallprint

So, in answer to all the questions:

the laptop did an un-authorized update. So while I hit save on all my documents, I still had them minimized instead of fully closed. Normally it tells me about the update and offers a time. I then shut everything fully down, make sure it’s…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Umm… Perehapes he was a slave, or at least treated like one, earlier in his life, along with his brothers and cousins. They escaped, and tired to help other slaves.

🤨

I wrote like two paragraphs of his backstory.

This is Omar we’re talking about.

Have you read the section where he introduces himself to Leon??

Okay l…[Read more]

🎵How do you join Kingdom Pen?

You just fill out a form!

I tried that, but they work no more!

That’s odd.

I know I thought for sure!

Have you tried the contact page?

I’ve gotten no reply…

Oh, that used to work, but now it won’t.

I think that I might die.

Where have all the moderators gone? What happened to the articles? The new people…[Read more]