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@rae

Yeah, I was a little worried about that…do you think it would help if I gave Brenna’s master a name? The young soldier must remain unnamed, for my own reasons, but I could give the master a name. I’ll rearrange the paragraphs so it’s easier to understand what’s going on.

Yeah, I think that would help a lot.

For the title, maybe “Murderer”?

@jonas

you’re fine!! no worries! 🙂

@rae

Yeah, I noticed the same thing as Freedom. It did get a little confusing. But overall it’s really good!

@thearcaneaxiom

Um….I just listened to it and….how?????

How is that physically possible! that’s kinda disturbing, XD

It’s so good though!

@rae

Oooh I like it!

@esther-c

Livia

“Do you know what dorm you’re staying in?” Callista asked her.

Liv shook her head. “No, I just got here. Is there a place to go check in or something? I thought there would be more people around…where is everyone?”

@hybridlore

OH MY GOSH I LOVE THAT SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you!!!!!

@thearcaneaxiom @jonas

I like this chapter as well!

Thanks!

Yeah, I just wanted the chapter to end on an emotional climax. I kind of wanted short chapter breaks, because I don’t like it how in books some authors make like 40 page long chapters. I kind of like it in two different chapters for some reason.

@freedomwriter76

I know! They should get an award or something XD

@thearcaneaxiom

I want to listen…but i’m kinda scared XD

@thearcaneaxiom @jonas

Here’s chapter 2, if you can’t read it today, that’s fine.

Chapter 2: Euphoria

Sef’s hands flew to her mouth to stifle a scream.

She wanted to sing, scream, cry, dance for joy.

Her mother was not sick. And she was going to have a little brother or sister!

“Really?” Sef squeaked, smiling so hard her cheeks ached, and t…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

But again, I don’t think it’s graphic at all, so you’re good. <3

Okay, that helps me a lot! Thank you! I get really paranoid when I’m writing, XD

And thanks for sharing! The last one was SO SAD!!!! *cries*

That makes sense, thanks so much for helping me!

@jonas

Should I post the next one later today, or wait until tomorrow?

@jonas

four appearing at once would be panic inducing, lol.

Inserts “panik” meme

lol

@jonas

Thanks! I was actually really happy with this scene, I think it’s one of my best.

Yes, it would be Sef and Lilitu’s book. I have four chapters of that one so far, but I didn’t want to spam you guys, lol.

Yeah, I was planning to do either Neveah or Ottoline for the “teaser”, though Neveah’s would make more sense.

@highscribeofaetherium

(Hey, Vethe. If you’re in so sure there are only twelve planets then WHAT PLANET ARE YOU ON? lol)

Guess she didn’t think of that one lol XD

@thearcaneaxiom

Do it lol

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @anyone-else

So here’s the first chapter of my revisions to the Andromeda book…ready for critiquing!

Chapter 1: New Beginnings

Newborn light sifted between the windows, piercing the darkness.

Through the smudged glass, Sef could see the Andromedan sunrise, she could see the indigo trees dancing as the wind pushed them…[Read more]

@power

I like it! very intriguing!

@jonas

Okay, sounds good!