Faith

@rae
Just to clarify, I think that Chase having that flaw makes him a good and realistic character. I’m not critiquing his flaw, I’m critiquing that it’s being shown as a virtue.

@loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it. That’s exactly what I was trying to say 😂 I can understand why it’s tempting to write a character getting their way though. It’s basically their element, even though it’s a flaw.

@savannah_grace2009 Yayy :]

Why do I always either not respond to these things, or respond with 3+ giant paragraphs?? There’s pretty much no in between XD

@theducktator 8 or 9

@rae

Ok, first off, I love Jenny and also how you made the unicorn have cloven hooves.

I do have some critiques, though. Sorry if they aren’t helpful.

I don’t think giving your characters what they want is a good idea, unless you’re writing a tragedy. If I gave Ellie the safety that she wanted, she would isolate herse…[Read more]

I found a dumb song that made me giggle called I Am Steve by Hey Steve

Been listening to it on repeat XD

@rae

Aww, I loved it!!

The only thing I’d recommend is to really deepen Chase’s pov, especially after he gives up his sight. Because it still felt like he could see with the way things were described. I think if you describe it in the way in which Chase was experiencing it, then it will have a much bigger impact.

Other than that it was good! (:

What made it decisive in my head, was Chase actually wanted this to happen. Sure, he would have avoided it in the story, but the Chase in my head told me that this all must happen.

I get that. He did however already sacrifice his mobility so maybe it just feels redundant to me.

It helps to keep some tether on the character’s mind even if you feel…[Read more]

Guys, I am so in love with plotting right now. It can be so fun. Just need to say it somewhere. 😛

@rae

I like the deer-like appearance of the unicorn. It also seems like a fun resolution scene. Family reunion scenes are the best. I can also picture Chase on the cushions well, because I know what it feels like to be an invalid now and then but still participate in family activities.

I feel like the blindness bit was too much? I mean for Chase…[Read more]

@keilah-h

That would be awesome!! Currently on my monthly newsletter I’m going through each of my planets and their races one by one, so I’ve been doings something sort of similar to that! Having a book out like that would be really cool haha.

@ellette-giselle

If you want to share your plot outline and story details, I could try to help you with a blurb!

@ellette-giselle

6 or 7!

@ellette-giselle

hmm I was taking a break, but I have nothing to do for the next three hours so you can give me a description if you want

@ellette-giselle

7 looks so nice with the boxed section on top. You could even try something similar on the bottom with your name, but this still looks good.

@thearcaneaxiom

I agree with every single thing you said. 🙃 And thank you,  I’m glad you agree with me that she’s looking for some recognition.

What I would ask is who is she trying to get approval from?

I don’t know her family too well, but I’m sure she realizes her parents wouldn’t have a good reaction to so much serious material in her work.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

1, 2, and 7 are my favorites.

@whalekeeper

This is a hard situation. I’m not going to tell you what to do, because I haven’t dealt with such situations before, and I’m not going to claim any authority on the subject (though I do have family who might be able to help). That being said, the biggest red flag to me is her parents. If she is not only willing, but actively…[Read more]

You believe in me when I can’t believe in myself.

Not to downplay Ellette’s opinion 😅 I didn’t really mind this part. To me, when I read this part, it’s more about the value of self-worth. You need people to believe in you, even if you can’t sometimes. I have low self-esteem sometimes and I need my mom to put me back on track. If we tell o…[Read more]

@rae

I forgot about this. I might join if it gets started, but I don’t have any ideas for what to do next.