Esther

@rae @keilah-h @whalekeeper

Mel

The rug under Mel’s feet looked soft, so she sat down on it and began stroking the fur. The voices from the others blurred together in an abstract painting behind her. Something about monsters and home. Her hand sank deeper into the fur and she found herself stuck in the repetitive motion of combing her fingers…[Read more]

@rae @keilah-h @loopylin

Lucille

Lucy took a deep breath of the flowers, and passed some of them to Mel. This sniff test required a two-person court.

While the adults talked, Lucy watched Gabriel quietly, then glanced around the room. She wandered around, analyzing everything, from the table to the many skins.

Something had spilled on another…[Read more]

He’d bled on the floor more times than he cared to tell her. He hoped she wouldn’t notice more faint stains.

Bruh

@godlyfantasy12

So you’re trying to present Ara’s world to the reader before the inciting incident happens, and you don’t know how to translate the inner world to the outer world?
If so, wait a minute. We have the same problem. I’m trying to write the same thing. XD

The best I can say is to come up with a meaningful, but normal situation that re…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @looylin @kielah-h

Just to be clear, the flowers are bushes outside of the house. I don’t think I mentioned that.

Gabriel

“Was that your blood?”

Gabriel looked back at the rug, and nodded. He’d bled on the floor more times than he cared to tell her. He hoped she wouldn’t notice more faint stains.

“So are these the monsters you w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Eek! Lol.

Wilhelm

He had been on the verge of telling Wolfgang that he wouldn’t aim for his sword – Wilhelm’s target would always be his opponent, not a weapon – when the boy vanished.

That door had a rough time of it that night. Wolfgang’s reentry rattled the cups left on their table.

“En garde!” Cried the madcap creature as…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang 

He deposited the heavy weapon on the table with a clatter. “You’d win straight off if I tried with that–– Or I might actually knock your head off. I’m going to get my sword… just don’t hack at it if you please.”

He spead to the door and vanished. Racing down the corridor he leapt in the air with a whoop befo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m wondering who is going to win this….

Wilhelm

He was in the middle of fitting his sheild onto his left arm. He kept his gaze on his work, but his eyebrows were rising into his hair. They were more trouble to keep in order than either his sword or his shield.

“Heavy weapons prepare us for pitched battle. Strength must be…[Read more]

@koshka @whalekeeper thank yall so much for the advice!!

I’m already feeling better. 😊

I don’t wanna procrastinate but I do feel like I need some parts more fleshed out-maybe I can get some advice/ideas there…

right now I’m really struggling with the beginning. I know those are always the hardest, and is apt to change (and mine has man…[Read more]

@loopylin

Aww. I love him. He looks like a slightly snarky sweet heart with a big destiny.

@whalekeeper @rae @loopylin ok i’m back

Sniper

Gabriel walked around like he knew the place.

Sorta reminded me of, well, me during the war, when I was wanderin’ the old halls of my dad’s lab back on Staten, my earliest memories reactivated.

“Is this where you lived with that old man? Your master?” Lucy asked.

“This is where he found me.…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang 

He surveyed the shield before setting it on the table. “I don’t need one of those.” He lifted his left hand in the air and tried an experimental flick of his wrist and shuffle step. The sword point wobbled and struck the floor. Wolfgang frowned. “These are very heavy weapons you have. I don’t see the sense in them…[Read more]

@loopylin

Ooo! I love this!

I was just reminded that I have an old Ellis drawing that I never shared (I don’t think?)@anyonewhowantstosee

the outfit isn’t really accurate but it’s close enough. Also the skin color and background colors are kinda weird but it’s fine

Also yeah, like @elishavet-pidyon said! Writing calls! I’m not sure how to make it accessible to everyone because not everyone uses Google chat. Which is what I normally use for calls. But we can figure it out.

@godlyfantasy12

You wrote more than 50k words, which is a lot of emotional effort when writing the series of your dreams. So first off, that’s awesome. You’ll have plenty of material to edit. You’re definitely burnt out from that. That sounds normal to me.

I’m currently at an ADORABLE bookshop/cafe and slowly wanting and feeling the nudge to g…

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@ellette-giselle

Hehe.

By the way, his arming sword is a little under a yard long. His great sword is probably five feet, a precursor to the Zweihänder sword if he was in our world.

Wilhelm

“So instead you use flimsy weapons? I don’t see the wisdom of that. What about glaves and halberds? But nevermind. I’ve another trainer here somewhere.”…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon that’s a good idea! and yea I’ll probably find myself on here more often. I’m just struggling to get words out period…

@godlyfantasy12

I don’t have much advice, being in a similar situation myself. However, the thing that helps me the mostis just talking through plot holes and concepts. If you don’t have someone who can be a sounding board for you (in “real” life), I think most of us KeePers would be happy to be that. It’s nice to hear other opinions at the…[Read more]

I’m also…just struggling sometimes with this book. The concept, plot, characters, etc are good. I like it…but at the same time at points it feels flat…It needs more, I already have notes for things I need to add but its a little overwhelming…

I really wanna get it to the point I feel comfortable letting someone else read it and critique…[Read more]