Esther

(Btw, @princesachronicle22, I love your wheelie chair!)

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(All must be made aware of the rise of the Exclamationists!!!)

@thearcaneaxiom

Will everyone heed to this warning?

Are there people amongst us who do not question, but instead answer? Who are they? Will they not show themselves from their secret places? Them who call themselves the Statemecists? Will you heed to their faulty extreme ideologies? Will you join them, or will you stand with me to end such…

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@booksbyjayna

I know nothing about dystopia, and it looks like you’re getting some good answers already. But one thing I would suggest regarding Len’s title is to take a look at other books in your genre and see what the standard practice seems to be. If fans of dystopia are used to this type of character having a title, they’ll probably expec…

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Woah…

I think I’m a true Keeper now…

I have ranted multiple times. 🤣

@thearcaneaxiom

Thanks for the trophy! XD

You earned it. 😉 😂

A few questions. Is this earth, or a different planet with a similar history. Did you give the nation the name Aletheia out of irony? Aletheia means truthful and revealing, but it’s a nation that has been trapped by the Orb, closed off, hidden, within a lie. Perhaps for those that c…

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@euodia-vision

Buuuut as far as the first question goes… you could have his parents killed for seeking peace? But Len doesn’t know that they were seeking peace, just that their “enemy”, whoever that may be didn’t like their motives? (I’m trying to figure out how to explain what I’m picturing XD) But like, all Derek wants is peace throughout th…

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@kyronthearcanin

Len’s parents could have been involved in some kind of dangerous or just forbidden movement, but I’m not sure exactly how that would fit into your plot. Or maybe they were killed by members of that movement/society. If they were members of the society, then Len’s redemption arc could have something to do with figuring that out,…

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Here is his moodboard just because. 😜

(He also struggles with grief over the loss of his family)

@mineralizedwritings

Meaningful characters are hard to write, especially if they aren’t the MC. Depending on their personality, they will be meaningful in different ways. So here are some tips that I hope will be helpful 😁:

1. Give clues to the reader that Layson is important. With side characters, some are important and some aren’t. You gave…[Read more]

@janellebelovedpig

Aren’t big families super fun? You’re “violin-squeaking,” huh? I fiddle around with that instrument too, hoping to learn mandolin or dobrolin sometime.

Yes, they are. 😊

Yep! Lol. I play violin, it just doesn’t always come out sounding pretty. 😜

Cool!!

My favorite vacation spot would be Walton’s Mountain Lodge in CO. 14 year…

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@thearcaneaxiom

(Exactly.)

Welcome back, @alia!!

I’m Esther: a volleyball-playing, violin-squeaking, dog-obsessed, homeschooled, God-loving, amateur writer!!

My current WIP is called the Endoxos Trilogy, book one being called Ember of Hope. I also have ideas for stories/novels in a bunch of different genres.

So cool that you play violin too! I suppose that brings me to t…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

(Possibly) (Now, if we are speaking of the unknown as the future, things that are yet to happen, then there is no way that we can make a model that accurately represents it. All we know is the known future. There is an extent and a limit to what we can know. This shows how finite we are, and how omniscient and infinite our God is.…[Read more]

@acancello

I like that! There’s one thing I would change though.

I staggered over to an almond tree that was bent into the shape of a seat that was covered in moss and fallen flower petals. Then sunk down on it breathing hard.

This sentence seems a little clunky since you used two adjective clauses. (Or phrases. I forget which one.) And the n…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Then I’m with Freedom on this one. I had no idea. XD

@thearcaneaxiom

Would by definition, the unknowable, ineffable, and incomprehensible mean that we could not accomplish such a feat, or could we at least make models and representations of such things through the words we use for them, such as ineffable, though by definition, the ineffable cannot be described by words?

(Oof) (Erm…)

(Making m…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Kinda figured it was Ev!!!! 😏

Yeah. He’s pretty easy to identify. (And hard to miss irl. 🤣 [at least in his world])

My guess for the songs you posted is: Freedom’s Fire.

@godlyfantasy12

Is it a book where Jocelyn goes through a lot??

@thearcaneaxiom

Do we have the time, ability, and knowledge to accomplish such a feat?