Jaybird

@theshadow

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that. Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

More body language. That goes to the notes on the side. Thanks. Ah, more conflicting emotions. got…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

oh ok fine. Here we go.

SPOILERS FOR ANY SENSIBLE PEOPLE WHO KNOW WHAT’S GOOD FOR THEM TO SKIP!!! LOLLOLOL

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

• Introduction of Marcus and Julius.
• inciting moment. (Lucius dies)
• Marcus starts to seek the truth
• Marcus finds the Catacombs (note. start showing differences in the beliefs. i.e.…

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ok, here is chapter four. It’s a little shorter then the others.

 
Chapter 6
“My lord Julius, wake up my lord.”

Julius slowly opened his eyes and looked about him. He was not in his bedroom. Sitting up, he saw that he was on one of the couches in the sitting room. His neck and shoulder felt stiff and achy, and he knew he was in for a hea…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

 

Ok, this is starting to come together! I’m really liking this!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Well, I have my main points written out. But not the WHOLE thing. Like I know where I’m going with all this, and I know the main plot twists, climax, ending, all that. I didn’t just write the whole plot though. It’s more in like bullet points, if that makes sense.

 

I’m about to be a senior. Nope, not graduated yet. Almost!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Ah, that makes more sense about the trees. It’s an interesting idea. I’m excited to see how it develops.

 

The sickness also makes sense too!

I would like to know more about the Paynes as well. Like, why are they outcast, what is the race mixing thing, etc. etc. If that gets explained later then you can just leave it and…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

No, i don’t have anything written out. I mean, I  know what’s going to happen, but I really don’t want to say. However, if you need me to tell you for editing purposes then I will.

ALSO GIRL HOW DO YOU WRITE 20 CHAPTERS IN A DAY

Well, there has never been a day when I can’t write. If I don’t have time to write it out on the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

 

Oooooo So, so good!! I LOVE the name Cassian!! Oh man, this is so good! I can already envision this going so, so good. Oh man, I love it!

Ok, the killing the tree thing was a little strange. Explanation please!!! But I guess we’ll get to that later.

Also, I would like to know a little more about this sickness. why is it…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

No!!! nononono!! No spoilers!!! Spoilers are not allowed. N.O. They are illegal!!!!

 

Yay!! Can’t wait for the next chapter.

 

However…I have a bad habit of info dumping backstory in the first chapter

Why does that sound so familiar…….. *looks over the last 20 first chapters I’ve written in the past year* Oh… that’s w…[Read more]

@trailblazer

speaking like an adult to then sleeping on Flavia’s lap, which to me seems more like something a six-year-old would do.

Ok, that makes sense. I can switch him to leaning on her shoulder.

 

maybe do something like this the first time you mention it: Jesus Christ, the Prince of Life.

I like that. Sounds good. T…[Read more]

@rae

Awesome! I have a really good idea for this one! I can’t wait to blow your mind with a…… very bad impression of him. lol. We’ll see if I can pull my idea off and if it actully looks as good as I think it will.

You DO NOT want to see me previous drawing attempts. They were just creepy. I don’t really have anything else though…I’ll try d…

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@highscribeofaetherium

@theshadow

Great guys!!! I can’t wait to see what you give me to draw! I’ll do multiple characters for each of you, you’ll just have to send them one at a time. Whoever sends one first gets it drawn first. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

What is the plot of my story!!? Oh girl you can’t make me do that. I HATE spoilers. I can’t stand that. *sob* *sob*

I mean….. I guess I could try a little…… OK…. let’s see.

I guess, well…. Ah, I’m no good at this! OK, I guess it started when I overheard a conversation from a group of young men saying Christianity…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

 

Oooo, this is getting good. I’m not sure if there’s a lot of critique I can give, because again, it’s just getting itself off the ground, and it seems really smooth. (way smoother then my first chapter! I think you’re in your element writing fantasy!)

Of course, I would love to know more about these characters, what time…[Read more]

Oooo, this is getting good. I’m not sure if there’s a lot of critique I can give, because again, it’s just getting itself off the ground, and it seems really smooth. (way smoother then my first chapter! I think you’re in your element writing fantasy!)

Of course, I would love to know more about these characters, what time period they live in, (or…[Read more]

@rae

So I’m guessing Tenz looks like a normal-ish human. I mean, same form?

@linus-smallprin

Thanks so much for the heads up! I’ll take a look! That sounds like fun!

@savannah_grace2009

Do you have any more besides the prologue written? I would love to read more and give some feedback?

@savannah_grace2009

Oh no worries!!! Whenever you get the chance!

and here’s Chapter 5.

I hope I’m not swamping Y’all!

 
Chapter 5
“In the beginning, Marcus, there was nothing,” began Caius. “God, created the heavens and the earth, and all that lies in between. Then, he fashioned the first man and breathed the breath of life into him. For the man, he made a helper; the first woman. Together they lived in a bea…[Read more]