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@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

That is the way of writers🤣 Your characters feel real to you. Frank Herbert’s son felt like he had to compete with his father’s characters for love and attention, so it is a very real thing that influences our world. (Sorry if I just made that a little depressing at the end, his son happily continues his father’s legac…

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@janellebelovedpig

I miss her already

@rae

That’s dark. I can see Grathmere doing that.

Yeah, a little😅 Is Grathmere one of your characters or a weapon?

Right now, Liren. I can’t say if he’s the first or the last, but this is his current lot. I can’t say much else about who he was, but his now rugged clothing seems to have once been the uniform of a noble.

Now to the cool stuff!

Introducing, Kirrtes:

Kirrtes is a one of a kind blade. While the sword itself seems like a noble weapon, you can see the corrupted gem, alluding to its nature. Kirrtes has a consciousness, if you can call it that at least. It thinks and schemes towards an ultimate goal. It can control it’s wielder perfectly, muscle per…[Read more]

@jonas

Yeah, I just wanted to make sure I got the personality right above all. It did say that she floated around, so wheels wouldn’t be necessary, although it could be an additional function.

@rae

Sorry if this offends you

The deepest, darkest corners of my soul are rising, bubbling with rage likened to a volcano at the mere thought of being asked such a question!!!

… … … Lol no🤣🤣🤣🤣

I worry about offending people sometimes too, but if people can’t handle a simple question or criticism about something they created, then that’s…[Read more]

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009

What are y’all’s thoughts on my depiction of Thing?

@rae

Ok, first, before all the cool stuff, I’ll introduce the standard Shome’el sword and shield:

There isn’t much to say about the sword, but I like the design. As for the shield (front and side profile) It is designed with a curved body, that forms a kind of pseudo roof. This is because of the nature of Omialia being in a space of…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium @jonas

I that’s how I did it actually now checking the original document:

You’re telling me. I had more questions, but held my tongue because Thing’s current track record hasn’t been the most helpful for answering them, other than explaining my inability to eat.

Thanks Jonas for explaining what made sense in my head, but c…[Read more]

@jonas

A fair concern. Despite his reputation, Sanderson has left his readers on edge for extended periods of time with little word, take The Rithmatist for example. That being said, that was more of a side project that he’s simply been putting off, whereas Stormlight is one of his biggest series, and he’s far more invested. Knowing him, I would…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

It’s so hard to just pick one main character out of the set of five, though! I love all them equally!!! XD

That’s fair. I think you can make it work as well, it is harder for smaller stories though, but not impossible.

This is funny, to me it feels like they’re my best friends and if I choose one over the other they’ll get m…

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@jonas

Okay, that’s kind of what I was thinking. I don’t know if it needs to be clearer or not. I don’t know how many other people would notice, and I already had a guess as to why. So maybe rewording it slightly would clear things up.

Ok, fair enough, I’ll tweak it then.

If you’re attached to it, I don’t think it needs to change at any point. It…

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@jonas

You might not care, but I try to maintain a fairly equal ratio of male MCs to female MCs in a book. This shouldn’t be the deciding factor, but consider that adding Liv as a MC would give you a 2 to 4 ratio (double the amount of female characters to male), whereas you currently have as even a ratio as possible with 2 to 3.

Obviously, you m…

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@freedomwriter76

Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)

From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩

Well that scene was from an old story, which gave me the idea to write my current WIP based off of that. So it didn’t make it through editing, neither did most of that very sloppy 41K very rough “dr…[Read more]

@jonas

Ok, I actually didn’t know that it would be different characters, but it makes sense. Sanderson likes exploring the different eras.

@rae

Cool! That’s a really cool concept. Crystal swords as an idea has always felt a little fantasy cliché to me, but the mechanic you built into it is actually really intriguing! It’s kind of like a memory metal (is that what it’s based off of), but it disappears instead of getting distorted, so that’s a really powerful material. Just make sure…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Yeah, I agree with the majority of what Jonas already said. Although I think smaller stories can have many prospective, but it has to be done right. I could think of a few examples, though most are more contemporary, but I’m sure there’s many fantastical. I think a cast of 5 or 6 is a fair enough amount that won’t be…[Read more]

Yeah, it’s odd. She wanted me to help her prep for NaNoWriMo:(

@savannah_grace2009

I like this chapter! My favorite part was how happy the robot got when he named her “Thing”.  that was great!

Lol! Thanks! I’m glad it seems to be producing an enjoyable dynamic between the two😂

Great chapter! The bounce between present and past tense was very conf…

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@jonas

I would say it completely depends on relevance to the main plot. Is she going to have future interactions with the main cast? Will her actions have an impact on the overall story? If not, then I would say it would be best not to, but there is another option.

Yeah, she’s going to play a part in the story.

That makes sense, I’ll experiment I…[Read more]