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  • #44225
    Anonymous
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      @daeus It is a little lengthy, but I doubt that that is a big deal. I think that it is a great title. It draws my attention.

      #44239
      Northerner
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        @Daeus, I like it, and I don’t think length is a problem. The kind of people who want historical stuff and time travel and philosophy — in other words, a story you have to chew on — aren’t the kind who’ll mind a long title. Long titles are old-fashioned, but since historical fiction is going to deal with old stuff by its nature, it fits. Trying to make antiquated things look modern and shiny and up-to-date and fashionable is the wrong way to go about it.

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        #44240
        Anonymous
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          @Daeus – I like the Time Traveler who wasn’t ready – I’d go with it…

          *throw’s sparkles* because that’s what I do.

          #44273
          Gracie
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            @Daeus YESS I likey.
            *promptly dissolves in a puddle of feelz as she remembers that sorta last line*

            *is probably geeking out about something*

            #44359
            Emma Flournoy
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              @Daeus I like it a lot, except that it sort of seems to give too much away. I mean, it’s not really giving anything away, nothing important. But it sounds like it; sounds too info-packed. Or something like that. I don’t dislike it though if that’s the only option.
              I REALLY LIKE the gears of the world turn faster thing or something along those lines that could be turned into an applicable title though.

              #44364
              Daeus
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                @emma-flournoy I’m not entirely sure what your saying. Are you saying if you have never read the book, reading that title wouldn’t particularly interest you?

                Also, are you thinking that “the gears of the world turn faster” would make a good title as it is?

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                #44369
                Emma Flournoy
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                  @Daeus Well…sort of. It probably would interest me still, but I dunno…it sounds too obvious or something. It doesn’t quite click as natural. I’m not sure, which I know is really helpful but there it is.

                  Well, I thought that and I do think it, except that then I couldn’t think of any way it tied directly into the story or theme. It does, but not close enough to any direct strain. I really really love the sentence, I just can’t reconcile whether or not it’s related well enough to the story itself to be a good title. If you think it is though, you would know. 😛

                  #44385
                  Daeus
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                    @emma-flournoy What about this alteration?

                    “Journey of an incompetent time traveler”

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                    #44409
                    Catwing
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                      @daeus I think ‘Unprepared’ would sound better than ‘The Unprepared Time Traveler’. Maybe…
                      Or…
                      Unprepared Gears
                      If You Have Time
                      Gears of Time
                      Incompetent Keeper of Time
                      Incompetent Keeper of Gears
                      Father Time
                      Brother of Time
                      No Time at All
                      All the Time in The World
                      None of the Time
                      No Time in the World [Meh]
                      Jumping Gears

                      I’ll let you consider those before I post more… 😅

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                      #44432
                      Emma Flournoy
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                        @Daeus Nah, I like the other one better than that. The Time Traveler Who Wasn’t Ready.
                        I like Time Turns Again too.

                        #44436
                        Daeus
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                          @emma-flournoy Okay.

                          Did anybody else feel “The Time Traveler who wasn’t ready” was off at all? @kate-flournoy @emily @josiahdeboer @catwing @northerner

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                          #44437
                          Kate Flournoy
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                            @Daeus I had a moment’s pause, as I noted, because I thought it was a little long, but after that split second I had no problem with it.

                            Catwing
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                              @daeus ‘The Time Travel Who Wasn’t Ready’… It does sound good.

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                              #44448
                              Anonymous
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                                @daeus Like @kate-flournoy, it didn’t seem quite right at first, but I think it is fine. I think that the rhythm and length are fine.

                                #44809
                                Anonymous
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                                  I really should keep up with these notifs…

                                  @daeus
                                  I’m terrible at titles, but I like “Time turns again”. “The Time Traveler who wasn’t ready” could work. It could be shortened too, if you wanted, to something like: “The unprepared time traveler” (no idea if someone else suggested that, I didn’t read all the comments). I kinda feel like “The Time Traveler who wasn’t ready” doesn’t hold the spirit of the book so much.

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