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June 16, 2017 at 1:35 pm #35169
@emma-flournoy Ah yes. I had to make Stanton an evil overlord somehow. 😀
@daeus *races ice cream cone to cliche* Hurrah! (I hope you don’t mind being captured. 😀 )
@delightinlife Don’t worry! There are some coconut milk ice creams in my house too. 😀
@mariposa Do dragons count as dinosaurs?☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
June 16, 2017 at 1:36 pm #35170June 16, 2017 at 1:41 pm #35171@dragon-snapper I might have been called King Daeus once, but I can’t remember clearly. I know we called Josiah The Wiser a couple times. 😉
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June 16, 2017 at 1:52 pm #35174@Dragon-Snapper Hmm…Dragons kind of count as dinosaurs. I guess I’ll just have to settle for dragons for now. 😉
June 16, 2017 at 3:21 pm #35177Oh and yes @Dragon-Snapper, the Monte Cristo thing was so great.
June 16, 2017 at 4:57 pm #35184This is just too funny. All the cliches and the soy ice cream and dragons and raspberries… XD If anyone asks what Kingdom Pen is, we should just send them to this story.
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June 16, 2017 at 5:50 pm #35187Kate glanced at her. “But I’m the one who brought them in.”
Another knight, Elizabeth, pulled out her wallet. “I actually have a dragon riding license.”The funny thing about this bit is that I don’t even have my regular driver’s license.
WOW @dragon-snapper you’ve done it again. This is amazing.
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June 16, 2017 at 5:54 pm #35188@Dragon-Snapper 😂😂😂😂😂
Oh, zikers, I LOVE IT!!!! Very rarely do I enjoy the sequels to stories, movies and er, anything, but I think I like this one even more than the first! Waaaayyy too many best lines to recount but the “you sicken me!” when Daeus saw the coffee is going down in my family’s Book of Quotes. 😆 (And I don’t get y’all’s hate of coffee. Mmmmm…☕️☕️☕️ 😉).*hides pint of dairy-free dark chocolate ice cream behind her back* *chuckles nervously* oh, look at the time…😅
*is probably geeking out about something*
June 16, 2017 at 5:57 pm #35189COFFEE @graciegirl
Hey do you happen to have my Prison google doc open?
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June 16, 2017 at 6:00 pm #35190@That_Writer_Girl_99 ☕️😋 I can only have it every once in a while though. 😩 #foodsensitivites Same reason I can’t have ice cream with dairy. 😭
Er, no. I’m afraid not.
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June 16, 2017 at 6:01 pm #35191Okay @graciegirl
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June 16, 2017 at 6:07 pm #35192Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@dragon-snapper I love it as always!❤❤❤❤❤❤❤
June 16, 2017 at 6:22 pm #35193@dragon-snapper OMW I LOVE IT. XD With all the cliches and the thing with the ice cream… so awesome, so awesome <3
June 16, 2017 at 6:38 pm #35194After being on KP for a little longer…I can honestly say that you did a great job with the characterization in both stories @dragon-snapper
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June 16, 2017 at 10:21 pm #35229@dragon-snapper Yay, yay, yay, yay!!! 😀 I loved it! So many funny lines that made me chuckle. 😉 “For once he’d like to see a villain do a big nod.” XDXDXD I love it, love it, love it! But now to the all-important question:
Will there be more??? 😀 😀
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