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    Keilah H.
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      @stephie whoa where’d you learn that French expression?

       

      just wanna know cause I think that’s really cool.

      Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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      Stephie
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        @keilah-h

        I go to a French school and during COVID, they got really annoyed with us using LOL in the chat. So they taught us to say MDR instead: mort de rire, which means dead from laughing. So I’m used to saying that instead.


        @theducktator

        The whole duck imitation thing is hilarious!

        "Courage, dear heart." -Aslan

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        Stephie
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          @linus-smallprint

          love love love it when characters come together of their own accord! It just makes it so much easier to write about their relationship. I mean, it’s not completely necessary to the story, but it can offer a really great subplot to root for.

          "Courage, dear heart." -Aslan

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          Linus Smallprint
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            @theducktator

            Oh yeah! Tyn does not like doing dishes, so Alan could be her hero, cleaning up after she finishes cooking something.

            #185720
            Linus Smallprint
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              What’s it with all these readers being eldest siblings? I should go check again with my siblings to see what they think of Martha. (My brother will probably try to tell me his suffering as the youngest is much worse, but whatever. I could maybe show some of his frustrations in Eric, even if Eric is not the youngest.)

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              Ellette Giselle
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                @linus-smallprint

                I get the feeling that a lot of eldests are writers. In fact, I’ve only met one girl who was a writer and wasn’t an oldest sibling.

                Riker dropped his voice to a soft whisper. “…I’m home.”

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                Keilah H.
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                  @stephie oh my goodness that’s hilarious.

                  I like picking up random French phrases because I have a character who’s from that country, so……

                  Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                  #185759
                  Linus Smallprint
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                    @ellette-giselle

                    Well, there is the older of my two sisters, who was into writing long before me. So that makes two.

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                    Ellette Giselle
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                      @linus-smallprint

                      *shrug*

                      It was just a theory. Like Evaluation. Unproven.

                      Riker dropped his voice to a soft whisper. “…I’m home.”

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                      The Ducktator
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                        @ellette-giselle

                        I’ve read that most lawyers are older siblings, which makes total sense to me.

                        Communist jokes aren’t funny unless everyone gets them.

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                        Ellette Giselle
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                          @theducktator

                           

                          That does make sense!!

                          Riker dropped his voice to a soft whisper. “…I’m home.”

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                          Linus Smallprint
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                            @ellette-giselle @theducktator @keilah-h @stephie @theshadow @loopylin

                            The long-awaited Chapter the 18th is here. Give me a couple more weeks, and you will get to read Chapter the 19th!

                            By the way, does anyone have any advice on writing things happening during a conversation? I need more things than ‘character1 looked at/glanced at/stared at/turned to/anything else involving looking at character2′.

                            Chapter the 18th – The Rebel

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                            Keilah H.
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                              @linus-smallprint ooh interesting! Alan is joining Stripe’s cause?

                              One question: What’s up with the names Cyrus, Anamynth, Iskyagus and Opitarus? Are these lyens? Kinda odd, because all the lyen names up to this point have been cat-related, and I can’t see any connections with these names.

                               

                              also I have literally no idea how to go about a conversation in real life lol, what makes you think I’ll be able to do it in stories haha

                              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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                              Ellette Giselle
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                                @linus-smallprint

                                Hmm, I like it!

                                Let’s see. How about nothing to do with the characters. Mention what’s going on around them. Someone shouted something, pans clattered, wind picked up, a bird chirped, children giggled. Etc. That might help.

                                Riker dropped his voice to a soft whisper. “…I’m home.”

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                                Keilah H.
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                                  yeah @ellette-giselle has good points

                                  Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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