Elishavet Elroi

@grcr

Have you listened to the soundtracks? They have them online and I’vfe listened to all of them. Daniel is going to be AMAZING!!

Haha! So all you’re doing is reading the critiques? lol. That’s funny! I hope they’re interesting. haha,

Do you want me to tag you when I post chapters?

@grcr

SO COOL!!! My friend got to see it live too! I watched it online when they streamed for free one night. I LOVE Sight &Sound, and I’m DYING to see Daniel!!!!!! I loved David so much! I feel like Esther onward took a huge turn in their music style and quality.

Ooo! What do you think from what you’ve read?

@grcr

I KNOW!!!! It is such a good song!!

Hey, have you been stalking this forum? (curiosity.)

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon

If this book had a theme song, this would have to be it. I have listened to it several times while editing, and this just about embodies the whole story.

What do y’all think?

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon

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The wind blew gently on the roof of the little house in the middle of the great capital city of Ardenta. On the roof, his legs crossed and a Bible on his knees, was a young man. He was reading intently, and every now and then he leant over to write dow…

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@linus-smallprint

Sounds good.

Whoa! Interrogate is a strong word!

lol

Okay, well i don’t like him very much. he seems weak and kinda sulky. I mean. I don’t know, he’s a coward, and I don’t like cowards. I feel a redemption arch, but at the moment it’s hard to see. So yeah, I’m hoping for redemption, but I’m not liking him right now.

@linus-smallprint

I had no idea what that picture was from. i just saw the meme the other day and thought of it. It was perfect.

Sounds like you are speaking form experience here

Let’s just say, a long time ago, the last fight I had with my brother ended when mom duct taped our wrists together.

For the whole day.

We had to do school t…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ooo, that chapter was very well written. I was feeling very tense, even though I knew what was going to happen. lol.

Yeah, Tyn is in a good position. Have her do it. This will be so, so bad for Eric. Plus, Tyn is in a bad mood, so she may even scold him.

I have never met a guy that didn’t absolutely hate it when a girl scolded him.

@linus-smallprint

Yup, it’s Eric. (How did you know?)

um…. because it was obvious since Martha got captured that he was a liability, and by the chapter you just wrote I knew he was going to get caught or alert the soldiers or something. (I may overstudy literary patterns.)

Sooo, maybe I’m blind, but I’m not seeing the problem……….. w…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

It occurs to me that Sabina and Julian are similar. Both have a brother who became a Christian, and they both thought he had gone crazy, which made them resistant to hearing the gospel and angry at whoever shared it with their brother. So I’m wondering if Sabina is going to recall how she acted and how this may impact her i…

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@the_lost-journal

oh my goodness.

Are you serious?

We can move this conversation to a new forum I guess.

@hybridlore

I write a very wide variety of things.My dystopian stuff is me being a conspiracy theorist.

This one is about a young farmer living in a country that faced Civil War plus a 3rd Word War. The country was split in half and the East in uninhabitable and forbidden, and the West is under dictatorship. The idea of family has been…[Read more]

@hybridlore

It’s called Forbidden.

It’s dystopian.

@linus-smallprint

Oh my goodness.

That is so bad.

I love it!!

@hybridlore

uhu. We’ll see about that.

I’m currently trying to wrap up another novel, but I may post more later. If not, maybe Monday morning.

@hybridlore

Oh no. I will not change my mind.

So I’ll just keep writing away, but if the protection squad activates then I’ll deal with it. lolololol.

@hybridlore

Too bad you didn’t know about this before.

Now you’re too late to save Adrian.

BRAWWWWWHAAAAAH

@hybridlore

You better add that those are my characters, because I know at least Freedom has a Leon. And she’s actually been pretty nice to him.

Lately.

@hybridlore

HEY!!!

I haven’t done anything to them!

yet…………….

lol. Okay, you can have them for now.

@hybridlore

The protection squad was formed for Freedom and Godlyfantasy’s characters. Let’s see, I think Riker, Paxton, and….. ugh, I can’t remember. There were a couple other on there. I think Leon got added too. They would go and kidnap them so that Freedom and Godly couldn’t kill them. Then they would have to try to get their characters…[Read more]