Abigail.M.

@rae

I’ll make a full reply later since I’m angry at myself rn, and when I get angry, most ppl think it’s at them. Same with disappointment.

It’s ok, I totally get it! And don’t be angry at yourself, we’ve all had those moments. Sometimes I get really frustrated with whatever I’m doing and get super mad at my story and self for it not being what…[Read more]

I’ll try later lol

Oops it’s not working lol. so sorry about that!

Retry:

Also, here’s a drawing of my characters! ( thought you might like to see)

Top 5 Myths to Avoid When Writing about Grief

Here’s another one, I hope these help! (they’re what I can find lol)

Three Ways to Use Subtext to “Show, Don’t Tell”

this one may help, I’ll go look for some others, I can’t find the old stuff 😪

@rae

Hi! I finally finished the critique!

Evening came, leaving the Banorian landscape lit by flickering torches under a deep blue sky. The trees still rippled in the wind, but they were now just dark shadows.

Nahim walked away from where he had left Mandin, the Ward in the annual meeting at the close of this festive day. He was invited by…[Read more]

@rae

Hi!

I just wanted to let you know that I finished reading the second half of chapter two, and I’ll get started on giving you my thoughts, sorry this has taken so long!

@overcomer

My style…I’m not really sure where it has come from, except that almost all the poetry I’ve read was written before the 1940’s.

The meter here is roughly 7-8 syllables with a pause of cadence in the middle of each line. The rhythm is One and TWO and Three and FOUR. I hope that helps and isn’t more confusing.

Ah, slant rhyme. I have…[Read more]

@livingwoodchronicles

Hmm…true, true.

How do I sign up?

Random interjection of verse!!!!

Just a girl with big dreams and a heart full of Going,

Hands for the harvest and tales for the Sowing,

Awaiting her story but even then knowing-

That fields laid to follow are still part of Growing.

@livingwoodchronicles

This looks amazingly! I would love to join in, although…

My writing isn’t the very great yet, (but my sister who is reading over my shoulder just said it wasn’t bad either). I do write clean, the prose is just bumpy. I’d love to try though.

@rae

I’m not sure what to call my style, besides being metered and rhymed. I don’t know a whole lot about poetry, besides a few basic rules.

Hmm, thanks for ideas and feedback!

@savannah_grace2009

Thank you! It’s one of my best so far.

Hey y’all, I and my sister will be on off and on for the next couple of days (especially tomorrow), so that could potentially add 2 to your numbers.

@Rae (forgot to tag you earlier lol)

Also, what is the end goal of your plot? Reuniting the galaxy and reversing what Grathmere did while working with him? I recommend making Grathmere somewhat morally relatable (think Edmund Dantes from The Count of Monte Cristo)

That is revealed later on in the book. While Nahim thought that it was impossible, someone did come into the grasslandsxand found him. Not Mandin though.

I see, maybe you could include something about Nahim’s confusion?

Oh, you’ve discovered my weird habit of writing. I’m thinking about breaking it. I write from the view of a girl from fan…

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@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Jayson

This was awkward.

“Jayson, Rafael, which would you two prefer?” the older man turned to Raffe with a gentle smile. I glanced at my Commando In Arms (I’ll explain later, it has to do with cereal boxes).

“Well,” Raffe paused as if tasting his thoughts before serving them for general consumption. “I think you’r…[Read more]

@rae

I see… I would recommend thinking of a theme/topic to intertwine each story into and have the ending be a culmination of that theme/topic to communicate your message in the character’s actions and choices, and how they’re rewarded/punished. E.g. Star Wars (I block quoted it for spoilers, if you haven’t seen them yet and spoilers bother…[Read more]