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@rochellaine I’ve finished beta-reading and now I’m working on the comical poem prompt you gave me. 😉
@seekjustice I know, you just didn’t know I was here. 😉 Going pretty well!You can pronounce it however you want.
@dekreel That’s good news 😀
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@dekreel Cool! I can’t wait to read it!
I will have to wait until tomorrow, though, even if you get it done tonight. I’m leaving now. 🙁
Talk to you later.
@seekjustce Bye!
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@rochellaine Good night! Hope to see you tomorrow. Earlier in the night would be even better. XD
@seekjustice I’m enjoying your book so far! I just finished reading over Justice’s riot in front of the town hall. It really made my heart pound.You can pronounce it however you want.
Bye!
@dekreel Oooh, I’m glad you enjoyed it! That was a lot of fun to write that scene!INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@seekjustice I could really feel the emotion in it. You did well.
May I offer a suggestion? If so, should I do it here? In your doc? Somewhere else?
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@dekreel Apparently my reply didn’t post.
If it’s a longer suggestion, here would be fine! Otherwise, I don’t mind 😀
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@seekjustice (Sorry it took so long to respond!!) I think you should describe the setting more. I mean, I get the idea that the story is set in futuristic Australia, but I feel like the descriptions aren’t… authentic enough. I don’t know exactly what you’d need to do to improve on it, but basically just make the setting and world more palpable. What do the houses look like? What are they made of? Is the city blanketed in smog? What materials are buildings and other structures made of? What do the rich people wear? What do the poor people wear? Basically to tie it all together: How is your world different from this world? How do the people in your world, the parks, the houses, the politics, the streets in your world, differ from those in this world? I think if you somehow incorporate this into your writing, even though that’s kind of tricky for first person, I think your readers will find your story MUCH more credible, palpable, authentic and meaningful.
Does that make sense? 🙂
You can pronounce it however you want.
You’re not the first person to say that 😀 I definitely know that I have a problem with settings/worldbuilding (its like my writing kryptonite) and I’m planning on doing some serious work on that while my beta readers read it over and maybe give me some suggestions. That’s my plan for this August 🙂 Thank you for pointing it out again because that kind of solidifies that it isn’t just one person’s opinion, you know what I mean?
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@seekjustice It’s tricky! You’re welcome. Yeah, I know what you mean. I’m glad I could help at least a little. 😀
Hey, can you help me figure something out? I’m going to introduce a couple new characters into my Aetherlight roleplay (which is like the Aetherlight version of the KPA) who are sent to Aethasia by… I dunno… their parents? Officials? Guardians? Anyway, they’re sent to Aethasia to do something there. They are both around fifteen years old, and they have unique “magical” powers. Korey’s power is communicating with animals, and I haven’t figured out Leina’s power yet. So my questions are — #1: Why are they sent to Aethasia? #2: What is Leina’s power?
I have billions of other questions, too. That first question I think is the fundamental one, though. Any ideas? Thoughts? Questions?
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I’m not sure that I can really help on why they were sent there, it’s your story and I think you’ll have to work that out since I haven’t read it. As to magical powers though, there’s heaps of cool magic powers.
Like elemental powers, telekinesis, ice powers, healing powers, mind reading, weather control, teleportation, invisibility, magically being able to sing in key all the time, bring inanimate things to life….
Something like mind reading would work well with Korey’s power.
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@seekjustice Makes sense…
I think I’ll sign off now. Good to talk to you! Maybe I’ll see you tomorrow.
You can pronounce it however you want.
Good night 😀
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@dekreel you could say I live on a farm. We have 3 acres, mostly grass, and a ranch style house (so that fits. :P). Currently we have five chickens, two goats, two indoor dogs, one cat, and three little fish. I eventually want a horse. ^.^
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