Felicity

I have to admit I was kinda confused but a lot of that is I’m still without context despite some things being explained it’s hard to read thru notes without actually knowing the characters myself ya know?

but that’s not technically this scenes fault 😊 I want to know more about Omri! And also the one lady saying she wanted him seemed very sweet…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Poor boi! I love him so much! XD Is he not old enough to move out, or lacks the self confidence to do so? Because pls get him out of there 😭 and a guitar? Dude, instruments can hold so much sentimental value ;(

@whalekeeper SO COOL!!!! I really want to know what the welding is now tho!!!!

@joy-calle

She’s so extroverted, loud, and fun-loving while he’s serious and somber and hardly ever even smiles.

Ha, I love character couples like that.

@power I so would, but I know nothing about your charrie and you’d know nothing about mine, so we’d be guaranteed to lose…..

@freedomwriter76 All righty, fine. She’d better learn to be a bit nicer then. I can tolerate was-super-mean-but-responded-to-forgiveness-and-are-now-better charries–I have a couple in my own stories.

@whalekeeper That seemed fine to me. I was a tiny bit confused at first, but I think with context the story will be far clearer. I think I remember you talking about this story.

Also, I love “Holy toothy cow!” My expression would’ve been “Holy Darkhunter!” (Context: Darkhunters are a species my brother made up that are pretty much about the…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 She did? And had the nerve to tell him it was his fault?!

Can I go skewer her with the sharpest pole I have, please?

@freedomwriter76 Aww Joshua!! Don’t be like that!!

(How did it get destroyed? Did she destroy it or did it get broken some other way?)

@whalekeeper

Thanks for sharing!

I think I was able to follow along pretty well, there was a lot of context I didn’t have, but it was still digestible as a whole!

@joy-calle

Characters with opposite personalities are so fun to write!!

Those two sound awesome! 😄

@acancello

Cool idea!!

I’ll have to hop on here later and post something. 😀

@kyronthearcanin

I recently had to do a string-along story in school. Basically, the title is one word, then from there the sentences grow in length.

I just did one too!! Mine was so much shorter. XD It’s impressive that you made it that long! Great job!! 😄

@freedomwriter76

Aww, well, you like it, and that’s the most important thing!!!! 😃😁❤️😊

Definitely! 😊

If the pen is mightier than the sword, why do actions speak louder than words?

@loopylin

Thanks so much! Yeah, I have no archery backround so I followed the reference with extra care XD

@princesachronicle22

Thanks so much! Glad you like it! XD

@keilah-h

XD thank you!

@freedomwriter76 @mineralizdwritings

Matthew

Jared’s brow furrowed and a forlorn expression covered his face.

He looked…lonely.

So lonely.

And I knew exactly how that felt.

Jared wrapped his arms around himself, trying to protect his body against the chill. “I-I don’t have any friends.”

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@euodia-vision

I am SO, SOO sorry it took me so long to respond!! My responce got deleted idk how many times and I ended up yelling at the computer “Wait…Error?! Of COURSE I wanted to do that! Why would I have pressed submit if I didn’t?!” XD

But, again, I’m so sorry! 😭😭 I hope you’ve been doing well!

HIIIII! *jumps up and down with…

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@freedomwriter76

I’m so glad he gets redeemed, but…but…

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AHHH I know right!!!! 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

(i understand though. XD i have to do it a lot to charries, and everyone knows it 😂😂😂)

XDXD Haha, yeah. Sometimes it just has to happen, for the other characters to benefit from it (or not benefit, depends on the story 😂😭😭)

Aww, girl,…

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@kyronthearcanin

Thanks! 🙂

@kyronthearcanin

Of course, sorry if I come off as a know it all when I point anything out. My own worldbuilding is also very incomplete, and I agree on the list thing. Maybe I should start posting some chapters of my WIP sometime, though it gets a little creepy at parts, but it would be nice to have a nice set of critiques as well.