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@writerlexi1216 Wow, that was a NaNo snippet??? Goodness, I can’t wait to read the rest then!!! š Aw, poor Caira! She needs to have, like, a class on the subject. “Modern Life 101,” if you will. š Oh my goodness, I alreadyĀ love Asperencia!!! (Seriously, you need to teach me how you name things–they’re all so good:D) The aesthetic sounds soĀ neat. (I was getting Horizon Zero Dawn vibes from the snippet too, so that’s exciting to hear:) )
Hehe, I’m…still figuring out Horace’s magic. Basically how it stands at the moment is that he’s a kind of magic lawyer? Like, he does a lot of contract-based stuff (which is more complicated than it sounds–it’s a very delicate and precise kind of magic, and a kind that only a few people know), but also has a natural talent for illusions and such. And thanks!! Give me a moment and I’ll try to dig up something to share…:P
āSeven seconds till the end. Time enough for you. Perhaps. But what will you do with it?ā
@writerlexi1216 Well, I found some more examples of Arvi-sass if you’re interested:
The first time I actually had something resembling a coherent thought was sitting on the floor of what I assumed was Horaceās apartment. If I had two weeks of freedom, why did I waste it doing seas know what in Rumir instead of getting out of the country? The thought was so depressing I almost stopped eating my bread. But I was hungry, so I didnāt.
Also, one of the first things he says to Tin:
āI meanāwell, no disrespect to you, your highness, but you kind of suck at lying.ā She opened her mouth indignantly, but I cut her off. āSeriously, Horace, are you not going to call her out on this? Clearly whoever this person is who she supposedly hasnāt seen in months,ā aka Horaceās ex, āfound her. Right?ā
And:
Ā Occasionally I can be pretty good at playing dumb. This was not one of those occasions.
And finally:
Tin and I were partners in the eyes of the law, but only the law. That knowledge felt like it was hanging over my head like a dam with cracks running all through it. There isnāt anything to be done about it, really, not when youāre a poor idiot like me who doesnāt know the first thing about dams, or rivers, or water in general, really. All you have is the horrible, crushing pressure of something about to break while you can do nothing but sit and watch.
Whew, that was a lot, sorry!! Thank you for reading it–I really appreciate it:)
āSeven seconds till the end. Time enough for you. Perhaps. But what will you do with it?ā
Aw, thank you!!:) I edited it slightly before posting, but yes, good ol’ NaNo. *gasps* YES, she honestly does, poor Caira. š It’s quite amusing to write about her predicaments with it. Thank you so very much!! Honestly… names just come to me at the weirdest times and I can only hope I have a notebook around to write it down in. But I don’t think you need me to teach you anything!! I love yours already!!:) Aw, thanks. (And really? That’s amazing!) š
*gasps* Oh my goodness, that is perfect!! Like, I can 100% envision Horace being a magic lawyer, that just fits his character so well. Oooh, how interesting!! *double gasps* *yes I gasp a lot pardon me* I have this weird obsession with illusion magic, so I LOVE THAT!! Gosh, that’s gonna be one amazing book to curl up with and read someday. š
*pterodactyl screech* (pardon me, I’ve always wanted to do that for no apparent reason) EEEEK, these were so good!!! Ugh, I justĀ loveĀ Arvi-sass and I started grinning a mile long at
all of themĀ the first one š I just love the second one because I can see the lovely dynamics between them all so well, and it made me laugh. The last one was BEAUTIFUL, because I love how, despite being a water mage, Arvi knows nothing about water XD (Gosh, Arvi is just the greatest character ever.) No no, that wasn’t a lot at all!!! Do you realize how much I love readingabout Arvi’s snarkinessĀthese snippets?:D Thank you for sharing them!!!!!!@lewilliams OH MAN WHY ARE U PPL SO GOOD!!! I mean itās wonderful but then I look at yāallās and then my own writing and Iām like
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#ProtectSebBut I guess Iāll share some snippets too!
this is from Corvinaās POV
Itās time to go.
I lift my brows, waiting only a second to make sure there are no more instructions. Hearing none, I turn on my heels and depart. It takes everything in me not to run, but I will not give Master the satisfaction of seeing me scurry away, tail tucked between my legs.
My hair stands on edge. Heās watching me, but I act as if I donāt have a care in the world. In fact, I turn my head and offer a smirk before continuing on my way.
Thatāll show him! Heāll see how strong I am, one day.
Now, if only I could convince the tears streaming down my face of how strong I am. Not to worry though, theyāll all know soon enough. Once my mission is complete, everyone will know my name. Even in my death I will be renowned!
After all, donāt I deserve it? Donāt I deserve to have my name burned into the earth? Itās the least Master could do. Yet, I know, in my heart, that even if that were to happen, heād make it miserable for me. Ah, yes, heād make sure that even in death I feel shame.
But would I care?
No!
Ha! Never!
Wellā¦. yes. Butā¦. dearā¦. what am I supposed to do about it?
I suppose, for now, I just have to stick with my given title.
Corvina, servant to Eder, The Serpent.
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#ProtectSebNovemberās POV
The way I see it, one shouldnāt be blamed for spilling the beans when one didnāt know they were spilling any beans. It seems obvious that, if someone didnāt know something was a secret, thereād be no point in them keeping it secret, right? Right.
Now if I could just convince my dad of thatā¦
I clear my throat and rub the back of my neck, wishing the heat rising to my face would cool. Averting my eyes, I pretend to focus my attention on something-anything!- other then my fatherās expression. His face is still, like a stone, but his twitching frown and glaring eyes tell me heās anything but calm. He fiddles with his jacket, which makes me wince.
