Beth

@rae

I may answer all your questions later, but for now, I am drawn into the story.

Alrighty, awesome! 👍

I see potential for this story to be better if you had at least one chapter before this that introduced us to daily life with the Orb. It would drawn me in more, and make us care about Ev and Ami more than just plopping them and the plot in our…

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@mineralizedwritings

Thank you so much Esther! I’ve been doubting my writing recently and really comparing myself to others, so it makes me happy you like it. I started writing in present tense as soon as I started writing, so after the initial hurdle (it was hard lol, I kept using said) it’s been pretty natural, because I don’t know how write…

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@jonas

I’m EST, so rn, 5 is a hit or miss for me. But I’ll try my best to show up.

@acancello

Wow!!! That’s amazing! Congratulations!!!!!!!! 🥳🥳

@jonas

Yes 🫡

@whalekeeper

Nar

“That’s… Unlike anything I’ve ever heard of… ” Nar’s mind wondered what her world would look like if that was the case, it certainly would be crazy. “Does that mean that if I think I’m a bird, I am one?”

@trailblazer

Aw me too! That was so funny XD

@acancello

Oh my goodness, congratulations!! That’s so exciting!!

@savannah_grace2009

1. Is it boring?? I’ve been really scared that this doesn’t draw you in and isn’t interesting.

Nope!

2. Is Sef relatable? Can you really feel her and does she become real in your mind?

Yes, she’s definitely relatable!

3. Was there anywhere that you were confused?

Hmm, I don’t think so, since I’ve read most of to before, but I d…[Read more]

@esther-c Wow! I really like it so far! It pulls you in really well, and I like the cliffhanger type chapter endings. I’ll try to answer the questions!

1. Were you drawn into the story right away?

Yep!

2. What are your first impressions of these characters? (Specifically the MCs. I know some of y’all already know these charries, but just p…[Read more]

@acancello

Oh my goodness!!!!! I am so happy for you, and so proud of you! I am so lucky to get to know you as a friend on here, and I’m celebrating right with you, girl!! You have to let me know how editing/publishing goes!!!

Well, Pitts are explained later in the book, same with Rippak and Godede Waters. I didn’t want to explain everything…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @mineralizedwritings @smiley @esther-c @rae @hybridlore @keilah-h @lightoverdarkness6 @whalekeeper @acancello @mineralizedwritings @vinagirl

Okay, I really have been working on this chapter a bunch, and I would like to know you’re guys’ thoughts! I know some of you guys have read this chapter, but I was wondering if you had any…[Read more]

@acancello

I would be such an emotional wreck 😭😭😭 LIKE FINISHING A NOVEL!!! THAT IS SO AMAZING!!

@esther-c

Girl I love Ami and Ev!!! I love Ev’s personality, I wish I had a friend like him XD

1. Were you drawn into the story right away?

I kind of agree with Min, it seemed really abrupt, and I was a little confused at first. But the action also made me want to see what happened next, so it drew me in, but only because I was confused and…[Read more]

@ACANCELLO

OH MY GOSH GIRLLLLLLL!!!! I AM SO HAPPY FOR YOU!!! I LITERALLY FREAKED OUT WHEN I READ THAT YOU’RE FINISHING THE EPILOGUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AHHHH!!! <333

@esther-c

Idk…I just feel like that way has much better writing and is just more emotional XD

if I’m being completely honest here… sometimes hooks are overrated…. 👀😂

lol!

@trailblazer

Aww that was so sweet I love it!!

@esther-c

I may answer all your questions later, but for now, I am drawn into the story.
BUT
I see potential for this story to be better if you had at least one chapter before this that introduced us to daily life with the Orb. It would drawn me in more, and make us care about Ev and Ami more than just plopping them and the plot in our laps off…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Nar

“Yeah, I get that. I mean, you don’t get punished for messing it up, you’re just corrected. If you’re born Realn it’s as natural as walking, and putting your left hand over your heart just feels like a crime. If you’re not…it seems like a bunch of silly rules. Why not use the left hand, your right might be busy?” Nora sto…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah, from Nahim’s right elbow down is robotic. I might make it the entire arm.