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September 26, 2023 at 7:07 pm #157243
Lane
Lane watched as Ottoline cried. Not out of entertainment, but because he hadn’t seen anyone cry in a long time. It reminded him of the tears his friend River shed a long time ago. Why is she crying? She must be suffering… He quickly looked at all the others, and realized that Ottoline must be uncomfortable by his watching. He slowly and silently walked to a window and stared out at the rain and the darkness.
He briefly turned around to glance at all of the people in the room, and then walked towards the door. If anything, I will just step outside until everything is good. Ugh, but it is raining… perhaps it will stop.
He paused at the door to think a moment, turned the knob, and— N-No way. He attempted to turn it again. The door didn’t budge.
“It’s locked.” he muttered. How can it be locked? No one really touched it this whole time… Lane turned around and pressed his back to the door. He steadied his breathing to appear calm, but failed to stop his body from trembling.
Flaz: *yawns* Did the sun just come up? In the west?
September 26, 2023 at 7:10 pm #157245@everyone
*gasp*
I have the best idea for Amir’s rp! It has to do with Ottoline. I’ll write it tomorrow because I don’t have time rn.
Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende
September 26, 2023 at 7:27 pm #157247@savannah_grace2009 @mineralizedwritings @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcr
Hugo
It was awful to wake up, but even more awful to be woken up by a girl crying out in pain.
“Ottoline… Ottoline!” He said gently touching her shoulder, “are you alright?”
Her whole body was shaking with fright and tears began to slide down her face.
He was unsure what to do at first, she was crying so hard that he wanted to give her a hug, stroke her hair and tell her everything would be alright, but he also didn’t want to embarrass her anymore than she was.
Sobs continued to shake her body, she curled her knees to her chest and rocked back and forth on the floor. He timidly reached over, grabbed her hand and held it tight.
“Its going to be ok.” He said kindly, drawing her towards him. “Its ok.” He absentmindedly stroked her soft, strawberry blonde hair, ignoring the stares from all the others. After a few minutes her body relaxed and fell limp in his arms. He easily lifted her up and set her down on the couch. Her eyes slowly opened and studied him with curiosity. Seeing her glance at him her hurriedly tried to smooth his hair like he did hours before.“So…” he started awkwardly, “nightmare?”
The fear and pain in her eyes brought back a horrible memory into his mind that he wanted to forget forever, it brought tears to his eyes. “Don’t cry in front of a girl!” He thought angrily, “don’t cry, your to old, that was so long ago…” His eyes didn’t listen to his mind so he ran from the room.
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Hugo and Ottoline seem to have similar backstorys. Hugos entire family and his friends family got kidnapped by a horrible corporation (CHIME) and he has to find them with his friends. Maybe they should share backstorys? Once their up to it 🙂
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September 26, 2023 at 7:58 pm #157251
@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcrKaine
Kaine wanders over to the couch absentmindedly as Hugo rushes out of the room. Lifting his backpack off his shoulders, he slowly opens it to see a small furry face poking out. Kaine’s cat, fluffy, sleepily looks around the new environment as he lifts her from the bag.
“D-do you want to hold my cat? She… always helps me when I’m having a hard time…” He holds her out to Ottoline, waiting for permission to set her on her lap.
“She doesn’t bite… or scratch… I promise.” He smiles.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
September 26, 2023 at 9:08 pm #157255@mineralizedwritings @acancello @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcr
Oh my gosh guys…Ottoline’s story is so sad, reading it literally almost made me cry (and I wrote it)!
Lukas&Livia
#Lalbert
Sef&Chase
#HOTTOLINE
LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333September 26, 2023 at 9:26 pm #157256@mineralizedwritings @acancello @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcr
Ottoline
“It’s going to be okay,” Hugo said, his voice cracking. Ottoline barely even heard him. She could still hear Jraldath’s words echoing in her mind…worthless…stupid….ugly, she could still feel the jarring sensation as she hit the floor. It is not okay, she couldn’t tell if she screamed the words out loud or in her head. It will never be okay….
And then.
He held her hand.
He wanted her.
Someone wanted her.
He pulled her toward him, holding her as she sobbed.
She had never been held by anyone before.
