Ellette Giselle

@ellette-giselle

Oh, so you did actually make them stay. But you’re zooming through this as well in order not to interfere with the pacing. That works.

 It was late one evening and Julian was wandering aimlessly through the halls of the University.

I’m glad for this scene. Before I read this section, I was hoping your next section would have…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

yeah, just about.

very cool!! what time period exactly? Evidently empires and kingdoms are still a thing, and they don’t have any form of electricity yet.

@ellette-giselle ehh sometimes the chapters get buried in my emails cause I’m busy and don’t get the chance to read them. When you post a new one then I’m able to go back through the ones I’ve missed.

I always imagined a modern-day Heinrich would walk around in a trench coat with glasses and would most likely have a spattering of freckles. 😂😂

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@ellette-giselle

True, true 😂

And it has a lot to do with–––––

You’re just going to leave me hanging? XD

Ahh, gotcha.

@ellette-giselle the style you’ve taken for that latest section is interesting! although I’m a little confused, are these letters to someone or more like journal entries?

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! I think you pulled it off. It doesn’t feel too odd or confusing. We are told when the time is passing by, and given a few details, and then the winter is over.

and the other down Julian’s back while he lay sleeping.

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hidi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Well, your moodboards did show that.

@ellette-giselle

Well, I’m guessing someone is going to get thrown into a colosseum. You have five guys there…some of them are bound to get hurt…or killed. It just has to happen.

@ellette-giselle

Ahhh!!! I remember now! Thanks for showing that verse to me. I’m all caught up. Finally. I’m hoping not to get behind in the future because then you have to read a lot more!!!

@ellette-giselle

It looks like we’ll be at a church training thing this Saturday, so I probably won’t be able to join. That said, you’re welcome to send an email link, and if I happen to be free I’ll bounce on.

@ellette-giselle

She is almost exactly like what I imagined her! And I like how she is stoking her ponytail while hiding matches XD she truly is carless.

@ellette-giselle

“Why? Who’s going to read it?”

Wasn’t Julien journaling as well? Maybe he should say something else?

Leon was watching Julian with astonishment. Never had he heard him give such strong and quick responses in an argument like this.

This is by far the most interesting part I’ve read!!!! I love it!

Julian lunged and grabbed the stu…

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@ellette-giselle

That section from Aelic reminds me so much of the “Winter King”! So far, I think his salvation story was the best! Well, there weren’t that many details concerning Roland and the others… anyway, that’s what I think.

@ellette-giselle

So, I’m assuming Roland lives with Rolf’s family?

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, it’s so weird because basically all they’re getting is the character’s personality and description in-book . . . also moodboards, which probably influenced it a lot xD But still, it’s cool seeing other people’s imaginations on paper.

@ellette-giselle

Right. Just make sure to give the readers some regular scenes too, so that there’s a blend between time jumps and regular speed. But you’ve already done this in the sections we’ve read, so just keep it up. 😜

@ellette-giselle

I imagine her with darker eyes and probably looking a little younger, but you did pretty well. 😁

@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much!!!!

She’s not smiling because I was trying to capture the way she feels to me at this point in the story. Hope that’s okay.

That’s totally fine! I like seeing how other people picture my characters–I don’t know, it’s just really interesting and cool. And yeah, I don’t know if I would imagine her smiling eit…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I like the section, though again, like we’ve talked about before, you do kind of gloss over everything and summarize it all in a page or two. That’s fine, though, if this isn’t a super important part of the story. It would be nice to get to see some more specifically of the new characters who’ve joined Julian and Leon, since we…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @theducktator

Okay, I’ve begun the 9-point outline and managed not to huff, puff, and blow it all down to start over again after filling three points of it. Phew! Finally, have something down for each point. Most of this you have seen already, but not in this structured form. I wrote this with the intention of the…[Read more]