Faith

Half an hour!

@mineralizedwritings

Oh yeah, that’s something I easily forget about. Thanks for reminding me! I’ll definitely keep that in mind as I write and edit. 😊

@mineralizedwritings Thanks!

@whalekeeper

I just wanna give Lois a hug…

I think Lois would be good at giving hugs

Dante

One corner of Dante’s mouth twitched upwards into a half smile. As much as he wanted to, he did not get this kid. The others were easy. Cal wanted to learn, and he was loyal to Princess Kate and whatever country it was that they came from. Hugo was fri…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Whaaat? I would never.  *Hides plot idea notes*

@savannah_grace2009

Alrighty! Here we go!

1. Is it boring?? I’ve been really scared that this doesn’t draw you in and isn’t interesting.

Um, I wouldn’t say it’s boring. I think the pacing is pretty good. Honestly, boring is so subjective, so no, it’s not boring. Because I don’t mind things moving a little slower at the beginning. Some people m…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yep!

Awesome!

Ev is obviously pretty reckless. He doesn’t seem to care about getting into danger, and I’m not really sure to describe his personality but he seems playful?

And Ami is sweet and responsible. She really cares about Ev and wants to protect him.

I think you just nailed them both in a few sentences. XD That’s exactly what…[Read more]

@rae

I may answer all your questions later, but for now, I am drawn into the story.

Alrighty, awesome! 👍

I see potential for this story to be better if you had at least one chapter before this that introduced us to daily life with the Orb. It would drawn me in more, and make us care about Ev and Ami more than just plopping them and the plot in our…

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@mineralizedwritings

Thank you so much Esther! I’ve been doubting my writing recently and really comparing myself to others, so it makes me happy you like it. I started writing in present tense as soon as I started writing, so after the initial hurdle (it was hard lol, I kept using said) it’s been pretty natural, because I don’t know how write…

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@jonas

I’m EST, so rn, 5 is a hit or miss for me. But I’ll try my best to show up.

@loopylin

Well PppppPpPfffffffffff

Goodness

I’m just trying to protEct the babies; what if you were going to traumatize them with some tragic events? Now they’ll be stuck safely in KP limbo forever.

@loopylin

XD Sorrryyyyy

@rae

Hugo

“I wish. Unfortunately my baby brother? Seb? He was the second to discover how people change. It depends on your long-term mental state, not whatever you want. And most of the time, these changes slowly intensify your worst beliefs… To use his words.”

They stood still now. Hugo hooked his thumbs in his…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

My world sometimes makes the mental, physical.”

Oh my gosh that is such a cool concept. Stop making me want to read books that don’t even exist yet

@rae

Hugo

Realn sounded like a fairy story.

“…Here I am talking so much! What of your culture?” Nar laughed, her curls thrown around her face, like a windswept flower.

She looked like a fairy too. Just a little.

“My culture?” Hugo blinked, and hesitated. “Um… let’s see.”

Nar probably thought he was looking for words. She stared up at him…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Aw me too! That was so funny XD

@acancello

Oh my goodness, congratulations!! That’s so exciting!!

@savannah_grace2009

1. Is it boring?? I’ve been really scared that this doesn’t draw you in and isn’t interesting.

Nope!

2. Is Sef relatable? Can you really feel her and does she become real in your mind?

Yes, she’s definitely relatable!

3. Was there anywhere that you were confused?

Hmm, I don’t think so, since I’ve read most of to before, but I d…[Read more]

@esther-c Wow! I really like it so far! It pulls you in really well, and I like the cliffhanger type chapter endings. I’ll try to answer the questions!

1. Were you drawn into the story right away?

Yep!

2. What are your first impressions of these characters? (Specifically the MCs. I know some of y’all already know these charries, but just p…[Read more]

@rae

I’ve been meaning to read this for a while and I finally got to it!! I only got to read the first chapter, but my brain is too dead to give any valuable feedback right now. Love it so far!!

I apologize in advance in the formatting is weird. I’m not sure how this is gonna look once it actually posts. XD

Chapter 1

“This was a stupid idea.” Everton Barlowe stared at the geometric building towering above him.

“I told you,” his best friend Amidala said with a smirk.

“Well, I thought it would work.”

“Ev, when would any of your ide…[Read more]