She felt safe.
For the first time in a long time.
She could trust him.
She buried her face into his coat and just sat there.
She stopped shaking.
But the tears were still there.
And then his arms tightened around her waist as he lifted her back onto the couch.
She finally opened her eyes and looked at him, silent tears streaming from her own.
“So, nightmare?” he asked. Ottoline bit her lip. She wished it had been a nightmare. Nightmares can’t hurt you. But memories can.
She looked at him, wishing that they could stay like this forever.
His eyes filled with tears.
She wanted to hug him like he had held her.
But then he left her.
He ran away.
Maybe he didn’t want her after all.
She wanted to run after him.
But she didn’t.
Instead, she cried harder.
“Do you want to pet my cat?” she looked up and saw Kaine, fluffy white creature in hand. “She always helps me when I’m having a hard time. She doesn’t bite…or scratch, I promise.” He waited for her to reply, but Ottoline took the cat from his hands. It would never replace what she had lost, never make up for what she had been through. But maybe, she realized, it wasn’t supposed to.
What am I doing? The thought slapped her in the face. Hugo needed her, like she needed him, and she was sitting on the couch holding a cat, for goodness sake.
“Can I borrow your cat?” she sniffed. Kaine nodded slowly. “Just for a while.”
She stood up, slowly, afraid her trembling legs would give out from under her. For a moment she vividly felt Jraldath’s nails in her collarbone…but then she pushed past the thought. And then she began to walk in the direction that she had seen Hugo leave.
She found him, behind a pillar.
He was crying.
She sat down beside him.
She slipped her scarred hand in his.
And cried with him.
Lukas&Livia
#Lalbert
Sef&Chase
#HOTTOLINE
LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333September 26, 2023 at 9:28 pm #157257Yeah, that was kind of my plan that they could share each other’s stories!
Also, I love their “romance” they’re sooooo cute!!!
HOTTOLINE FOREVER!!!
Lukas&Livia
#Lalbert
Sef&Chase
#HOTTOLINE
LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333September 27, 2023 at 8:26 am #157266They are so sweet together!😭 💗 I think I’m going to share Hugos story in the next scene ill write later tonight, I feel so bad having his story told again, Its so sad!
Hottoline forever!!
This is literally the most adorable scene you wrote, I almost cried 🙂
She found him, behind a pillar.
He was crying.
She sat down beside him.
She slipped her scarred hand in his.
And cried with him.
This is such a good story so far! I’ll see if I can write more later today!
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September 27, 2023 at 10:00 am #157268Thanks! They are so sweet 😭
Lukas&Livia
#Lalbert
Sef&Chase
#HOTTOLINE
LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333September 27, 2023 at 7:09 pm #157308@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer
Hugo
Ottoline found him within minutes. She did really care for him, his eyes must have made her feel sorry for him. No, he didn’t want anyone to feel sorry for him. Ever.
He sat down by the pillar and tried to stop the tears as she came over, but it was too late, she saw them, and instead of teasing her like he expected, she sat down next to him, held his hand and cried with him.
After a while he managed to calm down. Never in his life had he ever seen someone with eyes like… her….
Ottoline looked up when he reached up to dry his eyes, not letting go of her hand though.
“I… I’m sorry,” He stammered, “you must think i’m a coward.”
Ottoline shook her head, listening intently.
“You look so much like…a friend… one I once had… Do you know what C.H.I.M.E is?”
“No.” Ottoline said, confused.He cleared his throat loudly, conscious that everyone was standing nearby, listening.
“Well. They are an evil and corrupt corporation. They kidnapped my whole family and my friends’ family. The four-five of us set out to find them. And then all the power went out. We crashed the car and their oldest brother got hurt, we had to leave him behind. It took us sixteen days to find them. And on the way there we met a ton of people, actors and actresses, cowboys and Vikii. Vikii was funny and carefree. When we got to C.H.I.M.E, she…she… she… risked her life for us and… and…” His voice broke and he buried his head in his knees.
“I’m sorry.” Ottoline said, “that must have been… awful.”
He lifted his tear stained face up, relieved how much better he felt after telling someone that.
