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September 20, 2017 at 9:17 pm #44225Anonymous
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@daeus It is a little lengthy, but I doubt that that is a big deal. I think that it is a great title. It draws my attention.
September 21, 2017 at 9:44 am #44239@Daeus, I like it, and I don’t think length is a problem. The kind of people who want historical stuff and time travel and philosophy — in other words, a story you have to chew on — aren’t the kind who’ll mind a long title. Long titles are old-fashioned, but since historical fiction is going to deal with old stuff by its nature, it fits. Trying to make antiquated things look modern and shiny and up-to-date and fashionable is the wrong way to go about it.
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September 21, 2017 at 10:24 am #44240Anonymous- Rank: Wise Jester
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@Daeus – I like the Time Traveler who wasn’t ready – I’d go with it…
*throw’s sparkles* because that’s what I do.
September 21, 2017 at 1:55 pm #44273@Daeus YESS I likey.
*promptly dissolves in a puddle of feelz as she remembers that sorta last line**is probably geeking out about something*
September 22, 2017 at 1:15 pm #44359@Daeus I like it a lot, except that it sort of seems to give too much away. I mean, it’s not really giving anything away, nothing important. But it sounds like it; sounds too info-packed. Or something like that. I don’t dislike it though if that’s the only option.
I REALLY LIKE the gears of the world turn faster thing or something along those lines that could be turned into an applicable title though.September 22, 2017 at 1:24 pm #44364@emma-flournoy I’m not entirely sure what your saying. Are you saying if you have never read the book, reading that title wouldn’t particularly interest you?
Also, are you thinking that “the gears of the world turn faster” would make a good title as it is?
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September 22, 2017 at 1:34 pm #44369@Daeus Well…sort of. It probably would interest me still, but I dunno…it sounds too obvious or something. It doesn’t quite click as natural. I’m not sure, which I know is really helpful but there it is.
Well, I thought that and I do think it, except that then I couldn’t think of any way it tied directly into the story or theme. It does, but not close enough to any direct strain. I really really love the sentence, I just can’t reconcile whether or not it’s related well enough to the story itself to be a good title. If you think it is though, you would know. 😛
September 22, 2017 at 2:44 pm #44385@emma-flournoy What about this alteration?
“Journey of an incompetent time traveler”
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September 22, 2017 at 6:34 pm #44409@daeus I think ‘Unprepared’ would sound better than ‘The Unprepared Time Traveler’. Maybe…
Or…
Unprepared Gears
If You Have Time
Gears of Time
Incompetent Keeper of Time
Incompetent Keeper of Gears
Father Time
Brother of Time
No Time at All
All the Time in The World
None of the Time
No Time in the World [Meh]
Jumping GearsI’ll let you consider those before I post more… 😅
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September 22, 2017 at 7:58 pm #44432@Daeus Nah, I like the other one better than that. The Time Traveler Who Wasn’t Ready.
I like Time Turns Again too.September 22, 2017 at 8:07 pm #44436@emma-flournoy Okay.
Did anybody else feel “The Time Traveler who wasn’t ready” was off at all? @kate-flournoy @emily @josiahdeboer @catwing @northerner
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September 22, 2017 at 8:09 pm #44437@Daeus I had a moment’s pause, as I noted, because I thought it was a little long, but after that split second I had no problem with it.
September 22, 2017 at 8:22 pm #44444@daeus ‘The Time Travel Who Wasn’t Ready’… It does sound good.
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September 22, 2017 at 8:26 pm #44448Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@daeus Like @kate-flournoy, it didn’t seem quite right at first, but I think it is fine. I think that the rhythm and length are fine.
September 23, 2017 at 6:35 pm #44809Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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I really should keep up with these notifs…
@daeus I’m terrible at titles, but I like “Time turns again”. “The Time Traveler who wasn’t ready” could work. It could be shortened too, if you wanted, to something like: “The unprepared time traveler” (no idea if someone else suggested that, I didn’t read all the comments). I kinda feel like “The Time Traveler who wasn’t ready” doesn’t hold the spirit of the book so much. -
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