Too upset for words. Thatās never a good sign.
I pinch my lips shut and clench my fists, preparing for the worse. A pit forms in my stomach; shame with a twinge of fear. Instead of yelling, Dad merely stares, his eyes scanning me. I shift slightly and immediately scold myself for it. I lower my head as he turns around, his footsteps tapping against the hardwood floor.
Tap. Tap. Tap.
Heās pacing now, arms firmly positioned behind him, his eyes still filled with fury. Heās upset, more upset then Iāve ever seen him. Okay, well, that may not be true. This definitely isnāt the first time Iāve displeased him and iām positive it wonāt be the last.
His silence, followed by the endless sound of his footsteps is enough to make me want to bolt for the front door. Iād rather get slapped then have to endure this. At leas then Iād be done with it.
But that wasnāt gonna happen. I suppose I should consider myself lucky that my father isnāt a very physical man, but sometimes Iād rather he was. Instead, he prefers to let me stew and feel the crushing weight of his disappointment.
I open my mouth and immediately snap it shut as our eyes meet.
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#ProtectSebWow those snippets are more like monologues XD
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#ProtectSebCan you give me your current synopsis and a couple of quotes from your book you love?Ā Iāll mess around with the blurb if you want and you can choose which one you like.
Sure! I can’t right now, but I will as soon as possible. š
Maybe thereās a sentence that kinda summarizes the main part of the story you could start the blurb with that you like better than your first sentence? Like, is there one from where your nine chosen characters discover that they are called or learn of their mission, or a sentence that hints at your villainās goal or his degree of evilness?
Ooh, EXCELLENT idea!! *hunts around in manuscript* I’ll get back to you on that. š
"Courage is found in unlikely places." -Gildor Inglorion
Ooo… That’s awesome!!! Makes me want to read more. š I love how you bring it to where it seems like the story is over and then there’s a plot twist. And I know this might be confidential material, but I have to ask: is there a traitor? It sounds like there might be… I love traitors!!! I have two in my main WIP, and they’re some of my favorites.
(Sorry for the late response! Life got busy… *facepalm*)
Sounds great! That might be the type I do myself… When I get around to trying to writing my blurb that is. š
Okay, here are a few quotes:
“You abuse your power, you lose your power.”
“Your silence speaks more than your words do. It doesnāt matter.” Ricco waved a hand dismissively. “My spies know everything.ā
“Powers have their limits too.”
Yeah, none of those are really good, but that was the best I could find from the first half. š
"Courage is found in unlikely places." -Gildor Inglorion
Whoops, wrong person. The quotes were for @nova21, and so is this:
Current synopsis:
Lord Delernious has escaped, but the Keepers are hot on his trail. Little do they know that he has laid traps along the way. When it turns out that Lytt is being hunted by someone who was supposed to be a friend, things get even more complicated. Tension also rises when brothers Jistis and Jenis run into one of their sisters. She asks them to quit their quest so that they can be together. This decision threatens more than family ties, for she disappears mysteriously and Jenis is determined to quit the quest to find her.
Also, this is a collage I made for it: Ā
Aaaanndd another “good” quote I found: ‘There was no warning. No Lytt swooping out of the sky raising an alarm, no Valent thundering into the clearing, no Jenis whooping with his brother. There was just the silence and then the storm.’
I still don’t have what youĀ actually asked for, haha. Still working on that!
"Courage is found in unlikely places." -Gildor Inglorion
Awesome!Ā I’ll get started on possible blurb ideas in a second…Ā rn I have a couple of questions:
1)Ā is Lytt the sister of Jenis and Jistis?
2)Ā who are the keepers?Ā Are Lytt, Jenis, and Jistis part of the keepers?
3)Ā who is the sister of Jenis?Ā where and why do they meet each other?
4)Ā who is Lord Delernious and why are the keepers chasing him?
Sorry for the questions i might have some more later on i just want to clear it up so i can try to get a feel for the story and write a good blurb.Ā the quotes are AWESOME btw, great job!!!
what we do in life echoes in eternity
-gladiator, 2000*facepalm* I keep forgetting that people don’t know what my story is about. XD
1)Ā is Lytt the sister of Jenis and Jistis?
No. She’s another character in the team Jistis and Jenis are on.
2)Ā who are the keepers?Ā Are Lytt, Jenis, and Jistis part of the keepers?
Oof, big part I missed there. The Keepers (short for Keepers of the Nine) are the nine power-bearers who have been charged with freeing their world from the control of Lord Delernious and his master, Malvat.
3)Ā who is the sister of Jenis?Ā where and why do they meet each other?
Her name is Miara, daughter of Jecel. She’s married to a guy named Ustav and has two kids, Hena and Benar. They meet in this little town called Tentacion b/c Jistis and Jenis chase Lord Delernious there. Miara moved there after she married Ustav (the kids had to be split up when they were young).
4)Ā who is Lord Delernious and why are the keepers chasing him?
Lord Delernious (aka Ricco) is the second-in-command of Malvat, who took over most of the Regions of Mankind (a section of my world) a few years before the story takes place. Malvat put him in charge of the Regions of Mankind while he went off and did whatever he was gonna do (hehe, only I get to know what that is :P). He got away when the Keepers sacked his original home, and now they’re chasing him down. Or trying to.
Ask all the questions you want!
"Courage is found in unlikely places." -Gildor Inglorion
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