He wrapped his arm around her waist and let her cry into his shoulder. He felt so alive and happy when she was around. That’s all he wanted right now. Someone who understood him and cared for him. And Otttoline was that.
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I stopped here in case you wanted to tell Ottolines story 🙂
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September 27, 2023 at 7:15 pm #157314@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcr
THE HOUSE
Teapots rattle in the cabinets. Kaine looks down as the floor shifts under his feet, wavering like water.
“Hello, new residents of this beautiful riverfront cabin. Excuse me, I’m flattering myself. “Who is this?”, you may ask?” A loud voice echoes from the walls, which rattle in tune. “I am the supposed owner of this property, which a few of you have been seeking. Or more of… I am the house. Yes, rather strange indeed!”
Kaine looks around at the other teenagers, all string with wide eyes.
“You may find the door to be locked! Yes yes, this won’t be easy for any of you. A series of challenges will await those who would like to leave… which I should assume a few of you will. The first of which… will be a masquerade party. Everyone who eventually wants to leave… must participate. You will find everything you could want for a party in the many rooms… maybe check the basement if the house has seemed… small so far. You will find that to be far from the truth.”
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
September 27, 2023 at 7:19 pm #157318That is so good! (Quick question: Is the house itself talking or dose someone have a hidden speaker or something like that?)
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September 27, 2023 at 8:36 pm #157323@acancello @mineralizedwritings @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @trailblazer @grcr
Ottoline
She knew that he was waiting for her to tell him her story. They all were. Her first instinct was to shove the memories away. But he had been vulnerable and shared his. And so she began.
Letting go of his hand, just for a moment, she brought her shaking hands out in front of her. She brought her left hand to her right, and traced the largest scar, the one that stretched from her upper arm to her little finger. She felt Hugo stiffen against her.
“What happened?” he breathed. Ottoline drew in a breath.
“Where I come from,” she began, “there are many races. There are Pitts, Estrellos, Azers, Aquinos, and worst of all, Pythonos. Paynes are half breeds between humans and these races.” She grabbed his hand again and he squeezed it as if giving her the courage to go through all this pain again. “My father was an Azer. That is why I have splotches of red on my skin, and red hair. The other part of me is human from my mother.” she paused. “Paynes…are looked down upon. They are treated like animals. And ever since the Pythonos took over, they have spread their lies that Paynes do not feel anything. They say that we do not have emotions, that we are beasts, like pests, and must be controlled. So they-” her voice broke. “They began taking all the Payne infants and experimenting on them.” She heard the others gasp in shock. Hugo only nodded. She could tell he understood. “I was taken as a baby and brought to their work camp where I was given to a woman who had lived there her whole life. She taught me how to speak, how to work, and most importantly, do what your told or else. The horrors there…I cannot even describe it. This scar-” she pointed to the largest one again, “was a punishment for when I missed roll call.”
“Oh, Ottoline,” Hugo wrapped his arms around her and held her, stroking her hair.
“And then I was moved to a place called the UNIT. It was where they carried out their experiments. They injected me with poisons to see if I would die or not. I never did…but I always wished I had. They cut my calf open to see how the muscles moved without giving me medicine or stiches or anything.” She stretched out her leg to show Hugo her scar. “They beat me…tortured me, reminded me that I was worthless, ugly, and would never be more than a failed experiment. And I-I believed them.”
Ottoline didn’t even realize she was crying until Hugo was wiping away her tears.
“You didn’t deserve that. No one would.” Ottoline looked at the floor. He grabbed her shoulders. “Look at me.” She did. “They lied to you. You-you are the best thing that ever happened to me, and you’re not worthless. To me, you mean the world.”
Ottoline started to cry again.
“Did I say something wrong?” His eyes looked concerned.
“No,” she whispered. “You said everything right.” He nodded and they sat together in silence.
And then the house began to shake.
Lukas&Livia
#Lalbert
Sef&Chase
#HOTTOLINE
LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333September 27, 2023 at 9:29 pm #157324Hm… we can go with speakers, whatever works.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
September 28, 2023 at 4:31 pm #157380It would be kind of cool if someone was talking over them and guiding them the whole time, and at the end, reveal themselves, but a talking house is pretty cool also! 😀
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