Faith

I’m testing KP pictures with a meme.

It doesn’t seem like pictures are working. >:[

@ellette-giselle

Loll

@ellette-giselle
Uh oh… KP looks weird…

Great chapters!! I can’t wait to see what happens next!

The plan was 10 pages, and I only wrote 4. *Sigh* I feel like the problem with short stories is, I can never fall in love with them unless I get into the nitty-gritty details of a scene, which isn’t great if I want to draft the whole thing in one night. Done for now, will continue.

Nonlinear stories are so hard. 🙁 Why am I writing this? My brain is tied into knots right now.

@liberty

Same here…

Drafting a short story. :15

@ellette-giselle

Aww! Jonathan and Amber and Leo were so cute. 🥰

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

@elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper

Lois

“Not particularly,” Lois answered, assuming the question was directed at both of them. He forced himself to stop drawing and set down his pen, then his hid his arm with his sleeve again. He gave the kids who had spoken to Viktor a cold look, which none of them noticed. Then he looked at Viktor. “You seem…[Read more]

Researching other ethnic backgrounds feels so much harder than I want it to be. So many different places, so many different people.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much!

Of course! *Tips hat*

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

I get that. Descriptive words have so many different quali…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yay! Jonathan and Michael are back!!

These were great chapters. I can’t wait for 618 (Rory?) to meet the rebellion. (I’m assuming that will happen, anyway.)

@liberty, I think they were your comments? I really hope you’re wrong about Michael dying. 🥺😢

I was going to share my thoughts, but then this thread would start to become redundant, lol! I pretty much agree with what everyone else has said. And as for the passage people keep referencing about food offered to idols and becoming a stumbling block, that’s 1 Corinthians 8.

Oh cheese and crackers, now I’m worried everyone’s gonna think I’m a horrible person

I just released that band might cause you pain to look up because the Google search makes them look satanic. 😅😭 They do not worship a demon, point blank, and I can explain that if need be.

@theshadow

Hey! 🙂 I haven’t thought about this in a long time, but I agree with everyone else on this thread. Just because a genre of music has been used to spread bad messages does not mean the genre itself is bad.

Take jazz, for example. There are many different jazz songs, and these songs have been the backdrop for cozy, peaceful memories…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Some of the characters had very compelling characteristics, like Jim’s human decency and Evan with his likable dialogue. They all served their roles and were decently memorable. Jonathan was my favorite because he was the POV…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m trying to fill out these feedback questions before I lose track of what’s happening. *Types furiously*

Someone suggested I cut the last section of the blurb and leave it with the part about Jonathan’s friendship because it has more of a cliffhanger. What do you think?

I say remove the part about tragedy striking, and only…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

That’s so exciting!! I know you’ve got some help already, but if you need another set of eyes or another opinion, I’m here! 🤗