AveryTheExplodey

@trailblazer

“I don’t want to lose you.” I was surprised to see tears welling in Etta’s eyes.

Aww, I love their friendship! This almost made me cry XD

I agree with Hybridlore, I don’t think the summary-type writing is a bad thing. It fits great with this story!

@esther-c @trailblazer

Yeah, it does end abruptly. I really don’t like this chapter, lol. I guess….more EDITING! SO MUCH FUN!!!! (not.)

@hybridlore

Maybe something like that? I mean, Lilitu already described what happened, sort of, and I feel like it gets a little graphic in the actual flashback part. But it’s really up to you, if you feel l…

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@rae @hybridlore @mineralizedwritings @esther-c

I’ve been working on this chapter this morning…and it feels a little clunky to me. Do you guys have any input that you think would make it run smoother?

Chapter 14

The air was pleasantly cold, nipping the tip of Sef’s nose as she walked in step with Lilitu. The sound of leaves crunching b…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Do you have any moodboards?

@janellebelovedpig

Never mind I just checked and I wrote 586 words…NOT a thousand… (same thing, right? XD)

@janellebelovedpig

That’s great that you finished it!

I wrote about a thousand words during mine.

@janellebelovedpig

Hey!

I’ll join, starting at :10, ending at :40 with you.

I have a hard time with getting distracted, but I’ll try my best to stay on task, lol!

@aranel

No problem, I love explaining my story to people! (And I have been wanting to read Dune for months now, is it any good?)

I can recommend the first book to anyone with the time, but it really depends on what you want after that. The first book is much more of a hero’s journey with clear good and evil, but after that, the books become…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I agree with Min and Jonas on everything they said. Resolve of the character will balance the unresolved political structure. However there’s still a lot of things you could do to end it differently. For one thing, most dystopias almost never talk about what happens after they take down the government. They need to reestablish…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

yeah, if you don’t get to it that’s totally fine!

@savannah_grace2009

If you check out the link I posted earlier, I’ve added some more chapters. Tell me what you think! (Sorry if I’m bugging you by asking you to read EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER, but you seem to have an eye for problems and plot holes, so I really appreciate your advice. Feel free to tell me when it gets old, lol.)

I might have a cha…[Read more]

Sorry, I’ve been offline for the past day or two.

@jonas

Both look cool, but I like the second better. The first one was your profile pic before right? Maybe it goes against the design, but some color might help? You could just tint the gray parts blue or some other color.

Yeah, it was my profile picture for a while, it’s one of my favorite…[Read more]

@rae

“All right, all right already. I’ve got a headache and I’m seeing kinda double and I feel weird in that I’m concerned on winning a war and you’re concerned about what I should be concerned about.”

“Well this is worrying.” …

Haha that’s funny

@rae

Thanks so much, girl! (Lately I’ve been second guessing myself, lol)

If you want to read the whole thing, here’s the link:

https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ

(Of course you don’t have to if you don’t want to, haha)

@grcr

This one is my favorite of the two you posted! I love it!

@esther-c

Okay, sounds cool!

Ok, Marcurious sounds like a really cool character. 😁

I love him <3 he’s one of my favorites

@mineralizedwritings

Okay, I’ll have to read them! I’ll add them to the list, haha.

@esther-c

No, go ahead! 🙂

@esther-c

What’s the plot of you WIP? I remember you talking a little about Ev and Ami, but I love them so much I want to know everything about them, lol. If you post the first book on KP (or anything else about your charries), can you tag me?