Jaybird

@linus-smallprint

Hmm. I guess I was trying to cross over the LTBL goal into this without clearly stating that. It’s hard, because Joseph has a tendency to lean toward a survival mindset (no one can really blame him) and the story is his POV.

UGH, I can see the Eric thing both ways. I could still use his almost death as a “wakeup call” and it…[Read more]

@hybridlore

He’s not THAT young. Adrian was younger then him when he died.

@hybridlore

Look, if you can get at least two more people on this forum to agree with you……….

lololol

@hybridlore

Stop it.

Go away.

I literally have my finger hanging over the delete button for that scene.

@hybridlore

I don’t know……… what would I even do with him if he survived?

(Besides get him married and all that.)

@hybridlore

But I already submitted it this way. I can’t change it now, KP won’t let me edit that post……………

@hybridlore

Oh shut up.

You’re actually going to convince me to save him.

lolololol.

@linus-smallprint

@hybridlore wants me to save Eric.

What are your thoughts?

@hybridlore

i don’t know.

Maybe.

I’ll think about it.

@linus-smallprint

I sure don’t enjoy it.

Do you think it’s fine as long as this is the last one……. (for a while.)

@linus-smallprint

Kind of. I did get a little hope, but when the mood switched I thought, “Okay. Here we go again. Do we have to be here for this?”

Oh.

I thought you said to go ahead and kill them.

Do you think it wasn’t good?

@linus-smallprint

i think so. He’s in the barn talking to martha

@linus-smallprint

Hmm, wow, must have really sobered you. No comment on the amount of exclamation marks. lol. After I posted it, I looked back and was like, “wow, there’s a lot.” lol.

And no comment on the fact that I offed Joseph’ best friends.

Ah. So there was a positive event in there. This is what you were referring too.

Yes, and I have a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Maybe. This is a question I will ask at the end, but so far, what would the top scenes that you would like to see illustrations for be?

Ooo, I haven’t thought of this really.

Okay. well, the Stripe one of course. That would be super funny/cute, especially with his ears flat. lol.

Maybe one of Martha and Alan talking. I would…[Read more]

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NEXT SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Joseph sat at the table and stared at his plate. Noah and Darrien had already eaten and were pulling on their boots. They knew the hard day of work they had ahead, and they had been able to eat

Sabina put her arm over Joseph’s sh…

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@linus-smallprint

Yippy! Stripe was HUGGED!!!!

AWWWWW! it was soooooo cute!!!!!! Now you have to draw a picture of it!!!

Aside from Stripe being hugged, I really enjoyed the chapter.I’m glad you brought the crow back in. I was wondering how long it would be before you tied that part of the plot back into the story.

Also, one…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Woah, are you accusing me of being a sadist?

lololololol.

Thanks I’ll check it out!

I’m no longer surprised when a character is taken/died. In fact, I was expecting it any time now. That’s not good.

Is it though? I mean sure, in modern storytelling that is a thing to reserve for smacking readers with, but could the fact that no one is safe almost be a shock in in of itself? Maybe I’ve read too much from early church histo…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

thanks so much for this feedback.

im not going to say anything so as not to shed light on which path i take, but i will say that it was extremely helpful knowing your thoughts.

thanks again!