Esther

@theshadow 😁

@godlyfantasy12 ooh that’s a good scene!

Riven seems to be different than in your previous drafts. He’s a bit more conniving and less “I’m evil cause I can be!”

I’m a bit worried that what he calls “protecting” A’grend doesn’t mean truly protecting it. But maybe he’s telling the truth. I don’t know.

@ellette-giselle yikes! that’s messed up. Although I’m glad the rest of your team realized it was wrong.

Don’t graduate our MEDICAL STUDENTS with horrible grades. That’s just unwise.

actually saw a thing about that, where a girl and her parents actually sued the school she went to for graduating her with a high score when she can barely rea…[Read more]

@theshadow great job!! Can’t wait for more!

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, that would be a cool scene! I’ll have to try to see if I can fit something like that into the story.

@theshadow

Okay, great! 😊

@ellette-giselle I agree with @hybridlore ‘s statements! I think that bit about Leon’s reaction might’ve been what I felt was missing from the scene.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry, didn’t get tagged yesterday. I think Linus has a valid concern about the scene with Julian and Dian, but moving the scene where Julian shares the Gospel with him to a day or so later would fix it, in my opinion.

I think it was nice to see Julian argue with God a little bit. It’s slightly a different reaction than you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yup. Julian got hit hard….

Also, I have a character named Julian as well! He was once a haughty prince…until he got turned into a unicorn. My story was a twist of the “Frog Prince”.

@ellette-giselle

“For You, God, tested us; You refined us like silver.”

I read that verse today!

 The next day, Roland was ready to go on, but there was no sign of Rolf and Leon.

Wow. He’s healing fast. I had a sprain before and it took 2 whole weeks to heal!

Oooh! I love Dian!

“Dian! Kom hier. Ek het jou hulp nodig.”

I think I know what he’s say…[Read more]

@theshadow

NICE!!

I really like it! I had hopes for Dylan and they seem to be coming through! Yay!!

@keilah-h    @linus-smallprint

So, keilah likes the scene that you have a problem with, linus! This is great. 🤣

Here’s an idea. What if I shift it a little so that the conversation happened a day or two after they had already been on the ship? Do you think that would work?

@whalekeeper

It is the morning of the dance. The party will start in the evening so there’s still plenty of time.

Oh okay. Thanks lol.

@anyonewhowantstoreadmyweirdwritingortalktomycharacterswhoneedmentalhelp

Maverick

Maverick’s heart pounded with caffeine-inspired adrenaline and lack of sleep. He rambled on the entire way to class with his bro…[Read more]

@raxforge @whalekeeper

Celarent

Oh, wonderful, a winged boy. As if this weren’t peculiar enough. Celarent squirmed. The greatest thief in Laerylia was not supposed to end up in such embarrassing situations. How disgraceful. Not to mention weird. “Let me go! I’m not one of whoever they are! I don’t know who you or bird boy are!” He reached for his knife.

@loopylin now how did I forget to tag Whaley *virtual facepalm*

@the_lost-journal

On behalf of the entire duck kingdom, I would like to thank Potato news 64 for this great honor. Except for Piper. We don’t approve of Piper. With utmost gratitude, and no small amount of concern, the kingdom of the ducks would like to offer foreign aid in the the form of emotional support teddy bears, and our deepest…[Read more]

“Woah. Look out, everybody,” she joked to the rest of the nearby empty hallway.

Nearly empty. Ugh, I hate that I can’t edit typos after a certain time limit.

People must be hungry or something

@theducktator

I have one other character wandering about. Could she join the Foreign Literature class whenever that happens?

Yeah she can join! Currently there’s just a few characters in the classroom chatting until the lesson starts.

Liko

“Well, you have the whole day ahead of you to make new friends. And with baking this good, I doubt it will…[Read more]

@rae I can’t remember if Felicity and Chase ever had a conversation before

@rae

Felicity 

Felicity strolled down the hall towards her first class of the day, late but not running. She paused as a middle school aged boy trudged past her, buried deep in his dark hoodie.

“Woah. Look out, everybody,” she joked to the rest of the nearby empty hallway. “Rain storm incoming.”

She smiled at the boy, brow creasing in the slig…[Read more]