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@devastate-lasting lol thanks!
@nova21 Hahahahaha cinnamon rolls! That’s great! XDI'm 'a homeschooler' because cookie-making writing artistic animal-whisperer isn't a job title
@nova21 AHHH I LOVE THIS!!
Okay, since my book actually starts off with a prologue from the antagonist’s POV, I’m gonna put her first three lines and my MC’s (That takes place in Chapter 1 at a totally different place and time)
Corvina-
“Master? (Omit) Master?”
“Yes Master.”
“Ah!”
(Yea….lol. There’s a lot more inner dialogue then actual dialogue here lol!”
Arabella-
“I…I didn’t…. (Omit) Thank you, Claire.”
“Ah, Claire, I was actually headed to-”
“The….party? What party?”
……XD There ish mine!
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebSo fun! These are from the messy first draft of the story I’m writing with my siblings
“Geez, Ted, I thought you were a superhero.”
“We climb onto the roof and break into the skylight. You unplug the freezers and smash all the ice cream cones, and I’ll find the secret recipes and vault. Got it?”
“Did you bring the grappling hook and hammer?”
Ah, it makes me want to get back to writing it. XD
@nova21 I like this idea.
My MC ain’t the most exiting character, but here are her first out of context lines.
“Isn’t there a meet today?”
*action of eye rolling* “you’re a terrible liar.”
“No, please. You know I don’t like those.”
Lol it sounds so strange out of context considering her character in the book.
Omgoodness that was fun to read through all y’alls fun quotes. They were pretty good lol.
Thank ya kindly! <3 Ooo, cool! I’d say Corvina might be a conflicted character, and Arabella might be a really sweet, friendly personality. Am I right? XD
Girl, I’d totally read this! Totally keep writing… GO GO GO! 😉
Thanks! I know, it’s kinda weird to see the dialogue out of context. But that’s what interesting to see if the character’s dialogue matches their personality!
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Ooh, mind if I join in? I find Temira’s first three lines HILARIOUS. Here they are (feel free to laugh):
“Stay back, Reuben!” (talking to her son XD)
“I told you no!” (still talking to her son XDD)
“I’m sorry, but it will burn you.” (STILL talking to her son XDDD)
The beginning scene of The Apostle’s Sister somehow seems a bit off to me yet. I do think, though, that Temira’s first three lines do reflect part of her personality. Idk how to explain it (which probably means I’m wrong lol), but perhaps these three lines are foreshadowing of how hard Temira tries to protect her loved ones and how, in the process, she actually ends up hurting them (like in Paul’s case) or making them resent her (like with another character I’m not giving spoilers for XD). Or maybe I’m just reading too much into it. 😂
@joy-caroline
ok, my summary of what you described:
Temira’s trust is hard to win so when she loves someone she’s fiercely protective. In this case, I’d assume she overprotects Reuben and doesn’t allow him to do things that could get him even a little bit hurt because of being hurt herself. Because of her loyalty, she is so careful to keep him safe that she hinders him from being able to learn things for himself and doesn’t want anyone to hurt him and probably frustrates the living daylights outta him and others at times. Pretty much a ‘helicopter parent’.
sorry if that’s totally inaccurate XD
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Oooo this is SUCH a fun idea!!!! I LOVE IT!!!! And I LOVE Dylan’s dialogue. The first one was just kinda funny without the story’s context. XD It was awesome!!!!!
So my MC is a sixteen-year-old girl named Layla. I just started this new story, so I don’t know a lot about her yet, but from what I can tell she’s stubborn, competitive, and seems to somehow always find her way into trouble. XD
(1) “Don’t you think I know that!”
(2) “No!” (don’t ask. XD)
(3) “What do I have to do?”
(Also, @gracie-j Keaton’s lines were gold. XD From the little I know about him, those lines just sound like something he’d say!!!!)
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TeenWritersNook.comOhmygoodness @anatra23 your character’s three lines were AMAZING!!!!!! (And waaaaay more interesting than mine XD) I’m actually really interesting in your story and MC now!! 🙂
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TeenWritersNook.comhaha I love yours! Totally fits her character!
I like how you say that you don’t know much about the MC; that’s what I do as well; they develop as they go along and I usually figure them out as the reader does. XD
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Here’s mine for Ly and Jackson in THTDE.
Ly:
“Stairs, oh stairs, where are you?”
“Are you going to help me, or not, Joshua?”
“You can think?”
Annnnd Jackson
“It’s Jackson.”
“And I’m trying to help, I’m thinking.”
“Just be quiet for a few minutes, Ly.”
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Haha, you’re not too far off.
Temira’s trust is hard to win so when she loves someone she’s fiercely protective.
SO ACCURATE.
In this case, I’d assume she overprotects Reuben and doesn’t allow him to do things that could get him even a little bit hurt because of being hurt herself. Because of her loyalty, she is so careful to keep him safe that she hinders him from being able to learn things for himself and doesn’t want anyone to hurt him and probably frustrates the living daylights outta him and others at times.
Nah, you are SO RIGHT! Temira is a bit of a helicopter parent lol. Usually it’s Paul who tries to tell her to loosen her grip (he’s more of an authoritarian-type parent, although he def has his overprotective moments too lol). But what you said doesn’t just apply to Reuben – Temira is like that with others too, particularly her brother. XD I love your analysis.
@joy-Caroline
haha thanks! The characters sound really cool! Good job developing them!! 😊
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Thanks a bunch!
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@elfwing Yep! (That actually sounds like Rina, Julius, and Keaton right there…)
@devastate-lasting Thank you!!
@nova21 You’re so welcome! Aaah, so do I! THEY ARE!!!
@issawriter7 Thank you!!! I’m glad you think so! 🙂
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