Beth

*emerges from the dust and shadows*

Has the dance even happened yet?

Actually, I think there was a point in the drafting or planning stage that lowkey forgot Brandon existed 💀🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@theducktator

Awww, thank you so much girl!!! 💖 I appreciate you taking the time to read through it all! <33

Do you have any additional feedback after having read the whole thing?

@savannah_grace2009

No that’s really helpful! Tysm!!

@whalekeeper

That looks so good, I love how the face is so simple but clean, it looks like it belongs in a picture book.

@linus-smallprint

Oooh that’s a good idea!!

And I like your ideas too…I feel like that would be really cool if we did something like that

Now that I’m going back to the beginning…

This is really hard XD

because I know you’re trying to go for the “chaos” vibes of a big family as they get ready for church and the party. You set up Hallie, Easton, and the parents pretty well, especially for the fast-paced scene, but the other siblings kind of disappear throughout the book.

Maybe…[Read more]

@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! you’re the best and I always love exchanging ideas with you <3

I LOVE LITTLE HALLIE

@esther-c

yeah, Cars and Phones BROKE ME

Last week my mom was at Mayo Clinic in Rochester doing more cancer treatments, which was hard since it wasn’t planned. I guess even if it was, it would be hard since she was gone for over a week and me and my siblings and my dad were all missing her a lot and attempting to keep our house from going out of…[Read more]

@keilah-h

also mmm, I love cheesecake.

Why do I feel like Sniper would like cheesecake? XD. I don’t know, I can just picture him denying that he enjoys it.

@loopylin @theducktator @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @keilah

Thanks everyone!

@theducktator

Awesome, thank you so much!!

@rae

I’m so glad it went well!!!! Happy Birthday, by the way!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @highscribeofaetherium @hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon

I was gonna update you last night, but I figured I’d wait and give you all the tea in one post.

Today we did it! We went out to all the little shops, and it was awesome! Four (three of which I wanted to look at sadly) were closed, but we still got to go to three…[Read more]

Also, apparently I haven’t shared the mock cover yet!! (At least in this forum) Here it is! (At the end of the story XD)

Also…

Look! I found little Hallie!! 🥰