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  • #102630
    ella
    @nova21
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      The title says it all, folks.  I just thought it might be fun to compare what your character says to see if the dialogue truly matches their personality or not.

      So I’ll share mine first!

      MC is Dylan, who is stubborn, quiet, and strong-willed.  A little self-protective.  Lmk if his dialogue fits his personality.

      1)  “Better.”  (*rolls eyes*  It makes sense in the story, guys!)

      2)  “It won’t happen again.”

      3)  “What are you doing here?”

      Not super interesting, but the story is, lol!  So ya, that’s it y’all!  Excited to see what y’all come up with!!! <33

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      #102631
      Alexa Autorski
      @writerlexi1216
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        @nova21

        Ooh, interesting! I think that dialogue fits super well for Dylan, especially since the lines are short. That goes well with his strong-willed personality, in my opinion! As for mine… they’re kinda short, so… XD

        MC is Felicity, who is (also) strong-willed, stubborn, and tough, though she’s secretly quite caring.

        1) “Huh.” (I know, it’s boring *shrugs*)

        2) “Hey! That’s mine!”

        3) “This ends here.”

        Probably doesn’t make a lot of sense, but *shrugs* oh well. Can’t wait to see everybody else’s! <3

        #102632
        Linyang Zhang
        @devastate-lasting
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          @nova21 Oo, fun! Hard time to find which MC though, haha…

          This is for Nan Jinqi, who’s, um, what is he like… He’s quiet and dependable, I think. Quite observant. Hard-working. I don’t know that much about him yet.

          1) “Run!”

          2) “It was your stupid machine that crashed and burned, [action tag omitted], And who said I was here to stop you?”

          3) “As long as these people can escape safely…my mission will be accomplished.”

          Lately, it's been on my brain
          Would you mind letting me know
          If hours don't turn into days

          #102638
          Daisy Torres
          @daisy-torres
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            @nova21 Oo cool idea!! Yours are funny XD

            My character is kinda bubbly and sarcastic/teasing, so Ladies, here’s Catherine XD:

            “It’s the perfect gift for your girlfriend, don’t ya think?”

            “How many children will I be the aunt of? Six? Seven?”

            “Oh! What if you have all girls! Your home will be amazing. Make sure you invite me over a lot.”

             

            "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

            #102639
            Elizabeth
            @lewilliams
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              @nova21 Ooh I love this! (And your lines of dialogue!)

              Here’s mine for Horace, one of my MCs who is a magic-lawyer on good days and a control freak on bad ones. 😛

              1) “Enjoying the view?”

              2) “I’m sure.” [action tag] “Something on your mind?”

              3) “My apologies then,” [action tag] “You just seem rather—“

              Yeah. Dealing with his moody teenaged companion means he gets interrupted a lot. XD

              “Seven seconds till the end. Time enough for you. Perhaps. But what will you do with it?”

              #102640
              Elfwing
              @elfwing
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                @nova21

                haha!! Great idea!! And I’d say your MCs dialogue fits.

                My sci fi book MC is shy in big groups but stubborn and has her opinions and likes to bug her brother

                her first three lines in the story:

                (Omits action) Alden, stop it! I got in here five minutes ago!” (Can you guess where she is? Lol)

                (Omits action) “Good morning. I didn’t burn the house down so that’s encouraging.”

                (Omits action) “Can I go with you to town today?”

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                #102642
                Elfwing
                @elfwing
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                  @will_starke

                  sorry, your tag didn’t go through the first time

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                  #102649
                  ella
                  @nova21
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                    @writerlexi1216

                    Hahaha!  I already love Felicity!  😉


                    @devastate-lasting

                    He totally sounds like you described him.  If I had to go on an adventure now, I’d want him to be the leader! 😉


                    @daisy-torres

                    Can I hang out with Catherine for a day, please?  Just a day? XD


                    @lewilliams

                    Hahaha!  Poor Horace.  *cough* dumb teenagers *cough* 🙂


                    @elfwing

                    Cool!  Haha, she’s so funny!  She sounds like my kinda BFF 😉

                     

                    what we do in life echoes in eternity
                    -gladiator, 2000

                    #102650
                    Anonymous
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                      @nova21 This idea is FABULOUS! I think your dialogue fits him perfectly!!!

                      Anyway, y’all let me know what y’all think of Keaton. He’s quiet, intelligent, no-nonsense, pretty gruff sometimes…but I never feel like his dialogue comes off right.

                      “Come quick!”

                      “He did well.”

                      “He’s executed.”

                      M’kay…with these lines, he really does seem quiet. XD

                      #102651
                      Elfwing
                      @elfwing
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                        @nova21

                        haha, thanks! I guess she’s based on yours truly *bows, then hesitates, evaluates character, and wonders if I actually paid myself a compliment or not… *

                        @gracie-j

                        First of all… I LOVE the name Keaton! second, his dialogue seems to fit. I suppose just keep his lines short, don’t have him using too many please n’ thank you’s and keep him to the point XD

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                        #102652
                        Anonymous
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                          @elfwing Thank you!!! So do I! Yay! I’m glad you think so! Yep, that’s what I’m trying to do, but sometimes my rambling side comes out through him. XD

                          #102653
                          Elfwing
                          @elfwing
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                            @gracie-j

                            you’re welcome!! 🙂

                            I totally understand what you mean; I do that so often, which is why it’s lovely to have several very different people in my book so one can ramble, one play devil’s advocate, and the other one, who’s the quiet rough one, can end any stupidity happening in the disagreement. XD

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                            #102655
                            Keilah H.
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                              The first three things Torrent Starcatcher says….She’s been secluded and indifferent ever since her parents were taken, and she is becoming increasingly annoyed with her caretaker, Marek Diamond.

                              “What’s up?”

                              (after Diamond explains that there’s something weird in the cavern, and that’s what’s up) “What’s going on with the cavern?”

                              (after he says he has to find out what’s in there) “It’s forbidden.”

                              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                              #102657
                              Linyang Zhang
                              @devastate-lasting
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                                @nova21 XD Plenty of adventures to choose from!

                                I love your lines as well! Dylan sounds like he’d be quite hard to work with.


                                @writerlexi1216
                                Felicity sounds like what you described her as. Nice job!


                                @daisy-torres
                                I’d want to be Catherine’s friend!


                                @lewilliams
                                I want to meet Horace, like, right now. He sounds so proper.


                                @elfwing
                                She sounds like a real sibling, all right.

                                @gracie-j Oo, nicely done!


                                @keilah-h
                                This sounds like it’s setting up a very interesting story!

                                Lately, it's been on my brain
                                Would you mind letting me know
                                If hours don't turn into days

                                #102658
                                ella
                                @nova21
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                                  @gracie-j

                                  Hey Gracie!  Aw, thanks girl!  I love quiet, gruff guys… they’re so soft on the inside, like cinnamon rolls… XD


                                  @keilah-h

                                  Nice!  She seems pretty curious, and now I’m curious about your story! 😃

                                  what we do in life echoes in eternity
                                  -gladiator, 2000

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