Ellette Giselle

@linus-smallprint

Merry Christmas!!!

Oh I saw that coming! This is good, Linus. I do have one complaint.

 

This is an emotional moment, but I don’t see much emotion in Alan’s prayer.

I would suggest pausing in between fragments of prayer and describing what Alan is doing and feeling in that moment.

Exactly. This was just what I was thi…[Read more]

@liberty

yes!!! Yes it is!! The profile is Cora and the banner is the cover!!

have you read it!?!?

@liberty

oh me too! I love the redemption characters!!

wait! Rolf Klaus!! Not Rolf Klaus from The Baker Family Adventures?!?!

oh yes, I have often thought of that. I find so many aspects of writing a small reflection of God and us.

@whalekeeper

oh I was mostly teasing. Lol. 😂

I would never be comfortable in a place like that from what it sounds like, but Rory might go just because he has no idea what is going on and what a dance even is. lol.

we’ll see if he ends up peeking in there.

@liberty

Nope. No redemption for Hans. Plenty of chances in the book I read, but he turns them all down.

@elishavet-pidyon

GIRL! That is insanely good!

@grcr

I like it

@liberty

How about checking back with everyone Jan. 1st?

@savannah_grace2009

I’m so glad to hear that!

@savannah_grace2009

It’s good! definitely a better place to start. I like it, and I like the way your characters seem better shaped.

Keep it up!

@linus-smallprint

lol. right!

@linus-smallprint

yes, it was, and then I had another Ezra and forgot about that Ezra and it became a mess.

This was a sad scene. Was Liam a Christian? It seemed like there hadn’t been a chance to even share the gospel with him.

not that I know of. Sadly that’s often the way life works. I feel like it gets redundant if all the characters get t…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks so much for the feedback!

Oh, I’ll take a look at those sections you mentioned. Thanks!

@whalekeeper

Thanks!

@whalekeeper

huh. interesting.

I might have to look into that.

Thanks!!

@whalekeeper

is there a free version?

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It was night, and Joseph sat in Liam’s bedroom keeping watch. Sabina sat at the bed, stroking the boy’s head. Joseph had told her about Beric’s acceptance of Christ, but not the full story. She was already worried, and he felt now was not the time…

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@liberty

I really like this picture!!! So good!

Congrats on the win!

I’m glad Power judged because I wouldn’t have been able to submit anything today. With Christmas right around the corner I’m swamped!

@whalekeeper

That is so cool!

*Goes to look it up.*

@theducktator

Thank you!