Allison

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.

@jonas

I think I like Spectrachromy/lurgy the best. I also like Chromamancy.

@the_lost-journal Nope! Just curious, no debt nor blackmail I know of. The only emperor I know cares nothing for potatoes, nor is his name Shadow.

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I’m late in getting back to you.

Yeah, that was a creepy story. I don’t have too much to say about it—I agree with Linus about the pacing. I, too, like your use of repetition here. 😊

in my reached up to my ears, to feel them blood… leaking out of them…

I think I get what you’re saying here, but I had a bit of a hard time…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal Don’t worry, I’m not working for an evil overlord lol

nope, just wanted to know. But I’m ok if it’s a secret.

@evelyn-collins how did i mess up your tag bruhhhh

@eveyn-collins heyyyyy! Was just thinking about you yesterday. I’ve gotten to the point where Leo learns she’s gonna be with the Empire in the edited version, and it’s great so far!!

I would love to see more illustrations! I might draw Leo and Crosshair again, too.

I’ve been doing well! I finished one of my own fanfics during the new year and…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal where you got the potato pictures.

@rae I like it! What happened to Baron? He sounds like he got really messed up. Poor guy.

@theshadow thank you!

Ooh, I really love the idea of Old Hunter looking kinda like Sniper but obviously older and with scars or something. Maybe I’ll add a part about how Huntress feels whenever she looks at him, how it stings that they look so much alike yet the one who loves her is dead, and the other remains alive to torment her.

(why do I w…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint you’re welcome! Looking forward to book 2!

@theducktator RIP pennies.

Although I heard the reason was because copper and zinc and whatever else they were using to make ’em was getting too expensive for a coin whose value is 1 cent.

@the_lost-journal

Super creepy, but interesting! Is this the entirety of the story, or is there going to be more? Either way, the mystery remains effective: if there’s more, than this is effective for piquing the reader’s interesting; if not, the questions it leaves unanswered are intriguing in and of themselves. I also liked your use of repetition.

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]