Abigail.M.

Oh dear i just realized your story was contemporary lol!

Also, have you considered her as an antagonist type character?

@smiley

Hi!

Where you’re going with this is interesting, I like the idea of having the inciting incident being a bunch of siblings with different kinds of baggage coming together for a holiday at their parent’s house, and here’s some different ideas with where to take it:

• The parents have to share some kind of news before the dad’s 50th…

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This is really random, but if you want some good Star Wars fanfic, I recommend Pente Patrol and Elseworlds on Youtube, they’re audio so great for listening to while doing chores.

It’s another world that has interplanetary travel in it’s solar system, it’s not as widespread and casual as star- wars since large-scale items can’t be brought through unlike living organisms and what they have on them at the time.

Thank you for reading this! I hope you have a good day/night/wherever you are!

hand grabbing his chest as he goes unconscious

aaand that’s episode 1!

show that water in lungs

I might cut him opening his mouth and he just faints instead?

sees hand reaching toward him.

Jake opens his mouth to scream/gasp?

jake struggling even more.

Jake starts sinking, panic setting in with the red. he’s thrashing in the water

any tips for showing how he’s struggling to swim?

*hits Jake in stomach, knocking him back into water”

(Fabian) *sighs* “Sorry about this.” *yeets gun.*