Enid

@hybridlore

True. I’m not denying that he isn’t young. He’s just not shockingly young. Especially in that age and culture, he’s considered a man and could have a family and kids.

Eric is still a kid in there eyes.

And no, i can’t change the age because i’d have to do rewrites in the first book and I don’t want to. lol. plus, that makies him…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, good point. Is there a way you could adjust his age, or is that set in stone?

Hmm… yeah, it could still work as a wake-up call, even if Asher’s not that young. To be honest, nineteen is pretty young to be executed though, especially if he (a.) wasn’t a soldier that betrayed their country, like Adrian, and (b.) has a young…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Hmm. I guess I was trying to cross over the LTBL goal into this without clearly stating that. It’s hard, because Joseph has a tendency to lean toward a survival mindset (no one can really blame him) and the story is his POV.

UGH, I can see the Eric thing both ways. I could still use his almost death as a “wakeup call” and it…[Read more]

@hybridlore

He’s not THAT young. Adrian was younger then him when he died.

@ellette-giselle

Hey, all the reasons people wanted to save Eric could apply to Asher too. He’s also young. He looks innocent… lol. Make them react more to both of them instead of just the younger one, maybe?

OR highlight how hurt Eric is by Asher’s death in front of the crowd. That’ll make them see how much it’s affecting families and hurting c…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Look, if you can get at least two more people on this forum to agree with you……….

@whalekeeper

lol, no problem

lololol

@hybridlore

Stop it.

Go away.

I literally have my finger hanging over the delete button for that scene.

@ellette-giselle

He can go with Joseph to that city!!! And be a missionary!!

Or he just continues as normal, except grieving for Asher… what does he even do right now? Go to school? Work? He could stay living with Sabina and the guys for a while.

@hybridlore

I don’t know……… what would I even do with him if he survived?

(Besides get him married and all that.)

@whalekeeper

Oh, my bad, I forgot about Marcel. Let’s just say Flare picked him up, carried him, and placed him down near Ben.

@ellette-giselle

IT’S OKAY! We’ll pretend it never happened. It will get lost in the KP forums forever…

@hybridlore

But I already submitted it this way. I can’t change it now, KP won’t let me edit that post……………

@ellette-giselle

HA! I actually have a chance?

Please, please, please…. 🙏 🥺 Think of all the scenes you could write!

Lolol

@hybridlore

Oh shut up.

You’re actually going to convince me to save him.

lolololol.

@ellette-giselle

That would make it more interesting, instead of just having more characters die off we’d get to see Eric struggling with his brother’s death.

@linus-smallprint

@hybridlore wants me to save Eric.

What are your thoughts?

@hybridlore

i don’t know.

Maybe.

I’ll think about it.

@ellette-giselle

No no no no no!!!!!! 😭😭😭 Why are you doing this to me, Ellette? 😢

Can’t you just… save Eric?? 😭 They said he could go free…