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    Ellette Giselle
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      @whalekeeper

      Oh, did you have a subplot POV on the side following the rescue?

      No, two of my side characters were spies and they kept reporting the enemy and allies movements back to the MC. Plus, at one point when the MC was captured two of the officers get a message and kind of act startled. They leave the room, but the reader hardly notices because I threw it in more a scenery feeling description rather than “hey look, the bad guy officer are leaving the room. wanna guess why?” So it’s there, but it’s subtle.

      Yep, I get this for a lot of deaths. I don’t mind chance survivals if they lead to interesting plot progressions, though. Like if a character survives a shipwreck by being picked up by a wild dragon, and dropped onto a fantastical island. That’s a lot more fun than the realistic death ending.

      Sure, but don’t put the hero into the climax and give him no training or resources to survive, and then he just magically wins.That’s what kill me.

       

      No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

      #198342
      whaley
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        @ellette-giselle

        and then he just magically wins.

        Hehe, I no longer get angry, just amused.

        "If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.

        #198358
        Loopy
        @loopylin
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          @theducktator

          Liko 

          Liko gratefully took the two cookies, feeling very spoiled. He had already been offered sweets by two different students, and he hadn’t even eaten breakfast yet. He thanked her again and then answered her question.

          “I think it’s nice here. I like my coworkers. Bit unpredictable though. Lots of different people from lots of different worlds, so things happen. But, the nice thing is you don’t have to worry about being a new kid. The number of students has nearly doubled since last year, so you’re not the only one. I’m sure you’ll make plenty of friends. You already got one.” He held up one of his cookies and gave her a smile.

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          #198364
          Ruth
          @rae
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            @loopylin

            Alpha’s reaction.

            I apologize to Dante ahead of time. I like you Dante, but Alpha is not a fan.

            Alpha

            Before Dante could get far, he was pinned against the wall in the hallway outside their room, Alpha’s finger’s wrapped around his throat. A red vapor was thinly veiling Alpha’s eyes. “Watch yourself, Dante. You may think you know a lot, but you don’t know the limits of my power. Never reveal how much you know about someone until you know everything.” Alpha squeezed harder in his last sentence, before releasing Dante. “Watch out. You’ve just labeled yourself as a possible threat. And I kill threats.” The vapor over his eyes deepened as he said ‘kill’. His message delivered, Alpha went back into their room, and closed the door.

             

             

            Hopefully Dante isn’t too upset.

            You need French Toast.
            #AnduthForever (💕)

            #198365
            Loopy
            @loopylin
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              @rae

              … May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

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              #198367
              whaley
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                *Munches popcorn and M&Ms*

                "If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.

                #198373
                Ellette Giselle
                @ellette-giselle
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                  @loopylin

                  … May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

                  Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.

                   

                  No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                  #198374
                  Ruth
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                    @loopylin

                    … May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

                    Alpha’s gonna be so mad lol

                    •  A pocket knife (are you surprised lol)
                    • some loose change
                    • some random things he picked up like an acorn probably (Strange new world, strange new things, random things in pockets)
                    • a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)

                    You need French Toast.
                    #AnduthForever (💕)

                    #198377
                    Loopy
                    @loopylin
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                      @rae

                      a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)

                      Aww cute <3

                      Hopefully Dante isn’t too upset.

                      Hehe, no, upset isn’t quite the right word. My boy’s got issues.

                       

                      Dante

                      Dante slumped to the ground, holding his throat and coughing. He sat there a while in the dimly lit hall, shoulders shaking as he tried to regain control of his breathing.

                      Gradually, though, the cough turned into a hoarse, uncontrolled laugh. A moment later he sat up, a half-grin on his face, and his pupil dilated like a cat’s in the dark. His heart pumped hard with adrenaline.

                      “Heh, I guess… that’s a nevermind… on having your sister fix my coat, then,” he managed between breaths.

                      Finally, he got himself shakily to his feet and slowly headed towards the exit. His pocket was heavy with the new pocketknife he’d taken as a goodbye gift.

                      It was a relief to be pushed away. They were getting too close, anyway. Too almost like friends. Dante felt lighter than he had in days, as if gravity had decreased on him.

                      He stepped out of the building and out into the street.

                      Nothing makes you feel more alive than a good ol’ death threat.

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                      #198409
                      Ellette Giselle
                      @ellette-giselle
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                        @rae

                        Alpha’s gonna be so mad lol

                        this is too good.

                         


                        @loopylin

                        I would’ve gone for the photo. Nothing like a good photo to hold hostage. 😉

                         

                        (side-note, I thought of putting something “official” in my signature like how you are the KP archivist, but then I got to thinking and realized I would be the official KP Sociopath, or trouble-maker, or serial killer. XD XD)

                        No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                        #198410
                        whaley
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                          @loopylin

                          Gradually, though, the cough turned into a hoarse, uncontrolled laugh. A moment later he sat up, a half-grin on his face, and his pupil dilated like a cat’s in the dark.

                          My heartbeat actually spiked when I read that

                          "If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.

                          #198414
                          Loopy
                          @loopylin
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                            @ellette-giselle Do you really kill off that many characters? XD

                            I would’ve gone for the photo. Nothing like a good photo to hold hostage. 😉

                            I guess my brain just doesn’t work like that. How could that be helpful?

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                            #198420
                            Ruth
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                              @ellette-giselle

                              Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.

                              Lol

                              You kidding me? The police have already tried to take Alpha (when he stabbed Jep and Chase went to the hospital) and well, Alpha hasn’t stepped foot in the station yet.

                              You need French Toast.
                              #AnduthForever (💕)

                              #198421
                              Ellette Giselle
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                                @loopylin

                                idk, KP actually glitched one time because highscribe called me such things so it blocked me for being a threat or something. I’m gonna look back and see what she said. I may end up doing it and scaring a few newbies.

                                 

                                Well, because the pocket knife is replaceable. Change isn’t too hard to come by. The picture….. well he can’t get another of those, and even if he could have it reprinted he knows that Dante has it. If Nar is his sister, he’s going to be furious that his new enemy is carrying around pictures of his sister. If Nar is a crush then he’s going to be really mad because it doesn’t seem like he would want everyone in kingdom come to know that he carries around her picture.

                                Plus, a flour fight that he lost doesn’t give him a good scary assassin, soldier, pointy-thing-thrower image.

                                *shrug*

                                 

                                That was everything that went through my head the few seconds I was reading.

                                No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                                #198442
                                Elishavet Elroi
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                                  @whoever @koshka

                                  I am once more on the infamous computer that does not do accent marks.  My darling is sad. He needs his daily dose of flair.

                                  Reuven

                                  Large, echoing corridors filled with rushing students and chatting staff swallowed Reuven up into their midst. He gripped the straps to his duffle and ducked by a group of arguing teens. The cacophony closed overhead. Fifty, a hundred voices mixing into a crushed ball of too many conversations.

                                  “Hurry, Ruwen, or we’ll be late!”

                                  “Paxton! It’s on the left here…”

                                  “Excuse me, I think I’m sick.”

                                  “Ma’am? Where did the World Civ class move too?”

                                  “We made it! Now time for…”

                                  “…A trashcan. Let’s see the nurse.”

                                  The doors to his own class appeared beside him. He ducked in with a sigh so deep it hurt.

                                  You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

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