Ellette Giselle

@ellette-giselle

I knoww. It does seem to work with his backstory, though. Poor guy. Ten years in slavery…

@ellette-giselle

I like him! He has a funny personality. I think he might become a Christian eventually.

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! It seemed pretty realistic. Oof, Ian’s going to be trouble 😬

I can’t wait for the next one!

@ellette-giselle

He’s gonna die.

Yeah… it’s kinda hard to kill what’s already dead. And even if you try, the dead don’t like it very much.

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Thank you!

@ellette-giselle okay then!!

@ellette-giselle yikes! that’s messed up. Although I’m glad the rest of your team realized it was wrong.

Don’t graduate our MEDICAL STUDENTS with horrible grades. That’s just unwise.

actually saw a thing about that, where a girl and her parents actually sued the school she went to for graduating her with a high score when she can barely rea…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, that would be a cool scene! I’ll have to try to see if I can fit something like that into the story.

@theshadow

Okay, great! 😊

@ellette-giselle I agree with @hybridlore ‘s statements! I think that bit about Leon’s reaction might’ve been what I felt was missing from the scene.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry, didn’t get tagged yesterday. I think Linus has a valid concern about the scene with Julian and Dian, but moving the scene where Julian shares the Gospel with him to a day or so later would fix it, in my opinion.

I think it was nice to see Julian argue with God a little bit. It’s slightly a different reaction than you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yup. Julian got hit hard….

Also, I have a character named Julian as well! He was once a haughty prince…until he got turned into a unicorn. My story was a twist of the “Frog Prince”.

@ellette-giselle

“For You, God, tested us; You refined us like silver.”

I read that verse today!

 The next day, Roland was ready to go on, but there was no sign of Rolf and Leon.

Wow. He’s healing fast. I had a sprain before and it took 2 whole weeks to heal!

Oooh! I love Dian!

“Dian! Kom hier. Ek het jou hulp nodig.”

I think I know what he’s say…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle If it works better for your story to chuck it, then do that, but save the concept for later cause I found it really interesting, and I’m sure others would too.

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

Oof, it’s been two weeks. Well, here’s the third chapter, please tell me what you think once you’re done reading it. This is a shorter chapter, so I’ll probably post the fourth tomorrow.

Chapter 3

“That’s lovely.” Elina sat down, an uncom…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle Weirdly enough, I actually kinda liked Julian’s POV. It was interesting to see someone who was technically monotheistic, but it wasn’t the true God, and how Julian reacted to that. I feel like even if you chuck the story for now, you should save the concept for either later in the book or a different one.

@ellette-giselle

Understandable.

I have also just considered making up a world with my friends and doing our own fantasy RPG in it.

@ellette-giselle

btw, do you like RP type games?

I’ve kind of wanted to get into D&D, but with a group of Christians so that we can do a campaign without anything the anyone feels uncomfortable with. My friends has tried to start a Star Wars one a fet times, but that had never worked out.

That War Story: Occupied France sounds kind of neat, but I…[Read more]

@theducktator @ellette-giselle

Okay. Thank you both. I might wait to see what @whalekeeper thinks, but your responses are helpful.  I could add a moment of clarity where he realizes what he is doing when he is too close to the village and gets caught up in the fight, even if he plans to escape.

@ellette-giselle

That makes sense. However again, different people would react differently.

But what about when he wakes up?