GodlyFantasy12

@godlyfantasy12

I think that it’s a great, workable idea, and I encourage you to work on it while you are still really excited about it. I am a total panster, so I understand how that works.

I have some questions that may help you develop the story more. What happened to the dad (is he still alive)? Is the only driving theme the sibling…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Lovely poem!!! It looks like @thelobsterlover and @power did a phenomenal job explaining everything, so there’s not much for me to say, other than great job! 😀

@godlyfantasy12

I hoped they’d be good questions. 😉

That makes sense.  I like how it’s the talents/characteristics of animals. The way you explained it sounds like there’s a moral hidden in it…. now I’m even more curious. 🙂

Good literature is great for inspiration, and in all honesty, Artham inspired the super protective Mountain Guardian…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 Whoa, I LOVE IT!!!!!!!! 😀 It was enjoyable to read, and I LOVE the rhyme you had going on!!!!! FANTASTIC poem, girl!!!!!! 😀

My only suggestion is that it seemed like there needed to be a period between “dreams” and “Pitch” in this part –> “shattered dreams, Pitch black“.

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A good thesaurus comes in very handy. 😉

@godlyfantasy12

Wow. That sounds like some story idea!

I can’t say that I’m very great at planning out/development, even though it is one of my favorite parts. But…

I love your idea for the protagonist. What is his knee-jerk reaction to learning about his capabilities? Does he realize he is rebellious? Why does he want to lead? Is he actually…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ok, that makes a lot of sense (I was not a little suspicious.). It’s beautiful, especially the ending.

Meter is often tricky, but you worked it in so  well. Have fun with it!

Tagging some more people….

@trahia-the-minstrel @elanor @writerlexi1216 @kathleenramm @abigail-m @faith-q @not-so-secret-secret-assassin @nova21 @ariel-f @nanisnook @scripter-of-kingdoms @lewilliams @ribbonash @imwritehere1920 @beth-darlene @lydia-s @buildsbygideon @relia @iluvhim18 @jodi-maile @daisy-torres @godlyfantasy12 @jenwriter17 @lucy @m…[Read more]

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What I meant by “lost over an entire line” is that in stanza 1 you have 11 lines, in stanza 2 you have 12 lines, and in stanza 3 you have 11 lines, but in stanza 4 you only have 9-10 lines (It appears that I may have made a mistake on line 41. It might need to be split between “here” and “since”.) If you look at the syllable count…[Read more]

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OoooOooOoo, I like it! It sounds so ominously absurd, if that makes sense. (The phrases “clown” and “spotlight” aren’t exactly expected) It reminds me of a character from a play my sister and I started to write (now we realize it’s more of a novel and less of a play, but oh well. XD) who says some profound things in a very cryptic…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ooo, I like that last bit.

I can’t exactly see the rhyme and meter as the stanzas are written together in paragraph form, but what I could I enjoyed. Would you mind reposting it in verses (If it was written as such)?

@godlyfantasy12 Great job! It sounds ominous, is it meant to be?

@godlyfantasy12

Yeah, it was more like the sacrifice mirrors Jesus’, and Jammer mirrors mirroring that. (And why not agree in the most confusing way possible. 🙄😁)

@annabelle

I will echo your own words: WHY WOULD YOU KILL HER? XD

Bonifer Squoon or Maraly’s father, Weaver.

But Bonifer is a pretty complicated villain, so I have to give him…

@godlyfantasy12

Okay, yeah, I understood what you were saying I guess I just communicated my understanding poorly. Janner is not Christ, just his sacrifice was something to be admired. Yeah, Janner did make a lot of mistakes… I think that’s what made him such a realistic and relatable character. Real humans make mistakes, and so did…[Read more]

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Nope. I think I’m with @godlyfantasy12 on this one. I don’t know if I’ve ever heard of the Author Conservatory until this post. Interesting.

@godlyfantasy12

Yeah, you’re right, Janner’s death really does complete the story. He is kind of like a Christ character; a person to model yourself after. Good point!

@elishavet-pidyon

I found it! But then I clicked the link and it said I don’t have access. I typed a message in the box it gave me so I can request access. I really want to read it!!!

@godlyfantasy12

Amen!

@godlyfantasy12

Yes! That is the beauty of it – the gainful death, if you read the epigraph. It holds conviction and hope in the same hand.

I hope the doc helps! 😉 By the by, if you read the doc and want to comment, feel free! We, my sister and I, enjoy hearing feedback.

@annabelle

It’s really just a continuation of the epilogue that Peterson…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

They’re basically a writer’s alternative to collage. They teach you specified skills about writing and business skills specific to writing and in general so that you can have a sustainable career as an author. If you want to know more, you should read the link I sent you — it’s pretty informative!😊