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July 17, 2024 at 1:35 pm #183039
also your signature, ha!!
Gerald handled that. You don’t question Gerald. (if you know you know)
July 17, 2024 at 1:35 pm #183040Oh. Don’t forget Hanna and Neveah and Nico and Indie and Azazel.
Their hearts. Shattered.
#MakeNahimTakeABreak
(the real ones will know)July 17, 2024 at 1:36 pm #183041I’m not going to break Cass.
Aw man. But he’s my favorite!
Ok fine.
And Eloy
Ooo, this is looking a bit better.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
July 17, 2024 at 1:36 pm #183042July 17, 2024 at 1:36 pm #183043July 17, 2024 at 1:36 pm #183044He won’t be your favorite when you meet Marcurious….and Marucurious is BEYOND broken
#MakeNahimTakeABreak
(the real ones will know)July 17, 2024 at 1:38 pm #183045@highscribeofaetherium I can, I’m on a computer right now.
Gerald handled that. You don’t question Gerald. (if you know you know)
July 17, 2024 at 1:40 pm #183046You guys are legit going to hate me XD XD
(And Cass)BUT! at least I’m not like Ellette who’s like ” IT NEEDS TO BE BRUTAL! BREAK HIMMMM!”
#MakeNahimTakeABreak
(the real ones will know)July 17, 2024 at 1:46 pm #183047July 17, 2024 at 1:46 pm #183048Hahahahahahaha
Ummmmmm
you’ll see
you’ll hate him trust me
#MakeNahimTakeABreak
(the real ones will know)July 17, 2024 at 1:58 pm #183050July 17, 2024 at 2:04 pm #183053Hmm, I have chosen Cassian and my loyalties are VERY hard to brake. (German blood.lol) However, this does sound interesting.
Marcurious, nice name. Broken character? He had better be strong though. Not soppy and whiny and sad for himself. No milksops for me.
Do bad things to him. Please! Thank you.
BUT! at least I’m not like Ellette who’s like ” IT NEEDS TO BE BRUTAL! BREAK HIMMMM!”
OK, explanation! I LOVE it when bad things happen to the character, because when the rubber meets the road and the mettle meets the fire, you see what the true character is like and that is when they have the chance to become strong and Victorious even in death, (though the power of Christ) or brake into fragments and succumb to the dark. It’s the ones who stay strong that I love!-
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And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
July 17, 2024 at 2:09 pm #183057Haha! I tricked it. for now. It’s still mad at me though. Somehow I need to figure out what is going on and how to fix it.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
July 17, 2024 at 8:03 pm #183073I’VE BEEN STALKING THIS TOPIC. WHAT ARE YOU PLANNING??? I’M SCARED.
?For our Blessed Lady's sake, bring us in good ale!?
July 17, 2024 at 11:31 pm #183076Okay okay okay first of all…
I’m having a @theducktator moment of correcting people’s grammar so don’t take this personally XD XD
But it’s spelled “break” not “brake”. “Brake” is like brakes on a car, “break” is when something actually breaks.
I like it when boys cry in books
that’s just my thing XD XD
Well in that case you’re gonna hate what I do to Cass because let’s just say he won’t be staying strong. Not in the least.
#MakeNahimTakeABreak
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