@beth-torres
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Is this workingggg
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Yeah…Alpha’s probably the most messed up…
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Hehehe Alpha has more knives than social skills
Yep lol
Though, Dante better tread carefully, he has struck a nerve.
Alpha
Something dangerous flashed in Alpha’s eyes. “In no way is it stupid,” He growled. “Think for a second how you would fear such things if you were created in a lab. How would you feel if such things gave you life…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@loopylin np
Alpha
Alpha blinked. “No, not exactly. I’m a warrior, so I fight wherever in the stars they want me this time. Only time I ever thought of assassination was with some of those annoying lords in the Council, but if I did that, they’d probably lock me up again. And that’s no fun. I think they like sticking me with needles.” A shudder…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
I will need to clear this up in the story i guess. I didn’t mean all the laws, I meant more the changes in that we no longer have to sacrifice animals because Jesus came as the ultimate sacrifice. The laws changed in little ways because Hope had finally come, we didn’t have to wait for it.
I will make this clearer in the text,…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
It looks a lot better! One thing I noticed is that Antonio does say “fabuloso” twice.
“Then the topic conveniently comes up in a conversation with Easton.”
Also, I feel like this might be better if you just change it to “Then I can ask Easton” or something like that. Otherwise, it looks great! I like the way you made Hallie more rea…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
@kielah-h @ellette-giselle @raxforge @whalekeeper @hybridlore
This is the final part of Story 9.
In my writing document, I named this story temporarily as ‘Delirium’ but I would like some better title ideas if you can give me some. Thx in advance.
Five days had passed since Baron had been taken to the Handel mansion and his symptoms…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Awwww!!!
But in six months he’s moving to Florida for college…..😭😭
At least I have a little brother <333 I love him to DEATH…I literally love him so muchhhh
That is so funny that your MC is named Hallie because (I know I’ve told you this before but Imma say it again hahaha) my little sister’s name is Hallie!!! so it’s just…
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
I bet if i made Dante bored enough, he’d sneak into the school and pretend to be a student for the day. That would be fun.
lol
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Alpha
Alpha shrugged. “She put a kid in the hospital, and thought she could take care of me too. So I stabbed her. And yes, I do often stab people.” Alpha paused, thinking about what he had just said, for the first time considering how his audience would take that information without context. “Though, it’s not just because I’m bored.…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
speaking of jews, what are your honest thoughts on them? Like how to you see them?
I believe they are God’s people, and that the promises God made still apply. I don’t believe that the Church is the new Israel.
Other than them being God’s people, I don’t stand behind them. They support the lgbtq+ community last I heard, and I…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Ooh, I’ve also got to add in the part about the gov trying to pass a new law that allows them to persecute Christians, but I haven’t figured out when yet.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Great! 😁
Okay, I see what you mean. Are you thinking like, within their friend groups? Most of the story so far takes place either at school, the church meetings, or their house. Later, though, there will probably be a lot of scenes at their respective job assignments, so you’ll get to see more of the culture then. Do you have any i…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Girllll, you’re so sweet!!! 🤪🥰 Seriously, your reaction really means a lot. 😊
Awwww ofccc!!!!
That was actually kinda my goal—I wanted this story to be someone’s comfort book, because I loosely based a few aspects of it off of my comfort books. (I’m not stealing any of that author’s ideas, I promise!!! just some of the vibes in certain s…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
But just to clarify, I don’t really ever listen to secular music. I only want to listen to music that glorifies God!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
What are your thoughts on catholic reconciliation? (For those who don’t know, reconciliation is where catholics go (supposed to be at least every month) to confess their sins. And then they are forgiven for them.) And what questions do you have. (That definition is the most simple version, there is more to it.)
I don’t think i…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
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